To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Stiletto Heel"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from nelliesellie
I found the title very interesting. These heels were designed with men in mind. I am always eager to get a man's point of view on them. You did not disappoint me. Lets hope this hell never goes out of fashion. Great work.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I found the title very interesting. These heels were designed with men in mind. I am always eager to get a man's point of view on them. You did not disappoint me. Lets hope this hell never goes out of fashion. Great work.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Yes. I'm short so it looks cute when my girl towers over me in her heels. ha! mikey
Comment from CR Delport
I can never wear those things. I will break my neck. I suppose I am too much of a tomboy :) Thanks for sharing another great poem.
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I can never wear those things. I will break my neck. I suppose I am too much of a tomboy :) Thanks for sharing another great poem.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Me neither! mikey
Comment from Cookie333
What an incredibly painful way to get noticed Mike, ouch! I think I might 'walk' a different way next time. Quite a unique image of this man. I found it to be a great analogy of falling for 'someone'
thanks Mike
karen
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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What an incredibly painful way to get noticed Mike, ouch! I think I might 'walk' a different way next time. Quite a unique image of this man. I found it to be a great analogy of falling for 'someone'
thanks Mike
karen
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Yes, painful. But, to get noticed!! Yea! mikey
Comment from Paul Sienicki
Mikey, a truly elegant and profound piece of literature you have posted here. I love how your portray the weakness of manly heart and yet this weakness gives such power to us. BUt often this feeling of power, this love hurts us by piercing our eyes. But what the heck, at least we have been noticed, at least for a while we have been in the centre of the universe, and the rest doesn't matter. This is my reflection and interpretation of your interpretation on these human only human phenomena.
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Mikey, a truly elegant and profound piece of literature you have posted here. I love how your portray the weakness of manly heart and yet this weakness gives such power to us. BUt often this feeling of power, this love hurts us by piercing our eyes. But what the heck, at least we have been noticed, at least for a while we have been in the centre of the universe, and the rest doesn't matter. This is my reflection and interpretation of your interpretation on these human only human phenomena.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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This is so wonderful to hear. You are right on the money. I am delighted that you understood my piece perfectly. That is so very encouraging to me. A wonderful thoughtful review that makes me want to write! Thank you kindly. mikey
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This is so wonderful to hear. You are right on the money. I am delighted that you understood my piece perfectly. That is so very encouraging to me. A wonderful thoughtful review that makes me want to write! Thank you kindly. mikey
Comment from mfowler
I've experimented with these free verse structures with little success. I think this works to the advantage of the poem. Your words kind of creep up on me the reader(maybe it's the layout), leading to that last pathetic crescendo when she notices you (oh, been there, how sad!). I think that reference to the stilleto heel piercing your eye is brilliant. It encapsulates just what unrequited love/lust can do to you in an image imbued with sensuality, untouchableness (not a word, I know!), and cruelty. Yeah, the changing situation and the reflections and the varied locations along the way do demand some sectioning to give them power. Yes the structure helps. Forgive my ramblings.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I've experimented with these free verse structures with little success. I think this works to the advantage of the poem. Your words kind of creep up on me the reader(maybe it's the layout), leading to that last pathetic crescendo when she notices you (oh, been there, how sad!). I think that reference to the stilleto heel piercing your eye is brilliant. It encapsulates just what unrequited love/lust can do to you in an image imbued with sensuality, untouchableness (not a word, I know!), and cruelty. Yeah, the changing situation and the reflections and the varied locations along the way do demand some sectioning to give them power. Yes the structure helps. Forgive my ramblings.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I was thinking about this the other day. This style goes all the way back to the sixties when I first started writing poetry. The books I bought were filled with poems in this style. Words were all over the page and going in circles, really out there style wise. So, I have always written this way. It is a kind of outline in my mind when I am writing. The line on the right being the prominent thought and then words that speak about it indented and words that speak about lines that are indented further indented. Sometimes a phrase or word will be placed for emphases. A simple one would be the word "alone" placed off by itself. It comes naturally to me after all these years so, hopefully it doesn't come off too affected. ha! That is the most that I have ever thought about it! Never think that you can out ramble me. hahaha. I appreciate your insightful review. Poetry really is fascinating. I love this site. I have learned an amazing amount of new forms and ideas here. Thank you for the great review. Much appreciated. mikey
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And I thought my review sounded kind of artsy, somewhat introspective, thoughtful in the most creative ways. And you call it rambling! Never challenge a rambler to a rambling. You may never get to bed if your rambler is a gambler, who likes to get inside your head.
Thanks for your rambling and kind response. I think I just reviewed a reply to a review!
Comment from Sueellen11
Oh my a stiletto in the eye oh boy painfully,,,how I love my stilettos still has a couple not real high but wee smaller I can't walk in them any more,,, great write a newbie or an oldie,, anyways a heel in the eye to get noticed,, that's sad Micky,,, blessings,,sueellen
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Oh my a stiletto in the eye oh boy painfully,,,how I love my stilettos still has a couple not real high but wee smaller I can't walk in them any more,,, great write a newbie or an oldie,, anyways a heel in the eye to get noticed,, that's sad Micky,,, blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Oh, this one? This is newer. I kind of have either pre 1974 or post 1999. I barely wrote a thing between 74 thru 99. So, young mikey or less young mikey. hahaha.
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Sorry I thought it was an oldie as I wore my stilettos back in 70/80 ,, but they are coming back now,,not the great court stiletto but very nice all the same,,, but this old ducks back can't handle the height can't get a nose bleed,, ha ha ha,,blessings,,sue
Comment from Sankey
Loved it yet again! I think I must be the top fan of your stuff mate. We are probably both strange but you have done a lot more than I have so great work again.
NO SPAGS ALL GOOD!
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Loved it yet again! I think I must be the top fan of your stuff mate. We are probably both strange but you have done a lot more than I have so great work again.
NO SPAGS ALL GOOD!
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Naw. We're fine. They're all strange!! mikey
Comment from phoenix13447
Wow, how devastatingly sad and how ably you transmitted the pathos. I know I am supposed to say more but truly this poem is so outspoken it needs no other words.
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Wow, how devastatingly sad and how ably you transmitted the pathos. I know I am supposed to say more but truly this poem is so outspoken it needs no other words.
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Silly rule isn't it? ha! I often just want to put one word. Like, WOW or something. But, of course, we have to add something about the weather too. I am delighted fully by the first line alone. Thank you so much, mikey