Straw-Sticks-Bricks & Plastic
A Curly Tail of Dodgy Porkmanship...31 total reviews
Comment from mystery poet
You have given a new modern twist to the story
of 'The Three Little Pigs'...you have used very
clever words to ignite one imagination and your
visual expertise in word is showing off...I like
it and was a pleasure to read!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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You have given a new modern twist to the story
of 'The Three Little Pigs'...you have used very
clever words to ignite one imagination and your
visual expertise in word is showing off...I like
it and was a pleasure to read!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Many thanks for a sterling response to my three little grunters.
Cheers P
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'Grunters' that's sterling!
You're welcome.
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I agree...and I DIDN'T even use that one in the poem...haha
Not to worry...
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I know, just the review. That could
be the start of an new one...
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No...don't!
LOL
Perhaps YOU'D like to the honours.
A continuation perhaps?
Although not sure what follows the spit-roasting-pig except a might fine meal and a big burp afterwards.
Not sure that constitutes a *grunt* as such.
LMAO
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That sounds alright since I like
southern still pork bar-be-cue.
If I wrote is wouldn't get honors.
But thanks for the jester!!!
Comment from oNray
Same old you, very witty oops, same YOUNG YOU, very nice job with story- rhyme- and flow. I don't recall the ending as you do but I "can live" with yours
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Same old you, very witty oops, same YOUNG YOU, very nice job with story- rhyme- and flow. I don't recall the ending as you do but I "can live" with yours
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Haha...thanks for the sixers and delightful response to this poem.
Much appreciated.
Cheers P
Comment from Jean Lutz
If I had more time I would surely deliver a rant on PLASTIC. How I hate that stuff. Alas I haven't time for a rant and anyway your presentation brought a smile to my face.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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If I had more time I would surely deliver a rant on PLASTIC. How I hate that stuff. Alas I haven't time for a rant and anyway your presentation brought a smile to my face.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Thanks for a bonza response Jean...hope you're well.
Cheers P
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Comment from Connie C
I love this! I'd like to be inside your head, Sweetie, when you come up with these clever little stories. I'm wondering if you created the image at the top yourself or found it and the story evolved from there. Either way, it doesn't matter--it gave me a good laugh, especially the line about no air in for the little piggies, which means that none gets out. Good point! The wolf wins again. Your delightfully entertaining poem with its perfect rhyme has given me a few ideas for a poem of my own, which I'm sure won't hold a candle to this. I just noticed this is in a contest, and I'd say you've written a winner.
Hugs,
Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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I love this! I'd like to be inside your head, Sweetie, when you come up with these clever little stories. I'm wondering if you created the image at the top yourself or found it and the story evolved from there. Either way, it doesn't matter--it gave me a good laugh, especially the line about no air in for the little piggies, which means that none gets out. Good point! The wolf wins again. Your delightfully entertaining poem with its perfect rhyme has given me a few ideas for a poem of my own, which I'm sure won't hold a candle to this. I just noticed this is in a contest, and I'd say you've written a winner.
Hugs,
Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Oh god no you DON'T want to be inside my head. Firstly you would be completely corrupted...and then of course you could pilfer all my poem titles. No go pal! LOL
Lubs ya Connie, your review was a treat not to mention the accompanying sixer. THANKYOU
I always love to hear from you and I am not sure where this came from but I had it awhile...and it ALL started from the first verse.
Cheers and thanks again...apologies for lack of presence...still time poor and working on finalising website...
Talk soon
P
xoxoxo
Comment from L. Sherman
Well that's certainly a new take on the old classic. Despite some of the foul language, I actually quit enjoyed this and got a decent laugh of it. Suppose it still has a happy ending, if you consider it from the wolf's perspective.
A pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Well that's certainly a new take on the old classic. Despite some of the foul language, I actually quit enjoyed this and got a decent laugh of it. Suppose it still has a happy ending, if you consider it from the wolf's perspective.
A pleasure to read.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Many thanks and unfortunately no escaping a bit of piggy language...
Cheers P
PS The wolf agrees! LOL
Comment from cvcopac
I'd say you're a ham lover of champion proportions, P. This is brilliant and I read it a couple of times just for enjoyment: language, language, language, rhythm and rhyme. The story's clever and I'd loved reading this one even more so as a kid. Seriously. The language, alone, generates enthusiasm and is only aided by the cadence and rhyme. The modern "Three Little Pigs" metaphor's our every dislike and fear of plastic. The closing two stanzas couldn't be any better. Brilliant writing, P, and worthy of a frame. Kenny
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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I'd say you're a ham lover of champion proportions, P. This is brilliant and I read it a couple of times just for enjoyment: language, language, language, rhythm and rhyme. The story's clever and I'd loved reading this one even more so as a kid. Seriously. The language, alone, generates enthusiasm and is only aided by the cadence and rhyme. The modern "Three Little Pigs" metaphor's our every dislike and fear of plastic. The closing two stanzas couldn't be any better. Brilliant writing, P, and worthy of a frame. Kenny
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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LOL Yes, very large-ish proportions! Thanks for a beaut review and sixer K...glad I could encourage you to read it twice.
