Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in excellent 3/5/3 form
vivid descriptive detail makes this scene come alive
thrash is a perfect word to bring life and drama to the scene
nice alliteration in winter winds
good appeal to senses not limited to the visual with the sound of the rattling limbs and the feel of the winter winds :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Oh, Booke thank you so much. Rattling limbs is the message of winter I wanted to convey, and of course you "got" it.

Comment from ocruickshank

Excellent

I really enjoyed this Haiku and the art chosen. I got feel for the conditions associated with winter. The structure and flow is great.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for your kind review

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This 3-5-3 nature haiku has great concrete, multi-sensual imagery involving color, motion and sound. Very well written and beautifully presented. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you, Jeanie. I am honored, as I know "what you speak of"

reply by Jeanie Mercer on 13-Nov-2012

I just looked again at the poem and wonder if I missed seeing a typo earlier. Did you not mean to write THRASH instead of "trash"? That's the way I read it, with my tricky eyesight. Anyway, in case you want to change it....

Comment from EMB

Excellent

This is a very nice piece. With just a few words, you place readers right out into the cold, listening to the sounds of the wind and bare trees. And you did it with the smallest of haiku. Nice.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you, Edward. That is exactly the impression I wanted to leave

Comment from Rondeno

Average

Let me apologize from the outset for giving you a low-ish score. It's just that a haiku (eleven syllables, for goodness' sake) can't be compared with something grander and more complex. It has charm, no doubt about that - but (if I may be so bold) maybe "branch racks bark" could be an alternative last line?

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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

This is a haiku, whoever you are, and it follows a certain syllable count. Possibly, you do not know what a haiku is so you should really read the requirements. If you don't like the prompt don't take it out on the poem or haiku.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"stark grey trees
thrash in wintery winds
limbs rattling"
this is a nice piece of poetry, i especially liked the satori: "limbs rattling". unfortunately you have 6 syllables in the second line.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x



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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012

Thank you Rebekka, I changed it. I'm always so thankful, when people point errors out to me. A "thumb" is coming your way.