My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 "Losing the Light."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hi, Jaq.
Typo to start - should be 'from' I think (unless that's your Scots accent, LOL)
7th couplet appers as reverse syntax, so maybe 2nd line: 'now engulfed by blackest hue'
Indeed, we ALL need to love OURSELVES before we think we're worthy of anyone else, though it's easier said than done.
You have a mixture here of positivity and doubt - like most of us, if we're honest, but YOUR honesty in bearing your inner thoughts is very compelling.
You're nice enough and pretty enough to build again if you try. You'll have them horny blokes in kilts banging your door down (no pun intended, LOL).
You'll be fine, Jaq.
Best wishes, Ray x
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, Jaq.
Typo to start - should be 'from' I think (unless that's your Scots accent, LOL)
7th couplet appers as reverse syntax, so maybe 2nd line: 'now engulfed by blackest hue'
Indeed, we ALL need to love OURSELVES before we think we're worthy of anyone else, though it's easier said than done.
You have a mixture here of positivity and doubt - like most of us, if we're honest, but YOUR honesty in bearing your inner thoughts is very compelling.
You're nice enough and pretty enough to build again if you try. You'll have them horny blokes in kilts banging your door down (no pun intended, LOL).
You'll be fine, Jaq.
Best wishes, Ray x
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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It says From on mine :( LOL. Thanks for your help on this one Ray, it's always appreciated. Just having a wee wobble here. It shall pass eventually. :) Jaq xx
Comment from October21
Hi, Jaq! You convey the feeling of being lost very well. It has happened to many of us in life. Such a beautiful moral in this! Sometimes we have to learn to accept the people we are and appreciate things about us. It can take some time but worth it in the end:) Fantastic use of rhetorical questions:) Great write!
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, Jaq! You convey the feeling of being lost very well. It has happened to many of us in life. Such a beautiful moral in this! Sometimes we have to learn to accept the people we are and appreciate things about us. It can take some time but worth it in the end:) Fantastic use of rhetorical questions:) Great write!
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Shenel, I don't know why it postd before i was finished...lol. Oh well, as always your words are appreciated. :) Jaq x