Hope I didn't ham it up too much but I have a feeling this had plenty of grunt! LOL
Cheers and thanks again
P
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You're like Merlin or Gandaff; you pop up and dissapear just as quickly. It was a beaut and much appreciated. K
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Pfffft!
(and she's gone again!)
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Comment from Louise Michelle
OMG! This one is simply brilliant, C.P. This is one hell of an adult take on an old nursery rhyme. I wouldn't mind being read this at night, but I'd be laughing too hard to get any sleep.
The whole thing was packed with clever language from top to bottom and it's hard to choose favorite lines, but a few are:
I love cousin's new-age home and the wolf needed an intercom. Also I cracked up at the password being eaten and, of course, being packed like pork chops.
Your notes at the end are too much. You little devil!
Big Cyber Hug,
Lou
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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OMG! This one is simply brilliant, C.P. This is one hell of an adult take on an old nursery rhyme. I wouldn't mind being read this at night, but I'd be laughing too hard to get any sleep.
The whole thing was packed with clever language from top to bottom and it's hard to choose favorite lines, but a few are:
I love cousin's new-age home and the wolf needed an intercom. Also I cracked up at the password being eaten and, of course, being packed like pork chops.
Your notes at the end are too much. You little devil!
Big Cyber Hug,
Lou
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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LOL thanks for a bonza review Lou Lou...it was written ages ago but I only finished it recently and thought Story in a Poem lovers might like my slant on the piggy tail.
Many thanks again...
Cheers C.P.
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Comment from Ankh
You have to look up Greenjelly - 3 Little Pigs on youtube. That is a genius song. The words are hilarious. This piece reminds me of that song lol...except they call out Rambo to take the wolf down. :-)
Seth x
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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You have to look up Greenjelly - 3 Little Pigs on youtube. That is a genius song. The words are hilarious. This piece reminds me of that song lol...except they call out Rambo to take the wolf down. :-)
Seth x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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LOL Okay I will. Thanks for the heads up.
Much appreciate your review.
Cheers P
Comment from Galactia
LOL not sure ehat to say. It flowed smoothly and very creative. It sounds like you have been busy doing arts and craft and changing dippers. But children would love it especially boys at 8
Great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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LOL not sure ehat to say. It flowed smoothly and very creative. It sounds like you have been busy doing arts and craft and changing dippers. But children would love it especially boys at 8
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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LOL Thanks Tia...much appreciate your thoughtful review.
Cheers P
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Comment from Earl of Oxford
Perfect perky profile pic, pretty P. (hows that for alliteration?)
I didn't get, 'IT pissed on straw and so IT should' - are you referring to piggy who you previously referred to as 'he', or am I just being dim?
A pig brother called 'spare ribs' Haha.
That fotten Wolf sure neds to brush his teeth - 'One manky dose of maggot breath' - more loud laughing here.
'shit-scared/split' - fun and clever internal rhyme.
Shouldn't the 1st gippis's name be capitalised as 'Pork Loins'?
How could I not award this hilarious and so clever write a 'sixer'? Had me in stitches throughout at your unique brand of written humour. I stopped highlighting lines, as they're ALL brilliant.
I reckon only an Aussie Sheila could write anything like this. Bravo!
After all that, Tom won't allow me to give you another 'sixer'. So unfair.
Cheers, Ray x
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Perfect perky profile pic, pretty P. (hows that for alliteration?)
I didn't get, 'IT pissed on straw and so IT should' - are you referring to piggy who you previously referred to as 'he', or am I just being dim?
A pig brother called 'spare ribs' Haha.
That fotten Wolf sure neds to brush his teeth - 'One manky dose of maggot breath' - more loud laughing here.
'shit-scared/split' - fun and clever internal rhyme.
Shouldn't the 1st gippis's name be capitalised as 'Pork Loins'?
How could I not award this hilarious and so clever write a 'sixer'? Had me in stitches throughout at your unique brand of written humour. I stopped highlighting lines, as they're ALL brilliant.
I reckon only an Aussie Sheila could write anything like this. Bravo!
After all that, Tom won't allow me to give you another 'sixer'. So unfair.
Cheers, Ray x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Haha...awesome alliteration LOL
Thanks so much for a delightful review and the wish for some six Ray. Now, "It pissed on straw and so it should" = it was much better than straw as of course it should be. It was better than "it was much better than "it shit on straw..." LOL
I knew the Pork Loins would throw some...(my fault) that was just a reference to the pigs...just like "bacon" "hams" "hogs"...just exhausting all the curly tailed references I could get my little Aussie hands on.
Glad you enjoyed my poem though, I really don't do fictional stuff like this but its been hanging around awhile and I needed to shift it.
Cheers and thanks again
P
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