Ode to Autumn (5-7-5)
Autumn casts her spell19 total reviews
Comment from Preston McWhorter
This is an excellent ode, a tribute to autumn, with the 5-7-5 syllable constraints. It has beautiful figurative language and imagery. The illustration is good also.
Prestion
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This is an excellent ode, a tribute to autumn, with the 5-7-5 syllable constraints. It has beautiful figurative language and imagery. The illustration is good also.
Prestion
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from annatberry
I loved your poem. Great job, your expression and feelings was said in just a few words. You really did a wonderful job in showing your passion and feelings in your writing.
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I loved your poem. Great job, your expression and feelings was said in just a few words. You really did a wonderful job in showing your passion and feelings in your writing.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello
What an ode! The picture complements the ode as well. Good imagery and I find nothing to fault with. It conforms to all the contest requirements. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
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Hello
What an ode! The picture complements the ode as well. Good imagery and I find nothing to fault with. It conforms to all the contest requirements. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from Brocha1
beautiful. This perfectly suits the ode style. i love the way you are talking to Autumn, as if you are serenading her. placing yourself inside your writing is very effective here.
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beautiful. This perfectly suits the ode style. i love the way you are talking to Autumn, as if you are serenading her. placing yourself inside your writing is very effective here.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from Ben Colder
Yes , great poem. Very nice ode to a season that I love. Your poem is in the guide line and I see no fault. Well done poet. Luck in the contest.
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Yes , great poem. Very nice ode to a season that I love. Your poem is in the guide line and I see no fault. Well done poet. Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from rouskin
who knew thy beauty,
Autumn, would transfix my gaze
and transform my soul
Very emotional impact of your autumn. I think it's a strong contestant. Good luck.
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who knew thy beauty,
Autumn, would transfix my gaze
and transform my soul
Very emotional impact of your autumn. I think it's a strong contestant. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a well done effort to bring the 5-7-5 and the ode form together. An ode does indeed call for a "lofty, lyrical and elevated style." You met the syllable count correctly as well. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a well done effort to bring the 5-7-5 and the ode form together. An ode does indeed call for a "lofty, lyrical and elevated style." You met the syllable count correctly as well. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from ronnie k
Well done then, and let me say I wish I had the words to speak the joy, happy and loving feeling at get at the changing of the seasons.
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Well done then, and let me say I wish I had the words to speak the joy, happy and loving feeling at get at the changing of the seasons.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
Comment from rama devi
This certainly qualifies as lofty in tone as befitting an ode an it is true to form for this particular contest as well as finely presented. Nice alliteration on B and T. transfix is such a great word choice here. My only suggestion is to consider not using the word WOULD twice--two lines in a row. Suggest replacing the last one with AND.
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
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This certainly qualifies as lofty in tone as befitting an ode an it is true to form for this particular contest as well as finely presented. Nice alliteration on B and T. transfix is such a great word choice here. My only suggestion is to consider not using the word WOULD twice--two lines in a row. Suggest replacing the last one with AND.
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013