Wallflower
A poem using the emotion anxiety27 total reviews
Comment from kelly frederick
Would of been excellent if someone would of danced with you. Then you could of conveyed the sheer panic of wandering hands during a slow dance.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Would of been excellent if someone would of danced with you. Then you could of conveyed the sheer panic of wandering hands during a slow dance.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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lol that's food for a poem. :)
Comment from CR Delport
That was sure a different time. Even in the eighties things was so much different than now. So much simpler. Great poem and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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That was sure a different time. Even in the eighties things was so much different than now. So much simpler. Great poem and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your lovely comments.
Comment from BeasPeas
I wasn't on-line in time to vote for this poem, but I certainly can review it now. An excellent description of how we all feel when insecure, unloved, awkward--not just as adolescents or teens but also as we grow up and age.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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I wasn't on-line in time to vote for this poem, but I certainly can review it now. An excellent description of how we all feel when insecure, unloved, awkward--not just as adolescents or teens but also as we grow up and age.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your comments, they are very much appreciated.
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the year you lost a feeling standing alone sweet sixteen dancing queen I hope you had a good time lovely piece god bless
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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from the year you lost a feeling standing alone sweet sixteen dancing queen I hope you had a good time lovely piece god bless
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your lovely comments.
Comment from adewpearl
I LOVE that song :-)
great visual of the popular girls nuzzling up against the jocks as the wallflowers watch
you capture so well those awkward years that are not nearly as happy and carefree for many teens as some would lead us to believe :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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I LOVE that song :-)
great visual of the popular girls nuzzling up against the jocks as the wallflowers watch
you capture so well those awkward years that are not nearly as happy and carefree for many teens as some would lead us to believe :-) Brooke
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thank you Brooke for your comments.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't. ... love these lines ... were you writing about me??
What a great poem, Betty! You captured perfectly that wallflower feeling I had all through my teen years!
You gave me a great review and I thought I'd pop in to say hello. Glad I did. This one really made me smile ...!
Hugs xxx Sonali
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't. ... love these lines ... were you writing about me??
What a great poem, Betty! You captured perfectly that wallflower feeling I had all through my teen years!
You gave me a great review and I thought I'd pop in to say hello. Glad I did. This one really made me smile ...!
Hugs xxx Sonali
Comment Written 28-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sonali for your lovely comments.
Comment from 4hisglory
Unfortunately I never got to go to a high school dance. My father wanted us to work on the farm so I took my high school by mail. Sounds like it was an emotional thing according to your poem, so not sure I missed anything good.
Very well written, like I was almost there feeling the anxiety. Great entry for the contest.
Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Unfortunately I never got to go to a high school dance. My father wanted us to work on the farm so I took my high school by mail. Sounds like it was an emotional thing according to your poem, so not sure I missed anything good.
Very well written, like I was almost there feeling the anxiety. Great entry for the contest.
Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 28-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much. Yeah, the dances were a little over-rated except for the popular kids.
Comment from ruhama
Your poem certainly brought back those awkward feelings of high school dances.Your use of assonance in line 6 gave me the feeling of slightly stumbling in the dance. The flow of the poem is a bit awkward and well reflects the feelings of the wallflower. Well-chosen adjectives provoke remembrance of anxiety past.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Your poem certainly brought back those awkward feelings of high school dances.Your use of assonance in line 6 gave me the feeling of slightly stumbling in the dance. The flow of the poem is a bit awkward and well reflects the feelings of the wallflower. Well-chosen adjectives provoke remembrance of anxiety past.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was really tugging at the scrap books of days gone by. How does one harness such energy, display such feelings of ardent longing, and a yearning need to 'fit in', that they experienced so long ago? Because, they've been to the 'places' of which they write, that's how. They've been seated up against that wall, in that auditorium, watching, waiting and anticipating for someone...anyone! to ask them for a simple dance. One simple dance. maybe, that time did come, and they danced the night away. or, perhaps they remained there, simply...waiting.
I hope your experience that evening turned out to be a pleasant one. I wanted that for you, as I read it. Some memories do remain with us for a lifetime....
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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This was really tugging at the scrap books of days gone by. How does one harness such energy, display such feelings of ardent longing, and a yearning need to 'fit in', that they experienced so long ago? Because, they've been to the 'places' of which they write, that's how. They've been seated up against that wall, in that auditorium, watching, waiting and anticipating for someone...anyone! to ask them for a simple dance. One simple dance. maybe, that time did come, and they danced the night away. or, perhaps they remained there, simply...waiting.
I hope your experience that evening turned out to be a pleasant one. I wanted that for you, as I read it. Some memories do remain with us for a lifetime....
Comment Written 28-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you Dean. Yes, this was written from a true experience. I did not dance with anyone that night. Sigh. But things did get better. :)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a really good poem for the 'Emotions' competition. Something all girls have felt at some time or another when in a dance hall. Today it's not like that. You can go on the floor alone and jive about - it's called clubbing. Not so romantic though. I really identified with your poem. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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This is a really good poem for the 'Emotions' competition. Something all girls have felt at some time or another when in a dance hall. Today it's not like that. You can go on the floor alone and jive about - it's called clubbing. Not so romantic though. I really identified with your poem. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you Dorothy. I think a lot of people can identify with my poem from the feedback I've been getting.
