Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Good

Hello. Overall good shot at this Senryu. Not an easy poem to achieve. Good picture you attached though. The use of the suck job as choice of words at least for me didn't have the justice I was looking for. Good luck and cheers.

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thanks Benjamin, sorry my suck job didn't work on you. LOL
Cheers

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is very funny in its truth. I am often (Gee, it is often) making up for bad behavior by cleaning and toiling. Guess I should stop complaining about housecleaning.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thanks Bill, most appreciate your delightful review. You made me chuckle.

Comment from ocruickshank

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem. I have to agree helping out after a dust up is the way to go. Great flow, imagery, and all around job. Great job n good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thanks so much. Most appreciate your thoughtful review.

Comment from Cletus Hardiman

Excellent

Well, you did "suck" me in on this one! LOL But, that thing the the person in the picture is holding in his hand...well I am used to doing that! Somebody has to clean! Cletus Hardiman

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012

LOL. Thanks for your thoughtful review and good for you for being so handy around the house.

reply by Cletus Hardiman on 02-Dec-2012

You are welcome for the review! Clete

Comment from Deborah Marie

Excellent

Funny and cleverly written poem that fits the senryu poem form. The picture fits well as one is not sure who you're talking about if it wasn't there. Job well done. Good luck in your contest..

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012

Thanks so much and you make a good point. I toiled over whether or not to use "his" or "him" somewhere. I have altered satori now to "time for his suck job".
Much appreciated.

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

Yes, very good. In a tiny space you have conveyed a great deal (men can't verbalize their feelings, so find other ways to grovel). Like the "suck" pun.

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012

Many thanks and yes, the vaccuming is a great start on the grovel list. Haha.
Cheers.