A Sonnet Anatomy
An acrostic sonnet about acrostic sonnets!20 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
I DID enjoy it Mike, big-time - and all in pretty good iambic pentameter to boot (prodigy with its stress on the last syllable is pushing it a big, but hey I love it when you push it - if Gilbert & Sullivan can do it, why not you, right?) Fun! Sorry I don't have sixes left dammit! :))S
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
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I DID enjoy it Mike, big-time - and all in pretty good iambic pentameter to boot (prodigy with its stress on the last syllable is pushing it a big, but hey I love it when you push it - if Gilbert & Sullivan can do it, why not you, right?) Fun! Sorry I don't have sixes left dammit! :))S
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
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Thank you, my dear :-)
It's true, prodigy isn't a great iambic word but it is a good word so I couldn't resist, lol. So glad you liked it.
Mike
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of course it's a good word which is exactly why you had such fun using it, and you are forgiven, totally!
Comment from mikenbel
Hi Mike! I did enjoy the read. The flow was good and easy. I am still not sure I would be able to produce one of my own without failing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
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Hi Mike! I did enjoy the read. The flow was good and easy. I am still not sure I would be able to produce one of my own without failing.
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 17-May-2013
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I bet you could - it has more to do with just going for it than anything. I'm writing an essay about how to write sonnets at the moment, so perhaps that will be helpful.
Mike
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I will look forward to reading it then. :)
Comment from Jewell McChesney
not seeing the prediction of a twist.
Allowing for the smite of irony,
the sonnet turns to bite the poor bard's wrist.
One thing is true - a poet's destiny
as always, you DELIVER! This is another amazing verse from your head full of wise words.
Awesome description of a sonnet.
Well done!
Jewell
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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not seeing the prediction of a twist.
Allowing for the smite of irony,
the sonnet turns to bite the poor bard's wrist.
One thing is true - a poet's destiny
as always, you DELIVER! This is another amazing verse from your head full of wise words.
Awesome description of a sonnet.
Well done!
Jewell
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Jewell :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from Staplesque
I enjoyed this very much! This is very creative and well-written. Your rhyme scheme and rhythm are excellent, and your word usage is interesting and creative. This also fits the requirements of an acrostic poem very well. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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I enjoyed this very much! This is very creative and well-written. Your rhyme scheme and rhythm are excellent, and your word usage is interesting and creative. This also fits the requirements of an acrostic poem very well. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks very much, Staple - I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from marycec
What a fantastic achievement!Great use of alliteration in second line all that sybillance. I love the imagery of the poet's destiny meandering like a fish.This is just wonderful.
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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What a fantastic achievement!Great use of alliteration in second line all that sybillance. I love the imagery of the poet's destiny meandering like a fish.This is just wonderful.
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Mary :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem. I was trying to do something a bit different!
Mike
Comment from CR Delport
A poem about poems. Lol, what next? Well, you took the idea and made it work, and wrote a nice poem. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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A poem about poems. Lol, what next? Well, you took the idea and made it work, and wrote a nice poem. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks very much, CR - I'm really glad you liked it :-).
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
solid acrostic for A Sonnet Anatomy, which I don't think would ever notice is an acrostic were it not in the contest :-)
solid alternate-line rhyming and excellent iambic meter
excellent alliteration throughout
you explain/define the nature of the sonnet in great detail
down to the turn, which you really describe with great wit :-)
and I love the simile in your closing couplet. It's an acrostic, it's a sonnet, and it's a clever analysis of a sonnet, amazing!!! :-)
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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solid acrostic for A Sonnet Anatomy, which I don't think would ever notice is an acrostic were it not in the contest :-)
solid alternate-line rhyming and excellent iambic meter
excellent alliteration throughout
you explain/define the nature of the sonnet in great detail
down to the turn, which you really describe with great wit :-)
and I love the simile in your closing couplet. It's an acrostic, it's a sonnet, and it's a clever analysis of a sonnet, amazing!!! :-)
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Brooke - I'll be treasuring that amazing bit for a long time :-))))))
Mike
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought it was very creative and very telling
beautiful imagery flowing message profound imagery. I thought this was , free-flowing poem I like the
structure No typo's and nothing to change as far as i
can see. Alexander Q*Q
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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I thought it was very creative and very telling
beautiful imagery flowing message profound imagery. I thought this was , free-flowing poem I like the
structure No typo's and nothing to change as far as i
can see. Alexander Q*Q
Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thanks, Alexander. I'm really glad you liked it mate.
Mike
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Mike! I'm always looking for someone to explain the sonnet to me. I find it complicated and I am hesitant to jump in and try them. Your explanation is very helpful to me and I appreciate that :) You managed to say it all with pentameter, rhyme, and I saw some alliteration in there too with sussurus/sound. Not tied it all in a neat package of an acrostic. You are awesome!!! Best wishes to you in this contest. I think you have a strong contender here :)
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reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Hi Mike! I'm always looking for someone to explain the sonnet to me. I find it complicated and I am hesitant to jump in and try them. Your explanation is very helpful to me and I appreciate that :) You managed to say it all with pentameter, rhyme, and I saw some alliteration in there too with sussurus/sound. Not tied it all in a neat package of an acrostic. You are awesome!!! Best wishes to you in this contest. I think you have a strong contender here :)
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Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thank you, Joy :-). I'm working on a follow-up to my Iambic Meter how-to guide that deals specifically with sonnets, so hopefully that will help.
Mike
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Doh, re-reading what I wrote. That should say "Not to mention that you tied it all up in a neat package of an acrostic."
Comment from Galactia
A /sonn/et /sings /i/am/bic/al/ly /in /time, (11)
surrounded by a sussurus of sounds
of arguments built up in feet and rhyme,
negating doubt as motif's will abounds. FIX Iambic
Not limited to just a solid core,
emancipated by analogy,
the second stanza spreads across the floor
arising from the scribbling prodigy
not seeing the prediction of a twist.
Allowing for the smite of irony,
the sonnet turns to bite the poor bard's wrist.
One thing is true - a poet's destiny
MEAND/ers /like/ the/ fish /in/ mount/ain /streams. (9)
Yet sonnets draw straight lines beneath your dreams.
(MEAND is stressed followed by unstressed ers)
everything else seems perfect.
great job and GL
regards
Tia
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reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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A /sonn/et /sings /i/am/bic/al/ly /in /time, (11)
surrounded by a sussurus of sounds
of arguments built up in feet and rhyme,
negating doubt as motif's will abounds. FIX Iambic
Not limited to just a solid core,
emancipated by analogy,
the second stanza spreads across the floor
arising from the scribbling prodigy
not seeing the prediction of a twist.
Allowing for the smite of irony,
the sonnet turns to bite the poor bard's wrist.
One thing is true - a poet's destiny
MEAND/ers /like/ the/ fish /in/ mount/ain /streams. (9)
Yet sonnets draw straight lines beneath your dreams.
(MEAND is stressed followed by unstressed ers)
everything else seems perfect.
great job and GL
regards
Tia
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Comment Written 16-May-2013
reply by the author on 16-May-2013
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Thank you, Tia :-). I was hoping to get away with a colloquial pronunciation of iambic'ly without using the apostrophe, but I've fiddled the line around now to avoid the issue. Meander is three syllables to me (me-AN-der).
I'm really glad you enjoyed the read :-).
Mike
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oh ok, i see it now. thought it was mean/der, sorry fior that, but tamper with that 1st line. I knew you'd fix it before i rose tomorrow.
great job
regards
Tia
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Yep, that fits better. perfect iambic. :)
regards
Tia
