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Comment from Gungalo
This is really good and I enjoyed reading the language. Seems granpa was used to these things cause he didn't worry at all.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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This is really good and I enjoyed reading the language. Seems granpa was used to these things cause he didn't worry at all.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this.
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Comment from Jean Lutz
I fit right into this story. I was raised in the hills of West Tennessee in the post-depression years right along with chickens and rabbits and other critters. Now in my old age I am settled here in Louisiana and have ridden out more than my share of hurricanes. Gramps knew how to prepare. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I fit right into this story. I was raised in the hills of West Tennessee in the post-depression years right along with chickens and rabbits and other critters. Now in my old age I am settled here in Louisiana and have ridden out more than my share of hurricanes. Gramps knew how to prepare. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad I hit on some true chords. My grandfather was very much like this.
Comment from jjstar
Wow! So wish I had a six for this. I was going to wait till my sixes were reloaded tomorrow, but wasn't sure how longit would be up. My mother-in-law spent lots of time telling stories of the Dust Bowl and other natural disasters and how the family reacted. The vernacular was perfect, and for the requirements, this was spectacular.
Congrats and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Wow! So wish I had a six for this. I was going to wait till my sixes were reloaded tomorrow, but wasn't sure how longit would be up. My mother-in-law spent lots of time telling stories of the Dust Bowl and other natural disasters and how the family reacted. The vernacular was perfect, and for the requirements, this was spectacular.
Congrats and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
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you're very welcome.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the storm that rivalled that of the wizard of oz, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the storm that rivalled that of the wizard of oz, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from MumEsGirl
I loved this one. Great use of the vernacular and great descriptive images of the the bond between young and old as they conspired to ride out the storm in comfort.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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I loved this one. Great use of the vernacular and great descriptive images of the the bond between young and old as they conspired to ride out the storm in comfort.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind and enthusiastic review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
A lovely tale in the vernacular of a small boy. It made for an enjoyable read, a wise gradfather obviously, who could keep a small boy calm through a bad storm and still explain away the chicken dinner ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Hi the author,
A lovely tale in the vernacular of a small boy. It made for an enjoyable read, a wise gradfather obviously, who could keep a small boy calm through a bad storm and still explain away the chicken dinner ...
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind and enthusiastic review.
Comment from gypsycaravan
The story and its simplicity as told by the narrator is charming. You've got a winning tale here, for sure. There are so many wonderful lines, its hard to know where to start. These are a few favorites.
" a flock a blackbirds come asailin' past me like one huge body held together with yarn "
" juicer doodad that I thunk was an ash tray, since Ma used it fer that sometimes. "
"that weren't nailed down flyin' by and kissin' the house good-bye"
"hoedown with a bad jug a shine in play."
One small suggestion---The way you use "rung" here, I think it should be spelled, "wrung"--"Once they was all rung out"
Really a clever little story and written quite well.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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The story and its simplicity as told by the narrator is charming. You've got a winning tale here, for sure. There are so many wonderful lines, its hard to know where to start. These are a few favorites.
" a flock a blackbirds come asailin' past me like one huge body held together with yarn "
" juicer doodad that I thunk was an ash tray, since Ma used it fer that sometimes. "
"that weren't nailed down flyin' by and kissin' the house good-bye"
"hoedown with a bad jug a shine in play."
One small suggestion---The way you use "rung" here, I think it should be spelled, "wrung"--"Once they was all rung out"
Really a clever little story and written quite well.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you very much for your kind and useful review. I'll change it to wrung.
Comment from leftstorywriter
The language and the accents help to bring the story alive. The story reads almost like a voice-over for a movie.
"He pulled a dozen outta a crock.." It's a little ambiguous as to whether "dozen" refers to the lemons or the candles. The "crock" helps to clarify but not completely.
I enjoyed the details like ... "if the wind cain't go through a house, it'll just push it outta its way. " and "plastic straws he'd kept from a soda he'd drunk at a carnival" and "That were a stretcher ...".
Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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The language and the accents help to bring the story alive. The story reads almost like a voice-over for a movie.
"He pulled a dozen outta a crock.." It's a little ambiguous as to whether "dozen" refers to the lemons or the candles. The "crock" helps to clarify but not completely.
I enjoyed the details like ... "if the wind cain't go through a house, it'll just push it outta its way. " and "plastic straws he'd kept from a soda he'd drunk at a carnival" and "That were a stretcher ...".
Good job.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your kind and helpful review. I did change that line to include the candles and eliminate the ambiguity.
Comment from djsaxon
Absolutely love it. Killer use of what I presume were the prerequisites of the contest. The vernacular remains consistent and hugely entertaining throughout the piece. Really sensational effort. DJ
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Absolutely love it. Killer use of what I presume were the prerequisites of the contest. The vernacular remains consistent and hugely entertaining throughout the piece. Really sensational effort. DJ
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review and the the huge rating.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
That was one heckuva storm, for sure
that came brewing over Grampa's farm
sounds like some things took a tour
but Gramps was not alarmed
some hens, rabbits and nanny goat
all waited inside with you
but one hen won't be able to gloat
she and some dumplings will have to do
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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That was one heckuva storm, for sure
that came brewing over Grampa's farm
sounds like some things took a tour
but Gramps was not alarmed
some hens, rabbits and nanny goat
all waited inside with you
but one hen won't be able to gloat
she and some dumplings will have to do
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this and for the poem.