Mike Radshaw and the Black Dawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "To Kill a Mocking Radshaw - BD7"The grim reaper casts his pall over London
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed the read. Once again you amaze me with your descriptions and characterization. You do a very good job. I felt like I was part of the scenes.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I enjoyed the read. Once again you amaze me with your descriptions and characterization. You do a very good job. I felt like I was part of the scenes.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Barbara :-). I think Mr Radshaw's one of mu more defined characters and I'm sure that aids the narrative, especially in first person writing. I'm in the last chapter now. Feels quite sad!
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
A mesmerizing read Mike, I hung on your every word mate, the visuals were Guillermo Del Toro/malevolence laced insanity and the dialogue was Pulp Fiction fused with Event Horizon,it just doesn't get any better mate. Loved every word, every scene every f/n thing about that chapter :) You know I'd SIX you if I could mate! But as always I've giving you your lot all ready, that's how much I enjoy reading you and yours Mike:)
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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A mesmerizing read Mike, I hung on your every word mate, the visuals were Guillermo Del Toro/malevolence laced insanity and the dialogue was Pulp Fiction fused with Event Horizon,it just doesn't get any better mate. Loved every word, every scene every f/n thing about that chapter :) You know I'd SIX you if I could mate! But as always I've giving you your lot all ready, that's how much I enjoy reading you and yours Mike:)
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Lol, thanks so much, Hitch. That was an intense chapter to write. Now I'm in the concluding part and it feels a bit sad to be ending the tale. I love Event Horizon - one of my faves. Saw Riddick at the weekend. Critics gave it one star but I thought it was brilliant. A return to the moody, dark threat and intensity of Pitch Black.
Mike
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Yea, Riddick comes out tomorrow over here so I've seen the previews, I"ll be seeing it at the flicks for sure! I loved Pitch Black when I saw it for the first time... it's part of my ever expanding movie collection might have to watch it again before I go see :) Hitch
Comment from adewpearl
love the chapter title :-)
I love your similes, as always - such as the molten marshmallow...
vivid, mood-creating detail of setting
Thunder shook the ground from beneath me, and - I added the comma
I'm laughing at the humor in the "Dude" passage LOL
coughed a thick splatter of clotted blood - I can always count on you for some gruesome gore :-)
grip, yank, drag - great use of high-impact verbs in the action sequences
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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love the chapter title :-)
I love your similes, as always - such as the molten marshmallow...
vivid, mood-creating detail of setting
Thunder shook the ground from beneath me, and - I added the comma
I'm laughing at the humor in the "Dude" passage LOL
coughed a thick splatter of clotted blood - I can always count on you for some gruesome gore :-)
grip, yank, drag - great use of high-impact verbs in the action sequences
Brooke
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Brooke! Poor old Mike's taken a beating on this case hasn't he? He's always got sarcasm yo bolster him though, and see him through the bad times. Glad you liked the humour, and thank you for the catch :-).
Mike
Comment from lindalcreel
I love this character, Mike Radshaw. This chapter has everything - humor,(I laughed out loud), intrigue and suspense, a battle between good and evil and at last the chance to rescue the unknowing child. I have to think Mr Black used the sugar to coax the child in some way. The writing is brilliant and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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I love this character, Mike Radshaw. This chapter has everything - humor,(I laughed out loud), intrigue and suspense, a battle between good and evil and at last the chance to rescue the unknowing child. I have to think Mr Black used the sugar to coax the child in some way. The writing is brilliant and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Linda :-). He's a lot of fun to write, if a bit tiring at times. It feels good to be getting to the conclusion of this tale. I'm thrilled you're enjoying it!
Mike
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Thank you, Linda :-). He's a lot of fun to write, if a bit tiring at times. It feels good to be getting to the conclusion of this tale. I'm thrilled you're enjoying it!
Mike
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I love it; especially the humor. It's genius to take such a serious subject and interject humor everywhere. I'm sorry that this is coming to an end, but look forward to the next project.
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Welocme:)
Comment from Sasha
Oh my God! What a marvelously twisted mind you have--and I mean that as a compliment too. This is my first review this morning and I now need to go to Constansa's for a decent cup of coffee and contemplate all of this. This is the best, scaryiest, and most disgusting chapter I have ever read--again a compliment. Waiting for the last chapter will most definitely be agony, but what choice do I have?
Your descriptions are hysterical and I listed a few below:
"As first visits to hell go," I mumbled, "this has certainly made an impression." ...great line!
The air here wafted against my face like a thousand dog farts...this one made me spew coffee all over my computer screen...
What a numpty..that has to be a made up word, but I love it and have added it to my new-word vocabulary list...
Patron Saint of paedophiles...just spewed coffee all over my keyboard.
I am completely out of 6's but that's okay. This deserves a 10 and they don't let us give them out.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Oh my God! What a marvelously twisted mind you have--and I mean that as a compliment too. This is my first review this morning and I now need to go to Constansa's for a decent cup of coffee and contemplate all of this. This is the best, scaryiest, and most disgusting chapter I have ever read--again a compliment. Waiting for the last chapter will most definitely be agony, but what choice do I have?
Your descriptions are hysterical and I listed a few below:
"As first visits to hell go," I mumbled, "this has certainly made an impression." ...great line!
The air here wafted against my face like a thousand dog farts...this one made me spew coffee all over my computer screen...
What a numpty..that has to be a made up word, but I love it and have added it to my new-word vocabulary list...
Patron Saint of paedophiles...just spewed coffee all over my keyboard.
I am completely out of 6's but that's okay. This deserves a 10 and they don't let us give them out.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, my friend :-). I love to know my attempts at humour aren't in vain. Numpty is a very London word and sits alongside Muppet, Nonce and Twat as old-school put-downs. It does have a great ring to it, doesn't it? I hope the conclusion won't be an anti-climax.
Mike
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Thanks so much, my friend :-). I love to know my attempts at humour aren't in vain. Numpty is a very London word and sits alongside Muppet, Nonce and Twat as old-school put-downs. It does have a great ring to it, doesn't it? I hope the conclusion won't be an anti-climax.
Mike
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I doubt that's possible.
Comment from Isabella Thorne
well done. this is an excellent continuation of a story line that seems to be coming along nicely. It seems to have deep undertones to the story and that takes a strong writer. Good luck
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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well done. this is an excellent continuation of a story line that seems to be coming along nicely. It seems to have deep undertones to the story and that takes a strong writer. Good luck
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, Isabella. I'm glad you enjoyed reading, and were able to pick up the threads despite not reading other chapters. Thank you for stopping by.
Mike
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Thanks very much, Isabella. I'm glad you enjoyed reading, and were able to pick up the threads despite not reading other chapters. Thank you for stopping by.
Mike
Comment from Cookie333
Only one left???? Oh man! I am really gettin' into this one! I shall hope for one Hell of an ending then. I wonder what evil lurks beyond the blackness of the void?
thank you
karen
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Only one left???? Oh man! I am really gettin' into this one! I shall hope for one Hell of an ending then. I wonder what evil lurks beyond the blackness of the void?
thank you
karen
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Karen :-). This Radshaw tale was going to be '2 or 3' chapters when I started it, lol. I will be editing and reissuing earlier Mike Radshaw stories once I've finished this. I'm thinking of publishing them as a collection.
Mike
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THAT would be a great idea. Your voice is so very unique, I enjoy the sarcastic humor...
karen