And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "He Will"A collection of Spirtual poems
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is such a spiritually empowering piece. The construction and execution are perfection. You inspire the reader to take heart and believe and in that all things are possible. I especially felt grace speaking in this verse:"At journey's end when thou must leave
For mansions fair, thine to achieve
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe"
Wonderful and uplifting poetic work of praise.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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This is such a spiritually empowering piece. The construction and execution are perfection. You inspire the reader to take heart and believe and in that all things are possible. I especially felt grace speaking in this verse:"At journey's end when thou must leave
For mansions fair, thine to achieve
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe"
Wonderful and uplifting poetic work of praise.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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What a gracious and kind review. Have a wonderful day, Carolyn
Comment from theomagee5
this was a pretty good spiritual poem. the flow of it was kinda on and off, but the words and the topic were very relevant and needed. I am just now posting my stuff on line and am receiving feedback as well. I think in some situations, u have to use more words to fill in the syllable count so it can flow even smoother. all in all, good poem. good bless
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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this was a pretty good spiritual poem. the flow of it was kinda on and off, but the words and the topic were very relevant and needed. I am just now posting my stuff on line and am receiving feedback as well. I think in some situations, u have to use more words to fill in the syllable count so it can flow even smoother. all in all, good poem. good bless
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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I appreciate your comments, I do write very simply at times. Welcome to FS, Kindest regards, Carolyn
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the valleys to the mountain tops your soul calls out to him the light of a beautiful soul a lovely piece of writing god bless
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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from the valleys to the mountain tops your soul calls out to him the light of a beautiful soul a lovely piece of writing god bless
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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And Blessings right back to you, Thank you for the wonderful review. Carolyn
Comment from rhonny
It is an enjoyable poem and very heartfelt - that is obvious.. But there a couple of little things that editing could help with. You don't need the apostrophe in the word 'souls', and also I'm not sure about using 'thy' and 'thine'. I don't know if one or the other is better.
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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It is an enjoyable poem and very heartfelt - that is obvious.. But there a couple of little things that editing could help with. You don't need the apostrophe in the word 'souls', and also I'm not sure about using 'thy' and 'thine'. I don't know if one or the other is better.
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the through comments. Souls' is for possessive, thy and thine are just old English choices of verbiage. I appreciate you, :-) Carolyn
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Yes but in souls' they aren't possessing anything in this case. I know the thy and thine, just thought one or the other rather than both would read better. Thanks for getting back to me. rhonny
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I corrected the souls, you were right. Thank you so much. My best to you, Carolyn
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Its a pleasure.
Comment from Cinda
Your poem on "He Will" is simply beautiful and full of God's grace and mercy. If only we realized at times "He Will" always be there for us when we reach out to Him for our strength, help, hope and especially His love. This is so, well written I thought it deserved a five. I only noticed one small mistake 1st Stanza, 4th line on "He'll soothes away thy bitterness" or maybe "He soothes away thy bitterness" But other than that it is excellent. Great Job!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Your poem on "He Will" is simply beautiful and full of God's grace and mercy. If only we realized at times "He Will" always be there for us when we reach out to Him for our strength, help, hope and especially His love. This is so, well written I thought it deserved a five. I only noticed one small mistake 1st Stanza, 4th line on "He'll soothes away thy bitterness" or maybe "He soothes away thy bitterness" But other than that it is excellent. Great Job!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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What a great review. I will look at the edits. Thank you and have a great day. Carolyn
Comment from ronnie k
AMEN, I was captured with the slow, smooth presentation of this scrip, an honest writing for sure your feeling grew with every word. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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AMEN, I was captured with the slow, smooth presentation of this scrip, an honest writing for sure your feeling grew with every word. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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And thank you for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it. Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
At journey's end when thou must leave
For mansions fair, thine to achieve
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe
Carolyn this is really awesome especially with the mono-rhyme. I have always enjoyed mono-rhyming for it somehow brings more to a write. Awesome girlie.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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At journey's end when thou must leave
For mansions fair, thine to achieve
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe
Carolyn this is really awesome especially with the mono-rhyme. I have always enjoyed mono-rhyming for it somehow brings more to a write. Awesome girlie.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Your review means so much. I am learning from, smile, a lovely little lady who uses multiple forms for her poetry. Have a wonderful day, Carolyn
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Smile girl. I'm so very glad.
Comment from MizKat
Carolyn,
Your poem is absolutely beautiful. I always write my poetry from my heart too. The picture with the bible verse on it is wonderful too.
Blessings, Kat
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Carolyn,
Your poem is absolutely beautiful. I always write my poetry from my heart too. The picture with the bible verse on it is wonderful too.
Blessings, Kat
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Good Morning Kat, and thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Carolyn