Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Wildlife Walks"The clue is in the title!
20 total reviews
Comment from krys123
A well written Whitney poem which conveys the educational value of walking in the countryside. You formulated the lines correctly for a Whitney poem and demonstrated how original, genuine and creative you are confined to that such a restricted rules. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one in God bless.
Alec/AK
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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A well written Whitney poem which conveys the educational value of walking in the countryside. You formulated the lines correctly for a Whitney poem and demonstrated how original, genuine and creative you are confined to that such a restricted rules. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one in God bless.
Alec/AK
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you Alex for your lovely response to my whitney :) I'm glad that you enjoyed it! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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You are so welcome Debra
Comment from Aaron James
Hi Debra
Well you've done it again, girl. Not sure about squeezing in 'ma' (not very dialect is it lol) but the rhyme is strong and the final line is a clincher for me. I do like free stuff!
Best of luck with the contest.
Aaron x
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi Debra
Well you've done it again, girl. Not sure about squeezing in 'ma' (not very dialect is it lol) but the rhyme is strong and the final line is a clincher for me. I do like free stuff!
Best of luck with the contest.
Aaron x
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi Aaron :) Thanks for the great review... sorry about the 'Ma' (a bit Emmerdale!) but I had to adhere to the 3 syllable count for that line! Thanks for the good luck wishes too :) Kindest regards as always, Debs x
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Whoops, I meant 4 syllables - anyway, that's why I had to throw 'Ma' in!
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haha! You beat me to the punch. I was about to correct you.
Aaron x
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lol!
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Nature walks are great family outings. It is getting harder and harder to find nature spots. It is also hard for parents to find the time. But it is well worth the effort. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Nature walks are great family outings. It is getting harder and harder to find nature spots. It is also hard for parents to find the time. But it is well worth the effort. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi nelliesellie :) Thank you for your lovely review and good luck wishes, I appreciate both. We are lucky enough to have some great countryside near us so nature walks are a regular thing for us :) Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from lancellot
Not an easy form to master and write in but you have done a great job with it. Your count is perfect and your message is clear and strong. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Not an easy form to master and write in but you have done a great job with it. Your count is perfect and your message is clear and strong. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you lancellot for your great review. I appreciate your comments :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It seems so easy to write these Whitney's when I read yours, but they are not at all! I find them really hard. You have written a lovely Whitney that not only is beautiful to read, it rhymes perfectly too!! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
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It seems so easy to write these Whitney's when I read yours, but they are not at all! I find them really hard. You have written a lovely Whitney that not only is beautiful to read, it rhymes perfectly too!! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Ah, thanks Sandra for your lovely review and good luck wishes :) I find them hard too.... it's the 3 syllable lines that throw me off.... but I got there in the end lol! Glad you liked it :) Love, Debra x
Comment from Erik McGinley
Maw would have worked. And if it was not a Whitney I think Mother would have got in there too.
Reads like an advert in a way. But an advert for something that should be more advertised imo.
Nice poem.
Also, nice face. You look like you genuinely like nature. Thumbs up there! :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Maw would have worked. And if it was not a Whitney I think Mother would have got in there too.
Reads like an advert in a way. But an advert for something that should be more advertised imo.
Nice poem.
Also, nice face. You look like you genuinely like nature. Thumbs up there! :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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LOL! I like your review, you made me smile! Thank you for your great comments, kindest regards, Debra :) ps. I do like nature, but my noisy kids usually frighten it away before I have chance to get a proper look at it!
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Get their grampa to tell them interesting stories about trees and wildlife. Or fill in on that yourself.
Worked for me every time and is one reason why I love our country side so much :)
Comment from resilke
simple and to the point. The images are captured well. I like your dialect and word choice. Well composed and tight; good construction. A lot is said in a few lines. It captured my attention. Good images and ideas
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simple and to the point. The images are captured well. I like your dialect and word choice. Well composed and tight; good construction. A lot is said in a few lines. It captured my attention. Good images and ideas
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hello :) Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed my whitney! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the very beautiful picture Wildlife walks;So much to see,
educational (and free!)like a trip of beauty excellently penned vision
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from the very beautiful picture Wildlife walks;So much to see,
educational (and free!)like a trip of beauty excellently penned vision
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi Darkhorse :) Thank you so much for your lovely comments - I'm glad that you enjoyed my whitney! Kindest regards, Debra x
Comment from MommaT
I like the invite and the playfulness of this. Your format is correct. I do not know if I would have used such stand out punctuation since this is such a short poem. Putting emphasis on the (free) I think takes away from the beauty of your simplicity which I believe would be important if this is to be intended for children to read. Having said this I am talking about structure, this by no means takes away from the meaning and tone set by your words. Which i do love.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I like the invite and the playfulness of this. Your format is correct. I do not know if I would have used such stand out punctuation since this is such a short poem. Putting emphasis on the (free) I think takes away from the beauty of your simplicity which I believe would be important if this is to be intended for children to read. Having said this I am talking about structure, this by no means takes away from the meaning and tone set by your words. Which i do love.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi MommaT, thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review - I really appreciate your comments and am glad that you enjoyed the poem. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Val Crisson
What a cute entry for the Whitney contest. I almost entered, but felt too lazy today. This could be an add for a State Park. Very clever and well presented - the last line is priceless.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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What a cute entry for the Whitney contest. I almost entered, but felt too lazy today. This could be an add for a State Park. Very clever and well presented - the last line is priceless.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi Val :) Thank you for your lovely review, glad you liked the poem... the photo I used is of my husband and youngest daughter :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
ps. There's still a place left in the contest and 1day 5 hrs to submit an entry... maybe you'll feel less lazy tomorrow!!
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Ha, Debra, I'd probably get my "butt paddled" I've read some good ones. LOL
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There's some definite contenders for sure...!