Mike Radshaw and the Black Dawn
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Comment from Cookie333
OH! It really sucks having to stop, this was really great. I get so very lost in this story, I hope he finds the baby, kicks the shit out the mr. black and saves the world-but...I am a person who likes happy endings,
thank you so very much for sharing this with us,
k
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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OH! It really sucks having to stop, this was really great. I get so very lost in this story, I hope he finds the baby, kicks the shit out the mr. black and saves the world-but...I am a person who likes happy endings,
thank you so very much for sharing this with us,
k
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Cool! Of course, it's frustrating, but it's a great boost for me to know you got into it to the point you weren't ready for the break. Bad experiences on Fanstory lead me to try and keep under 3,000 words per post (I think this is 2,700), otherwise many avoid it. I have posted some monster chapters at times though, lol
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You know I enjoy reading your work. After I read, I never know what to say. Your characters are strong and your descriptions are great.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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You know I enjoy reading your work. After I read, I never know what to say. Your characters are strong and your descriptions are great.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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That's a great compliment all in itself, Barbara :-). If people find issues to comment on, that's great, but if they just enjoy the read and want to know more, that's equally brilliant to know. Thank you!
Mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Mike ... Of course I enjoyed the read. What I always like about your stories is how much you put into them. It's like I can see and feel you sitting there and getting into each sentence and living them as you write. I think that is excellent writing my friend. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Hi Mike ... Of course I enjoyed the read. What I always like about your stories is how much you put into them. It's like I can see and feel you sitting there and getting into each sentence and living them as you write. I think that is excellent writing my friend. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Deborah :-). The Mike Radshaw stories, in particular, are very intense for me. You've seen through to exactly how they feel when I'm writing them. The downside is, I can't ust get on with the if I'm not in the mood - my frame of mind is directly related to the writing that results!
Mike
Comment from Zue65
The scenes are out of the world, insanely crazy, and I am amazed at how the writer was able to cook up those descriptions of a different kind of dimension of hell. With so many stories around, every angle twisted and explored, it is difficult to look for fresh twists and new dimensions. The author succeeded in introducing something new to me, and I haven't read yet. Well done, God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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The scenes are out of the world, insanely crazy, and I am amazed at how the writer was able to cook up those descriptions of a different kind of dimension of hell. With so many stories around, every angle twisted and explored, it is difficult to look for fresh twists and new dimensions. The author succeeded in introducing something new to me, and I haven't read yet. Well done, God bless.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much, Nassus :-). I do like to be imaginative, and this story is particularly strange, which is always fun to write. Really glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from madhatter1977
Brilliant story with great characters, look forward to reading more. The profanities and good versus evil theme work well together, make me think of the film Constantine for example but I think this could be better given development. I like the humour of the insults and the false gravitas of the butler. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Brilliant story with great characters, look forward to reading more. The profanities and good versus evil theme work well together, make me think of the film Constantine for example but I think this could be better given development. I like the humour of the insults and the false gravitas of the butler. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much, Hatter :-). Mike Radshaw is probably my favourite amongst my own characters. One day he'll have a full length novel to himself. I'm really glad you enjoyed this slice of his story.
Mike
Comment from c_lucas
Radshaw was a little late. According to the US Marine History Book a squad of marines put out the fire and returned to their unit. This is very well written.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Radshaw was a little late. According to the US Marine History Book a squad of marines put out the fire and returned to their unit. This is very well written.
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Those darned marines, always beating everyone else to the punch! lol, thanks Charlie - glad you enjoyed it, my friend :-).
Mike
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I have it on good authority, that one platoon would have taken Hiroshima in a day and saved Truman all the bad press. You're welcome, Mike.
Comment from adewpearl
great chapter title
love the humor or the virgin/Hefner reference
I love his sarcastic response to the security guard, shows a lot about his personality and attitude
You convey his anger most effectively - strong verb choices help
you come-guzzling - cum?
love the butler :-)
Brooke
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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great chapter title
love the humor or the virgin/Hefner reference
I love his sarcastic response to the security guard, shows a lot about his personality and attitude
You convey his anger most effectively - strong verb choices help
you come-guzzling - cum?
love the butler :-)
Brooke
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Thank you, Brooke :-). I keep adding more chapters to the eventual length of this one, but it's just too much fun to wrap up quickly! So glad you liked it.
Not that I wish to debate the finer points of sperm slang, but cum and come seem interchangeable in UK parlance. Changing it would make my meaning clearer though ...
Mike
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Dear Lord, here I am talking with a man I've never met about how to spell cum/come. What is the world coming to? LOL :-)
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Well, like Shakespeare said, 'the world is a huge thing'
Even the bard was a dirty got, so I think we're alright, lol :-)