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Silver Threads

A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment

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Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Whoa! Your lady is not to be meddled with. An enchantress on the waters - not a usual thing. I like your enjambment, Sharyn and "willing winds whipped" is wonderful! :D Nancy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    Thank you so much Nancy - I enjoy strict form sometimes and the sonnet seems to lend itself to dark drama sometimes, hmm? (Mind you, with a picture like the contest picture, I don't think we really have a lighter choice!)

    Thank you so much for your lovely six my dear!

    :)Sharyn
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Sharyn,
yes my apologies for still trying to play catch up with my message box.
A love the thought of the silver thread that ties us to our God and connects us to all ... This had that sea shanty feel with a Shakespearean tone. It was beautifully penned and had a fateful story line, to let it linger that little extra. All the very best in this contest ... You seem to be on a roll ... And well deserved.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
******stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    Thanks so much James! I really don't know where this one came from. I was actually doodling with something FUNNY (which I just posted a couple of minutes ago) but somehow that blasted picture stuck in my mind - so I put the funny aside and played around a little. Fun to write dark and dramatic sometimes, hmm?

    Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from l.raven
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Sharyn, Ouch...I bind you now, by cursed silver thread, to lie with me, in oceans blackest bed. Strong words...And I love it... Very well written... Yes... And what a picture.. Luff ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    aah, you can tell that Shakespeare was right up my alley, Linda, hmm? a theatrical from way back! Thank you so much for your wonderful six on this one my dear! So much appreciated!
    Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from SteveY
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Nicely done and thank you for the awesome author notes explaing much about this poem. Wonderful picture and excellent rhythm and flow too.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    thank you so much Steve - glad you enjoyed this one - always happy to add author notes. We're all learning, right?
    :)Sharyn
Comment from wordsareus
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This is an amazing entry for this writing contest. Your poem is so well written it is worthy of a gold cross and I have a feeling it could be a winner!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    oh I love it that you love it my dear! thank you SO much for a lovely six! Wow!
    Big smiles
    :):):):):):):):):):):):)
Comment from me_tudor
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Wow, that was a bit dark but very well written. I liked the picture too. It made me think of the Fates and their thread of life. Great work.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    yes, dark indeed it was, my dear - got to flex all those writing muscles, right?
    :)Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
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Dear Sharon,
My favorite theme; love, betrayal and revenge...how sweet it is:) Nice job with sonnet. Always stretching your wings I see. Great job--Ted

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    Never can resist a bit of drama Ted - you know me dear! and yes, I hate repeating myself. Fortunately, there's always something new to play around with, hmm? bless you, as ever - I'm glad you enjoyed my grandiosity on this one dear!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from NicciFaye
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Sharyn.....beyond excellent...I loved this! Each stanza.....precisely written with this poetic story...detailed just enough...I loved the third stanza...the ending line really had me say ...nice...as chains of lighting set me free...perfect..lovely..

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    yeah!!! So glad you enjoyed this one Nicci! Not often we get to let loose with a full incantation, hmm?

    Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from dmt1967
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This is a dark poem I felt a haunting feel to it when I read it out very well written I loved the spine chilling feel it gave me good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
    Bless you, my dear. Glad to give you the chills - in a good way, of course!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from wanderlost
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But with the captain's daughter you did lie,
betraying all sweet promises to me.
I cast my thread of silver to the sky
and wailed, as chains of lightning set me free.

Great piece of work. good job all around

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
    oh thank you so much for your lovely six on this one my dear! Fun to let loose occasionally, hmm? I really appreciate your wonderful encouragement.
    Best wishes
    Sharyn