Comment from Deorre Leonard

Excellent

What a great contest entry. Its emotional and heart breaking. This has a good flow the structure is good. Him who was my husband and her the heartless hoe. Excellent choice of words. Deorre

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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Thank you

Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

I love this! You have done an amazing job.

Good luck in the betrayal writing prompt contest

This is my favorite part:

Many hearts do get broken
And mine is riddled with pain
But I will always tread broken glass to get to you
I just wish you felt the same,

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem. You capture the tone well, I felt the sting of betrayal. I like the situation. You word choice was expressive.
Barbara

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012

Thank you for your review allborn66, so pleased you liked ' Broken glass ' Yes she did indeed feel the ultimate betrayal