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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Donegal Mountains"Words to pass on to my children
19 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
absolutely beautiful descriptive detail that has me wanting to visit
good use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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solid use of rhyming couplets
absolutely beautiful descriptive detail that has me wanting to visit
good use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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thanks for your comments and ratings i am pleased you kike the poem Mary
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
"with an ever-changing shape, a truly piece of heaven." - This is a wonderfully expressive description of the mountains and your reverence and passion for them shine through stunningly in every word. I love the last line as in a way it describes life - majestically wondrous but ever changing. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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"with an ever-changing shape, a truly piece of heaven." - This is a wonderfully expressive description of the mountains and your reverence and passion for them shine through stunningly in every word. I love the last line as in a way it describes life - majestically wondrous but ever changing. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the glowing comments and positive review. I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Mary,
if you keep writing this way you are going to get a job writing for the Irish department of tourism... I know my mouth is watering at the thought of the imagery you have painted... You have sold me on this beautiful country of yours... Watch out, there's a heap of tourists headed your way... And I might just be one of them!... Beautifully penned.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Hi Mary,
if you keep writing this way you are going to get a job writing for the Irish department of tourism... I know my mouth is watering at the thought of the imagery you have painted... You have sold me on this beautiful country of yours... Watch out, there's a heap of tourists headed your way... And I might just be one of them!... Beautifully penned.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Well I was talked into this one by a comment, but I have a few more counties that I could write poems about. I will think about it. Thanks for the review and generous comments. Mary
Comment from elchupakabra
This was really great work. The imagery is powerful and vivid, the metaphors were strong and help paint an elegant picture which is only further accentuated by the lovely illustration. I really love your prose, and that you didn't make the common mistake I've seen all morning of capitalizing every line. Really fantastic poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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This was really great work. The imagery is powerful and vivid, the metaphors were strong and help paint an elegant picture which is only further accentuated by the lovely illustration. I really love your prose, and that you didn't make the common mistake I've seen all morning of capitalizing every line. Really fantastic poem.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the glowing review, and yes I decided not to capitalize I agree it does look better. Mary
Comment from country ranch writer
NICE PIC OF THE MOUNTAIN KINDA LOOK LIKE IT COULD PASS FOR A VOLCANO NICE POEM TOO--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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NICE PIC OF THE MOUNTAIN KINDA LOOK LIKE IT COULD PASS FOR A VOLCANO NICE POEM TOO--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the review and the generous stars, Mary
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WELCOME
Comment from krys123
From visions and imagery that you use and a picture that is above the poem shows a great majestic mountains of unique impressions. It is very easily read and well penned. I really like the metaphors being used. Concept in context and very well done. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece. Give a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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From visions and imagery that you use and a picture that is above the poem shows a great majestic mountains of unique impressions. It is very easily read and well penned. I really like the metaphors being used. Concept in context and very well done. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece. Give a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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thank you for a glowing review and an excellent rating I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from TishaS
Beautifully written. As the reader I felt like I could sense a feeling of being there. The descriptive word choices bring the reader in close. The font was easy ont the eyes and so was the picture.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Beautifully written. As the reader I felt like I could sense a feeling of being there. The descriptive word choices bring the reader in close. The font was easy ont the eyes and so was the picture.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked the poem and rated it excellent. I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from The Death
Hello
It is again a beautiful poem,just like your previous write.
It seems you have got totally fascinated by the beauty in Ireland.
The couplets are rhyming really well and it has good rhythm.
It is like a beautiful ode and it has vivid concrete imagery.
I liked fifth couplet the most where you describe the morning beauty there.
It is an amazing work.
Regards:-)
Shar-A
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Hello
It is again a beautiful poem,just like your previous write.
It seems you have got totally fascinated by the beauty in Ireland.
The couplets are rhyming really well and it has good rhythm.
It is like a beautiful ode and it has vivid concrete imagery.
I liked fifth couplet the most where you describe the morning beauty there.
It is an amazing work.
Regards:-)
Shar-A
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thank you Shar i am pleased you like it, I wrote it spontaneous from a comment I received. Mary
Comment from DanielEkine
I like the way you referred to Donegal. She is really beautiful.
Great job.
"Donegal, it's your vast landscape I love the most
amazed by the narrow roads that run along the jagged coast
the jarred granite rocks that nature has chiselled with love,
wallowing under a cobalt and white sky up above" my best part.
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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I like the way you referred to Donegal. She is really beautiful.
Great job.
"Donegal, it's your vast landscape I love the most
amazed by the narrow roads that run along the jagged coast
the jarred granite rocks that nature has chiselled with love,
wallowing under a cobalt and white sky up above" my best part.
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thanks DAniel, I am glad you enjoyed it, Mary