Those Parents
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Comment from livelylinda
Author: You have described a sight that I occasionally see, too. "Back in the day" that was never seen. I would be buried underneath the house and never lived this long if I had ever acted that way as a kid. I was taught appropriate table manners, manners for public (which were the same at home), manners for church, and the fear of God's wrath if I didn't behave. When I was three years old, my grandparents took me to my great-uncles funeral. While seated and waiting for the service to begin, I saw something which I thought funny and giggled a little. I was never allowed to forget that mistake. My grandmother made me pay for that innocent breach of manners until she died when I was age 28. Now, those days were too strict and I lightened up on guiding my daughters. However, they knew better than to act that way. About the writing of this poem, it follows in good order and is easy to read. It captured my attention and kept it until the end. I'm not sure about the rules of this contest, but it is easier to find all those 'have to use' words if you capitalize them within your story. Nice work. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Author: You have described a sight that I occasionally see, too. "Back in the day" that was never seen. I would be buried underneath the house and never lived this long if I had ever acted that way as a kid. I was taught appropriate table manners, manners for public (which were the same at home), manners for church, and the fear of God's wrath if I didn't behave. When I was three years old, my grandparents took me to my great-uncles funeral. While seated and waiting for the service to begin, I saw something which I thought funny and giggled a little. I was never allowed to forget that mistake. My grandmother made me pay for that innocent breach of manners until she died when I was age 28. Now, those days were too strict and I lightened up on guiding my daughters. However, they knew better than to act that way. About the writing of this poem, it follows in good order and is easy to read. It captured my attention and kept it until the end. I'm not sure about the rules of this contest, but it is easier to find all those 'have to use' words if you capitalize them within your story. Nice work. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. yes the world has changed in the last generation or two.
Comment from mauial
And all to familiar scene nowadays and part to blame is Child Protective Services who would throw your ass in jail for spanking the bottom of an unruly child. If you were like me you got a spanking for being naughty and it didn't kill us. I like the humor you put into this piece a lot.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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And all to familiar scene nowadays and part to blame is Child Protective Services who would throw your ass in jail for spanking the bottom of an unruly child. If you were like me you got a spanking for being naughty and it didn't kill us. I like the humor you put into this piece a lot.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. Yes, DCFS started as a good idea, but like most Gov't ventures went south fast.
Comment from Aiona
LOL! I love their cheesy biscuits too. Man, that could have been an ad for their cheesy biscuits. But anyway. It also sounds like my son the other day at the Pancake House, except he didn't say "bitch" and we got up and left so other patrons could enjoy their dinner. I swear, he has ADHD like his mommy. But anyway, I hope you got some eventually.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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LOL! I love their cheesy biscuits too. Man, that could have been an ad for their cheesy biscuits. But anyway. It also sounds like my son the other day at the Pancake House, except he didn't say "bitch" and we got up and left so other patrons could enjoy their dinner. I swear, he has ADHD like his mommy. But anyway, I hope you got some eventually.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. They are good aren't they. I wish I could make them myself.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Reality writing. Bravo to FanStory for providing therapy! Otherwise, I think we would all become drunks, addicts or breaking commandments. I logged on to Facebook and three of the first posts I read were about marriages. I considered sharing, but then reconsidered. So far it was only about three, but had I shared probably most who read would be sure it was about theirs. This is my first read on this site this morning. I think I will just pray. At least you can impart some humor! This one is going to be hard to top. I wish you the best. You deserve it.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Reality writing. Bravo to FanStory for providing therapy! Otherwise, I think we would all become drunks, addicts or breaking commandments. I logged on to Facebook and three of the first posts I read were about marriages. I considered sharing, but then reconsidered. So far it was only about three, but had I shared probably most who read would be sure it was about theirs. This is my first read on this site this morning. I think I will just pray. At least you can impart some humor! This one is going to be hard to top. I wish you the best. You deserve it.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed. I meant for it to be fun. I really appreciate the great review.
Comment from joann r romei
I forgot this was a prompt and thought it was true, I enjoyed this and feel for just about everyone in the story, except the bratty kid.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I forgot this was a prompt and thought it was true, I enjoyed this and feel for just about everyone in the story, except the bratty kid.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you. No, I've seen this, but the tale was fiction.
Comment from Sylvia Page
This is a beautiful story of everyday life. You have cleverly used every word very well and made your story flow good.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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This is a beautiful story of everyday life. You have cleverly used every word very well and made your story flow good.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Sylvia.
Comment from Clancy25
I like your title. Makes you want to read your story. You hold the reader's interest in your style of writing. I was just about to log off and seen your title. I'm glad I read it. It was very humorous, made me laugh, and you are a very good story teller. I have seen this happen many times in a restaurant and it is very true to form. Your dialogue was excellent.
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I like your title. Makes you want to read your story. You hold the reader's interest in your style of writing. I was just about to log off and seen your title. I'm glad I read it. It was very humorous, made me laugh, and you are a very good story teller. I have seen this happen many times in a restaurant and it is very true to form. Your dialogue was excellent.
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. I'm glad it brought you back.
Comment from Petriesan
good luck in the contest. You describe a real-life series of events. but it has gotten anymore that disciplining a child in public wil get all sorts of things said. . .
good piece
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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good luck in the contest. You describe a real-life series of events. but it has gotten anymore that disciplining a child in public wil get all sorts of things said. . .
good piece
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from SandraKay
I could just she that little "brat" acting out like that. I have witnessed bad behavior before, but that takes the cake. I think the parents need a waking up. I like the humor twist you put to the story. My favorite line: "do you limp!" lol Great piece of work.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I could just she that little "brat" acting out like that. I have witnessed bad behavior before, but that takes the cake. I think the parents need a waking up. I like the humor twist you put to the story. My favorite line: "do you limp!" lol Great piece of work.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much. I liked that too. I wanted to show what a little discipline can do. I really appreciate the great review.