Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Empty garbage cans/ Empty cans, garbage

Will not win Good Housekeeping's /will not win Good Housekeeping's

Seal of Approval /seal of approval
Empty garbage cans - gives me to think of bins empty of garbage.
Restructure and this has relevance to a good Senryu.
Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thank you for the insightful and constructive comments, rating and good wishes,

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I like this poem it sends a good message as well put litter in the bin and keep our country green good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

You are welcome and I thank you for the great review of this one.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Empty garbage cans
Will not win Good Housekeeping's
Seal of Approval

I liked this senryu. It met the syllable count parameter's and told a story about the level the magazine has with the public.

Nicely done, John

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

And if those cans aren't used... yuk...no-one will get an award for all that pollution..

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an interesting bit of satire about garbage cans and the lack of use thereof. Form and syllable count are correct according to contest rules. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thanks Jeanie, I appreciate your understanding of the senryu and the fine review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count
you make a point about the need to actually use garbage cans if they are to help beautify our landscape
good concrete imagery in Good's Housekeeping's seal adds to the humor of your social commentary
Brooke

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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thanks Brooke, I am glad you found this one humorous and a suitable senryu. :-)

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A well-penned senryu;
Don't know why individuals can't make use of garbage receptacles, it doesn't take great effort to throw used wrappers into one;
All of these roadside dumps are not environmentally friendly either.
I like your poem, mystery writer--well stated.

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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

I enjoyed your kind review and agree whole-heartedly. Thank you
:-)