(Dis)solution
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Comment from tfawcus
Would that nations would go through all of these steps first before resorting to the final solution. It's surprising how many disagreements can be sorted out amicably with words, with a social drink, with a playful shove or in the stylised format of the sports arena. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Would that nations would go through all of these steps first before resorting to the final solution. It's surprising how many disagreements can be sorted out amicably with words, with a social drink, with a playful shove or in the stylised format of the sports arena. Nicely written.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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I couldn't agree more, Tony, and I appreciate your understanding of the conceit of the poem. Cheers, my friend.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Well, you certainly don't come out against guns - which is fine with me. I like the pistol - looks well-worn.
Love the rhyming and the simplicity of your words. My kind of poetry.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Well, you certainly don't come out against guns - which is fine with me. I like the pistol - looks well-worn.
Love the rhyming and the simplicity of your words. My kind of poetry.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, my friend. Have a great day!
Comment from tony bronk
It is clear to me what you pretend to be saying here in your poem, and how you chose to say it. You show the evolution of the absurdity of the step by step process of violence, starting from a minor incident/action, to climaxing into the ultimate (the weapon-pistols.)It is absurd how man, without nearly being aware, builds himself into a frenzy enough to kill. Your acbd rhyme scheme worked well, and meters came off well, too.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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It is clear to me what you pretend to be saying here in your poem, and how you chose to say it. You show the evolution of the absurdity of the step by step process of violence, starting from a minor incident/action, to climaxing into the ultimate (the weapon-pistols.)It is absurd how man, without nearly being aware, builds himself into a frenzy enough to kill. Your acbd rhyme scheme worked well, and meters came off well, too.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Tony. You've nailed it, my friend. Much appreciated! David
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way to settle disagreement. i like colt better than smith and wesson..
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way to settle disagreement. i like colt better than smith and wesson..
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, my friend. As always, I appreciate it.
Comment from Glasstruth
Great rhyming throughout. It doesn't get in the way of the poem. Actually, it adds to it. There's so many rhymesters just rhyming. Yours is different. The message is awesome. Love the ending verse! Les
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Great rhyming throughout. It doesn't get in the way of the poem. Actually, it adds to it. There's so many rhymesters just rhyming. Yours is different. The message is awesome. Love the ending verse! Les
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Les, I really appreciate that, my friend. Thanks so much for that sixer and for your very kind words.
Comment from J. P. Egry
Aside from the fact that there is great tongue-in-cheek satire in the content of this poem, it is meticulously written for maximum effect. The meter and rhyme of the quatrains are perfect and zip the poem right along as it escalates (just like the disagreements it portrays). I think you have a winner here, and you didn't even enter it in a contest! Love reading it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Aside from the fact that there is great tongue-in-cheek satire in the content of this poem, it is meticulously written for maximum effect. The meter and rhyme of the quatrains are perfect and zip the poem right along as it escalates (just like the disagreements it portrays). I think you have a winner here, and you didn't even enter it in a contest! Love reading it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you again, J.P. I really appreciate that so much, my friend.
Comment from sunnilicious
Assassination weapons.... you going Africa? (That's a joke... haha).
Good poetic form. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good visual imagery. Expressive. Good work. And just to let you know... Colt and Smith & Wesson don't advertise guns anymore.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Assassination weapons.... you going Africa? (That's a joke... haha).
Good poetic form. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good visual imagery. Expressive. Good work. And just to let you know... Colt and Smith & Wesson don't advertise guns anymore.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Ha! Thanks, Sunni. I think I'll pass. It's the Wild West out there. Many thanks, and yes, I was aware of the advertising changes.
Comment from amahra
LOL Leave it to a man to fun something humorous with a gun. I love it. Your profile picture and the guns makes you the modern American cowboy. I thought the poem rhymed really well and didn't sound forced. And the rhythm was very musical. Great job, my new poet friend.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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LOL Leave it to a man to fun something humorous with a gun. I love it. Your profile picture and the guns makes you the modern American cowboy. I thought the poem rhymed really well and didn't sound forced. And the rhythm was very musical. Great job, my new poet friend.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, my friend, for that sixer and for the great review. I really appreciate it!
Comment from Tatarka2
No, I totally understood the irony of it. The rhyming was perfect, and once again I'm in awe of your ability to write in iambic pentameter and still create a relevant, meaningful poem that addresses an important issue in social relations.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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No, I totally understood the irony of it. The rhyming was perfect, and once again I'm in awe of your ability to write in iambic pentameter and still create a relevant, meaningful poem that addresses an important issue in social relations.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Tatarka! I really appreciate your great review and kind words.
Comment from michaelcahill
Ha! There may be here in some quarters, but I would expect a lifetime membership in the NRA in the mail. Ted Nugent's rockin' version of this is goin' viral as we speak!! A great issue to distract me from searching for Randy Newman seeking an apology for insulting me and my fellow "short people". Great piece. (pun intended) mikey
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Ha! There may be here in some quarters, but I would expect a lifetime membership in the NRA in the mail. Ted Nugent's rockin' version of this is goin' viral as we speak!! A great issue to distract me from searching for Randy Newman seeking an apology for insulting me and my fellow "short people". Great piece. (pun intended) mikey
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Many thanks, my friend, for your unique review and great spirit, Mikey.