All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Sugared Stars"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
105 total reviews
Comment from Kevin C
This is really a lovely poem. You sent me back to times I spent as a young boy on the Jersey shore. Your poems reads nicely and your images are so strong. I love the story you tell that really reads so well. Nicely done.
Kevin
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is really a lovely poem. You sent me back to times I spent as a young boy on the Jersey shore. Your poems reads nicely and your images are so strong. I love the story you tell that really reads so well. Nicely done.
Kevin
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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glad you enjoyed it Kevin - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Okay, S. At first this was going to be about a child molester. Then read the category and description after reading the first few stanzas. You had me going! You make the ice cream licking sound like good sex. LOL
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Okay, S. At first this was going to be about a child molester. Then read the category and description after reading the first few stanzas. You had me going! You make the ice cream licking sound like good sex. LOL
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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a dirty mind you have spits! :)
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Just sordid.
Comment from Kingsland
The language in this poem is well place to bring about good imagery in its poetic voice. It has a longing in its thoughts. The entire presentation is well delivered and written... John
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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The language in this poem is well place to bring about good imagery in its poetic voice. It has a longing in its thoughts. The entire presentation is well delivered and written... John
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thx so John! :)Sharyn
Comment from allborn66
This is a terrific poem. I love the word choice, it inspires great mental images. The form is great. The word choice is awesome. The picture is a great choice.
Barbara
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is a terrific poem. I love the word choice, it inspires great mental images. The form is great. The word choice is awesome. The picture is a great choice.
Barbara
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thx so much Barbara! :)Sharyn
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sharyn, HUmmmmmmmm Does sound wonderful to me. Love days like those and feeling so much love. This is so very well written. Can taste every sticky drip. LOL Great write sweetie. Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Hi Sharyn, HUmmmmmmmm Does sound wonderful to me. Love days like those and feeling so much love. This is so very well written. Can taste every sticky drip. LOL Great write sweetie. Linda xxoo
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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bless you Linda - may you have all the chocolate in the world ... after I've had mine of course ... :)s
Comment from Elaine Christie
a complimentary photo for your poem. The layout is great, a lovely title, I enjoyed the simplicity of the poem and how it flowed.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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a complimentary photo for your poem. The layout is great, a lovely title, I enjoyed the simplicity of the poem and how it flowed.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thank you so much Elaine! :)Sharyn
Comment from Janice Canerdy
YOUR SKILLFULLY-WRITTEN LOVE POEM IS FULL OF POWERFUL DESCRIPTIONS AND VIVID SENSORY IMAGERY. yOU HAVE GIVEN THE READER A PEEK AT THESE LOVERS AND HOW THEY ENTICE EACH OTHER.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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YOUR SKILLFULLY-WRITTEN LOVE POEM IS FULL OF POWERFUL DESCRIPTIONS AND VIVID SENSORY IMAGERY. yOU HAVE GIVEN THE READER A PEEK AT THESE LOVERS AND HOW THEY ENTICE EACH OTHER.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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bless you Janice! :)Sharyn
Comment from Thesis
Sounds like this was written from a pleasurable memory. This scenario plays out many times near the world's beaches.
You've made it playful, innocently sexy, and left us to think of our own experiences. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Sounds like this was written from a pleasurable memory. This scenario plays out many times near the world's beaches.
You've made it playful, innocently sexy, and left us to think of our own experiences. Nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this one my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Creative77
What a beautiful poem! Your thoughts are bold and vivid; very descriptive. I love the ending. Also, the picture you chose is perfect for this piece. Nice job!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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What a beautiful poem! Your thoughts are bold and vivid; very descriptive. I love the ending. Also, the picture you chose is perfect for this piece. Nice job!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Winslow
Dear Visionary,
What a delightful treat, sugar, chocolate, and sweet lips to boot. I like the words you chose because they are so sweet in themselves. You tell a romantic story well.
Happy Easter,
Winslow
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Dear Visionary,
What a delightful treat, sugar, chocolate, and sweet lips to boot. I like the words you chose because they are so sweet in themselves. You tell a romantic story well.
Happy Easter,
Winslow
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Bless you, Winslow, for your lovely six on this one! You deserve a world of chocolate! :)Sharyn