Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Debbie - ok sure glad you knew it wasn't a naani - you had me a bit confused till I got to your author notes. But since you know its not one - its still a well penned post just not a naani:)
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014

Believe me, I was confused too, obviously. Oh well, can't win them all. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, you captured spring and wrote it in this lovely poem! (It's my favorite time of year, too, and how beautifully you've described it!)

"Before long creatures will give birth..." << I immediately envisioned lambs, Debbie, and I SO enjoyed this part especially! I ALWAYS think of flowers, but the creatures are ESPECIALLY wonderful!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014

Thank you, Dawn. I am glad you enjoyed it. Spring hasn't quite arrived. We are getting snow again, lol, Debbie

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I can see that you are looking forward to the warmer weather! And what a wonderful poem to greet it, Debbie! It is eloquently written with exquisite language! The aabb rhyme is great, the rhythm meter is even. Blessings, Roy. Welcome back.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014

Thank you, my friend. I am glad you enjoyed it. Spring hasn't quite arrived. We are getting snow again, lol, Debbie

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Hi Debbie,

You're headed in the right direction, talking about spring, but we're expecting snow here again tomorrow! It shouldn't be long, though, till we see those lilac buds appear. I just hope they wait long enough; they've been "nipped" many times in past years.

Great poem, with good rhyme and meter and a positive message.

Hugs,
Lois

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

Comment from Gypsy Starchild

Excellent

Ending the long winter's cruel

I think that if you changed this line to:
Ending winter, long and cruel
would enhance the overall flow of this poem, otherwise it reads well and is quite beautiful. Happy Spring! :)

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

Comment from manicblue

Good

Hi Debbie,
I loved your poem but in counting each stanza, they go over 25 syllables. I thought it might supposed to be 25 words but they go over that in stanza one.
It's so good to have Spring back from this awful winter. Aren't you in Texas? I have another friend there and she said it's getting into the 80s or close.
Please take care. If you like, after fixing the syllable count, let me know and I'll change the rating to five. (or just change it to an aabb poem?)

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 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Lucretia. I guess 4 times 8 isn't 24 is it. I am removing it from the contest. Thanks for noticing that!!! No. I am in Iowa and it is freezing cold again today~Debbie

reply by manicblue on 23-Mar-2014

Oh Debbie, don't remove it - just cut a few words out should do the trick. Iowa? You poor thing. We lucked out (Georgia) but it's going to get a bit colder. The daffodils are blooming finally! Just hang in there. :)

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Never saw a stanza naani but it sure fits the bill. Lovely thoughts to hold on to until it actually materializes.
Lilac scent's will fragrance fresh air(nice example of alliteration.) good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Lovely and not far away. This summer will be a great one, I hope, for both of us. :)

Lilac scent's << SCENTS, no apostrophe since it is not possessive, only plural.

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 Comment Written 23-Mar-2014