Rabbit
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Way With Chickens"A Boy's Story of the rural South
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Comment from Carole Rosa
Bhogg, Well....this story was 'stand alone' for me. I enjoyed the story and found many things about your story that touched me. My brother was actually in Saipan in 1943.
AND I used to own a farm that I called the Funny Farm. We had chickens, ducks, rabbits, and a peacock. I built my chicken coop on rails, so when the area under it was full of poop, my husband would hook up the tractor and pull the coop to a different spot. Good story. Carole
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Bhogg, Well....this story was 'stand alone' for me. I enjoyed the story and found many things about your story that touched me. My brother was actually in Saipan in 1943.
AND I used to own a farm that I called the Funny Farm. We had chickens, ducks, rabbits, and a peacock. I built my chicken coop on rails, so when the area under it was full of poop, my husband would hook up the tractor and pull the coop to a different spot. Good story. Carole
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Hi Carole - thanks for reading and the kind feedback. I like the idea of moving the coop! Bill
Comment from MumEsGirl
this certainly worked well as a stand alone work. The style is easy and conversational and make the reader feel included in the story.
The reason why people kill or threaten what is different will remain a mystery to all
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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this certainly worked well as a stand alone work. The style is easy and conversational and make the reader feel included in the story.
The reason why people kill or threaten what is different will remain a mystery to all
hugs
kate
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks Kate - both for reading and your kind comments. I appreciate both! Bill
Comment from dannyleonn
Oh I am sucked in! Rabbit and Virge are wonderful characters and the dialogue flows so smoothly. I cannot wait to wait to start form the beginning. Excellent work. Flawless!
Thank you for sharing this tale.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Oh I am sucked in! Rabbit and Virge are wonderful characters and the dialogue flows so smoothly. I cannot wait to wait to start form the beginning. Excellent work. Flawless!
Thank you for sharing this tale.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and for revisiting!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
That's as good an explanation as any for a little boy. In dogs, we call it "fear aggression". I suspect it's the same with chickens - and people. Different is threatening, so it has to be killed. Well done, Bill. :) nancy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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That's as good an explanation as any for a little boy. In dogs, we call it "fear aggression". I suspect it's the same with chickens - and people. Different is threatening, so it has to be killed. Well done, Bill. :) nancy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you Nancy - I always smile when you drop by. Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
An excellent addition to your saga of Rabit, Bill. I think Virge is one of the most amazing men I've ever encountered -through your writing. I'm assuming he had little education, but certainly knew the ways of the world enough to teach a boy with an open mind. Bravo on another excellent write, my friend.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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An excellent addition to your saga of Rabit, Bill. I think Virge is one of the most amazing men I've ever encountered -through your writing. I'm assuming he had little education, but certainly knew the ways of the world enough to teach a boy with an open mind. Bravo on another excellent write, my friend.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you very much Bev - I appreciate your kind words! Bill
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Sure thing, Bill.
Comment from TonyCr
This is great. I can read this very fast which means your language flows. Your storyline is very clear to the reader and is a very lifelike scenario. I highly recommend this and look forward to rading more.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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This is great. I can read this very fast which means your language flows. Your storyline is very clear to the reader and is a very lifelike scenario. I highly recommend this and look forward to rading more.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading Tony. I hope you get a chance to read earlier chapters. Bill
Comment from Adri7enne
So, Virge figured it was in the blood for man, same as it was for animals, to kill another man because he was different. He was probably right, Bil. It's been going on since Cain and Able. Now we can kill with atom bombs instead of just a club. Big progress. Sad lessons to have to teach a child.
Well done, Bill. Written in terms a child would understand. Your grandkids are going to love this story. I know I do.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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So, Virge figured it was in the blood for man, same as it was for animals, to kill another man because he was different. He was probably right, Bil. It's been going on since Cain and Able. Now we can kill with atom bombs instead of just a club. Big progress. Sad lessons to have to teach a child.
Well done, Bill. Written in terms a child would understand. Your grandkids are going to love this story. I know I do.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks very much Adri! By the way, I voted for your entry for Novel of the Month. I read every one, and felt your entry and Avril's entries were head and shoulders above the rest. Bill
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Ah! What a guy! Thank you, Bill. I had the same thought about you and Avril. Did you get my message, congratulating you on a fine win? Well deserved, indeed. You're a modern day Mark Twaine. Way to go!!!
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I did get your message and was very appreciative. I volunteered to buy drinks all around!
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Ah, you southern boys. So charming! LOL! Thanks, Bill. It would have to be a warm drink. I have to get out there and deal with a foot of new snow. I'm just delaying the pain. Here I go.....
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
How true, man and chickens kill each other because one is different? As to the story I enjoyed the 'parable' Oh by the way, did you or the chickens gather eggs? My uncle Jack and my grandfather had chickens as did most country folks. At 12 I was pecked by a hen on her eggs and chased by a turkey when I was 3. I buy my eggs at Costco and check the butterball for a pulse each thanksgiving. A good effort and a worthy story.PS: Plucked a few too.
Regards:
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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How true, man and chickens kill each other because one is different? As to the story I enjoyed the 'parable' Oh by the way, did you or the chickens gather eggs? My uncle Jack and my grandfather had chickens as did most country folks. At 12 I was pecked by a hen on her eggs and chased by a turkey when I was 3. I buy my eggs at Costco and check the butterball for a pulse each thanksgiving. A good effort and a worthy story.PS: Plucked a few too.
Regards:
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and your comments. I appreciate both. A lost history to most kids today. My grandparents on both sides lived in the country, so there were always animals around. Bill
Comment from Sasha
I'm a firm believer that hatred and prejudice is taught. I have never believed a person is born with hatred. But the moral of your story is a powerful one and explains as well as anything the mystery of hatred.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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I'm a firm believer that hatred and prejudice is taught. I have never believed a person is born with hatred. But the moral of your story is a powerful one and explains as well as anything the mystery of hatred.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you very much for reading and for your insightful comment. I appreciate both. Bill
Comment from GeraldS
This is the first sliver of this novel that I've read, and it could be a stand alone story. The narrative is well written and the dialogue is believable. The story was engaging and held the reader's attention through to the end. There is no 'hook' at the end to motivate the reader to continue on except for the quality of the narrative. But, in a novel, especially where the chapters are split into small pieces, I think it would be difficult to end every section with a 'hook.' All in all I think this piece was well done.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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This is the first sliver of this novel that I've read, and it could be a stand alone story. The narrative is well written and the dialogue is believable. The story was engaging and held the reader's attention through to the end. There is no 'hook' at the end to motivate the reader to continue on except for the quality of the narrative. But, in a novel, especially where the chapters are split into small pieces, I think it would be difficult to end every section with a 'hook.' All in all I think this piece was well done.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading. It has been a problem on having people just drop in. If I try and go on with the novel, I'm sure I'll have to rework it. I appreciate you reading and your kind feedback. Bill
