haiku (leaves in breeze)
autumn haiku19 total reviews
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Those golden flags on maple trees were very plentiful last fall. I love to watch them turn and change colors. Your picture and poem are partners in presenting your message. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Those golden flags on maple trees were very plentiful last fall. I love to watch them turn and change colors. Your picture and poem are partners in presenting your message. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Afternoon, Debbie
I enjoyed your well written haiku this evening. I
admire the word play with breeze as a noun, yet
it has the subtle verb meaning too. The satori is
excellent. It's not even Spring and now you've me
wanting for fall!
Well done!
Ray
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Good Afternoon, Debbie
I enjoyed your well written haiku this evening. I
admire the word play with breeze as a noun, yet
it has the subtle verb meaning too. The satori is
excellent. It's not even Spring and now you've me
wanting for fall!
Well done!
Ray
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Oh, thank you so much, Ray. I appreciate your encouragement and kind review~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
Awesome Debbie and very sharp. The maple branches will make for a wonderful flag pole. Don't cha think so girl. I do. Awesome.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Awesome Debbie and very sharp. The maple branches will make for a wonderful flag pole. Don't cha think so girl. I do. Awesome.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thanks so very much. I am taking the Japanese poetry class~Debbie
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Good Debbie.
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a lovely and very witty haiku, Debbie. The kigo is evident, the kire great and very beautiful images, grammatically connected.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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What a lovely and very witty haiku, Debbie. The kigo is evident, the kire great and very beautiful images, grammatically connected.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from namkcirb
Traditional haiku consist of 17 syllables (also known as morae), in three phrases of 5, 7 and 5 respectively. The theme is nature in origin. There is a Japanese and an English version.
I like the poem. Perhaps it's something I am unaware of.
3-6-3 (nature). Please let me know if I am wrong.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Traditional haiku consist of 17 syllables (also known as morae), in three phrases of 5, 7 and 5 respectively. The theme is nature in origin. There is a Japanese and an English version.
I like the poem. Perhaps it's something I am unaware of.
3-6-3 (nature). Please let me know if I am wrong.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck and keep on writing.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I am taking the Japanese Poetry class and they teach less than 17 syllables is fine--even desired and that there are n rules for line length. I do appreciate your comments, but that is not what I am learning in the class~Debbie
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Very interesting, This will require more research on my part. My rating is based upon what I know and what's in the dictionary. Thank you for your reply. One can never know enough. namkcirb
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lOOK IN POETRY DANCES--IT MENTIONS NON-TRADITIONAL HAIKU WITH FEWER SYLLABLES~dEBBIE
Comment from howard11
I can find nothing to be critical of in this haiku. 'Golden flags' is a description of the leaves that would be hard to top. A real nice poem, lovely in its simpleness.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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I can find nothing to be critical of in this haiku. 'Golden flags' is a description of the leaves that would be hard to top. A real nice poem, lovely in its simpleness.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much for your kind review and stars~Debbie
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Nice and vivid autumn picture as how all leaves in breeze indicate the existence and charm of the season that makes a wave from maple branches in a stunning golden colour in the atmosphere, so pleasing scenic stand portrayed, I liked.
37-177-44428-Reviews Written-Thursday 14 March 2013-Ex FS Top Rank # 1 Reviewer
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Nice and vivid autumn picture as how all leaves in breeze indicate the existence and charm of the season that makes a wave from maple branches in a stunning golden colour in the atmosphere, so pleasing scenic stand portrayed, I liked.
37-177-44428-Reviews Written-Thursday 14 March 2013-Ex FS Top Rank # 1 Reviewer
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from amahra
What a most beautiful picture of leaves. It looks more like a painting. I loved your haiku and it did fall within its strict guide-lines. Good job.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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What a most beautiful picture of leaves. It looks more like a painting. I loved your haiku and it did fall within its strict guide-lines. Good job.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I loved maple trees when I grew up in the midwest, IL, we have planted some down here, but so far only one has survived. I guess they don' like the TX, heat. I don't either, but I did enjoyr reading your poem.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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I loved maple trees when I grew up in the midwest, IL, we have planted some down here, but so far only one has survived. I guess they don' like the TX, heat. I don't either, but I did enjoyr reading your poem.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review~Debbie
