Fate
Brats and bullies do change in time.52 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
"I watched paths forked in odd directions
where brats and bullies shed their skin
tamed by age, matured with grace
as they tallied figures
an inventory
of victory,
destiny
in God's
hands."
people can grow thoroughly without losing their sense of self. in god's hands we are all safe!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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"I watched paths forked in odd directions
where brats and bullies shed their skin
tamed by age, matured with grace
as they tallied figures
an inventory
of victory,
destiny
in God's
hands."
people can grow thoroughly without losing their sense of self. in god's hands we are all safe!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks for this very warm review, God bless.
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece meet the criteria of the Nonet poem. The syllable count is correct as it descends from nine to one. The photo fits the piece perfectly as I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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This piece meet the criteria of the Nonet poem. The syllable count is correct as it descends from nine to one. The photo fits the piece perfectly as I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks Righteous Riter for this inspiring review, I am humbled. God bless.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Fate' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. There are no winners in war, and destiny is always in God's hands. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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'Fate' is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. There are no winners in war, and destiny is always in God's hands. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks duchess for considering the poem as well-written, I appreciate it so much, God bless.
Anon, you're more than welcome. Good luck.
God bless you too, the Duchess
Comment from lancellot
A very good look at how no matter how different we begin, bullies or brats, we eventually all come to same place. Age finds us all. The years blunt our sharpness and time takes it toll.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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A very good look at how no matter how different we begin, bullies or brats, we eventually all come to same place. Age finds us all. The years blunt our sharpness and time takes it toll.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks lancellot for resonating with the message of the poem, thanks a lot, God bless.
Comment from Ridley Williams
A lot of thought expressed in very few words.
Maturity goes a long ways in absoloving some
of our younger woes. A very insightful write.
Well done, and good luck, Ridley
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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A lot of thought expressed in very few words.
Maturity goes a long ways in absoloving some
of our younger woes. A very insightful write.
Well done, and good luck, Ridley
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks for considering this an insightful write, thanks too for the 5 stars, God bless.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Yes they do and God in His mercy gives them time and sets up a path that allows them to see the need of changing. Very good poem. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Yes they do and God in His mercy gives them time and sets up a path that allows them to see the need of changing. Very good poem. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks Evelyn for stopping by and reading this poem, thanks too, for the generous stars, God bless.
Comment from mickbey
A hard-hitting poem that speaks in a deep, patriotic, voice, it brings a lot of images to life, the photo fits very well too, strong delivery and impact, nice work, good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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A hard-hitting poem that speaks in a deep, patriotic, voice, it brings a lot of images to life, the photo fits very well too, strong delivery and impact, nice work, good luck.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks mickbey for this inspiring review and the generous 5 stars, God bless.
Comment from poesyapprentice
hmm, interesting picture choice for your theme. The whole thing was quite interesting actually, thought provoking. Kind of stumbled a bit at "as they tallied figures, an inventory of victory". I'm just not exactly clear on this. I really liked the way you started the piece though...an original way of expressing the sentiments there. Syllable count is correct. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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hmm, interesting picture choice for your theme. The whole thing was quite interesting actually, thought provoking. Kind of stumbled a bit at "as they tallied figures, an inventory of victory". I'm just not exactly clear on this. I really liked the way you started the piece though...an original way of expressing the sentiments there. Syllable count is correct. Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks for the 5 stars and a very perceptive review. God bless.
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I'm not sure about the perceptive review part, lol, but you are welcome. Blessings!
Comment from loibeth
I love your nonet! The picture of a soldier also connotes other images and meaning to the reader's mind besides the maturation process of a youth... but all in God's hand with invitation for each to take an active part of obedience in order to become the particular person created to be by Him.
Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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I love your nonet! The picture of a soldier also connotes other images and meaning to the reader's mind besides the maturation process of a youth... but all in God's hand with invitation for each to take an active part of obedience in order to become the particular person created to be by Him.
Great job!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks loibeth for the six star review, you just didn't know how it inspired me a lot. Thanks again and God bless.
Comment from emjaihammond
Yes, this is true. God has a way of working with young people and we all grow up somehow. Even the ones we think will never grow up, usually do at some point. Fine young men can come out of the orneriest boys. I obviously liked the premise of your poem and I thought it was a good nonet. Well written and enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Yes, this is true. God has a way of working with young people and we all grow up somehow. Even the ones we think will never grow up, usually do at some point. Fine young men can come out of the orneriest boys. I obviously liked the premise of your poem and I thought it was a good nonet. Well written and enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks my friend, this is my first attempt at nonet, thanks for the five stars and for the warm review, God bless.