Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

This is a fabulous entry for the Emotions contest. I have not seen a haibun in awhile. I love the terse prose. Good luck in the contest. This should be a strong contender.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

A lovely poem that's well written and well delivered. It flows nicely and reads easy. Lovely art work to go with the poem. And yes, nostalgia can hit at any time :)

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013

Thank you for reviewing

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This is a good poem I like the way it sounds when read out loud ad the picture adds to the poem good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

I love the last line.

This is a lovely piece of writing. I'm not an expert at these "Japanese" forms and haven't dared to try one ..

however, I love your word choices, how you string phrases together and the music you've created.

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from TonyCr

Exceptional

This is excellent. I don't know what a haiban is but I really like this, your words are true and I like the images. The ending is inspired.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

The haibun is relatively new to me.It is a Japanese form and It is composed of three elements; the title, the body which is prose and should be written something like stream of consciousness, and the third element is a haiku which can be placed either in the middle or at the end of the poem making sure not to use the same words as in the title or body. They are suppose to be vaguely related. Thank you for the great review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very delightful piece. It is very thought provoking. The word choice is strong. It is very consistent with its theme.
Barbara

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Love this style. It seems well out of my reach but you have managed to capture all the elements nicely. I love the feel of time passing in your work. The haiku was great and the last prose line was wonderful. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thank you for the kind review and taking time to read.

Comment from amahra

Exceptional

Oh this is masterful. (if it's such a word) I absolutely loved this writing. I have no words for. I am just blown away with your awesome talent. You are going to win this contest. There can't be anything great than this. The art work is spell bounding. Great great job my friend.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thanks so much for the great review. I am honored.

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

This a lovely write with a very touching theme. The things we hold onto in our memories , from our past can be awesome. God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Nebukadneser

Excellent

Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! This is writing of the highest order. The story of aging told so beautifully, honestly and truthfully without apologies was mesmerizing to read. Aah to have a life partner to make the aging process more bearable interwoven in the last paragraph was brilliant.
Well done and good luck with the competition
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013

Thanks so much for the awesome review.