Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

I bet he loves playing with that. Very cute, who knows he may grow up to great musician. Maybe he'll be a mouseketeer one day, I mean look at Brittany Spears and ..... Well never mind. Very cute. Rox

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Who knows where my little guy ends up one day.
Thank you, john

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Priceless... Don't you love it. And John, the dialogue is so entertaining. I crack up every time you write one of these. 'afro thingy'. Keep them coming. :-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Thank you Carolyn for being so encouraging. John

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

so cute and the story is funny brings back a lot of memories when the kids were little they had such funny stages they went through

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for stopping to read and share. B john

reply by country ranch writer on 20-Jul-2013

WELCOME

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Dis is adorwable.........I love this interaction with Gwanpa.............Ryder is a smart grand kid but aren't they all. My grandson Gabe is a genius!
Good luck with story writing . Cheerios has a contest right now . Spoonfuls of stories....... You should submit this...
God bless

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

I'll be sure to check that out, thank you. I had no idea they ran contests. I need to be more pro-active on these things.
Much appreciated... John

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

what an adorable photo :-)
is that so, young man - add comma for direct address
He'd rather play like Mickey Mouse than Jimi Hendrix LOL
I guess his taste will evolve over time LOL :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 19-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

I always miss one direct address... Thank you Brooke. As always, very appreciative. John

Comment from EMB

Excellent

This was a cute conversation with a six-month-old grandson. You have the personality down pretty well, but I'm thinking that if you omit a few key words to make most sentences "weird" but legible, it would be even better. After all, if he can't complete certain words, incomplete sentences would be understandable and probably expected.

Very nice work.

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 Comment Written 19-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

I have written pieces as you suggest, but always seem to end up like I do, because... I'm not sure how reviewers (not you) would be critical of that. I would have to utilize the authors notes to clarify.
I'll do that on the next one. I get pictures daily of my two angels.
Always appreciated, John

reply by EMB on 20-Jul-2013

One of the coming chapters in my Tips to Treasure book will be "Write for readers, not writers." Remember to check it out when I do. :)