Last Breath
2nd place winner12 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Excellent entry for this challenging contest. This conveys a strong aphoristic-style query that causes readers to think an ponder upon impermanence.
Each breath is precious, for sure.
Good luck in the contest.
I like the way your first and last single-word lines start with the same letter.
The artwork matches well, too.
Warmly, rd
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Excellent entry for this challenging contest. This conveys a strong aphoristic-style query that causes readers to think an ponder upon impermanence.
Each breath is precious, for sure.
Good luck in the contest.
I like the way your first and last single-word lines start with the same letter.
The artwork matches well, too.
Warmly, rd
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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you are most kind. thank you for your very encouraging words.
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Comment from chromeangel33
You have written a haiku that everyone can relate to. To me that is the most important part of writing poetry! Great job and good luck!
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You have written a haiku that everyone can relate to. To me that is the most important part of writing poetry! Great job and good luck!
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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thank you so very much. structure is very new to me. I enjoy the challenge. I am pleased that you have found my effort successful. big smile!