Thoughtful Poems and Prose
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Comment from robina1978
Your art is beautiful and complements your poem perfectly. Your poem rhymes all the way and is about the sea/ocean. It always moves and wants you to go in, probably drown.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Your art is beautiful and complements your poem perfectly. Your poem rhymes all the way and is about the sea/ocean. It always moves and wants you to go in, probably drown.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Ine, for your kind words and extra special rating.
Nicole
Comment from barkingdog
The sea sounds almost human as you call it tortured, wreckless, haunting as it calls people to join it's excitement.
It's almost sensual with its whispers and soft murmurs that becon like the sirens called to the sailors.
This stanzas are very sexy:
'White horses ride your wild waves,
Foaming above hidden caves.
Ceaseless tossing and pounding
Rhythmic movement resounding.
Day and night, your surges swell,
Brooding depths where sailors fell.
Breakers rise, curve, bow and fall
Worshiping the Siren's call. '
:) e
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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The sea sounds almost human as you call it tortured, wreckless, haunting as it calls people to join it's excitement.
It's almost sensual with its whispers and soft murmurs that becon like the sirens called to the sailors.
This stanzas are very sexy:
'White horses ride your wild waves,
Foaming above hidden caves.
Ceaseless tossing and pounding
Rhythmic movement resounding.
Day and night, your surges swell,
Brooding depths where sailors fell.
Breakers rise, curve, bow and fall
Worshiping the Siren's call. '
:) e
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Ellen.
Nicole
Comment from bob cullen
This really deserves a ten, five for the poem and probably more for the art work. Your poetry is good but your painting is truly extraordinary.
Loved the rhyme and imagery of the poem
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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This really deserves a ten, five for the poem and probably more for the art work. Your poetry is good but your painting is truly extraordinary.
Loved the rhyme and imagery of the poem
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Bob! Your super sixer made my day.
Yours sincerely
Nicole
Comment from fayesh
I think your rhymed couplet of the sea is nicely done. You write using a nice assortment of metaphors. I particularly like the reference to mythology and the "Sirens", which I think should be capitalized.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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I think your rhymed couplet of the sea is nicely done. You write using a nice assortment of metaphors. I particularly like the reference to mythology and the "Sirens", which I think should be capitalized.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your good review and suggestion, I will look into it.
Comment from Tina McKala
Very powerful poem full of emotions, to me it seems like a perfect metaphor for a bit wicked feelings or passion, anyway, I loved it a lot! Tina
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Very powerful poem full of emotions, to me it seems like a perfect metaphor for a bit wicked feelings or passion, anyway, I loved it a lot! Tina
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your good review Tina.
Comment from Chris Petersen
Great use of rhyming couplets throughout this hauntingly powerful piece about the restlessness and ever fickle fortunes or folly of the deep blue sea. Reminds me of a sailors saying: "Red sky in the morning, sailor take warning. Red sky at night, sailor's delight."
Exceptional write. Chris. :-)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Great use of rhyming couplets throughout this hauntingly powerful piece about the restlessness and ever fickle fortunes or folly of the deep blue sea. Reminds me of a sailors saying: "Red sky in the morning, sailor take warning. Red sky at night, sailor's delight."
Exceptional write. Chris. :-)
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you Chris for your WONDERFUL review!
Comment from EMB
Hmm. At a glance, I'd say someone is definitely a Poseidon worshiper. :) You bring the ocean to life with this personification that comes from multiple angles. I really enjoyed the rhyming scheme as well.
Excellent work, CG!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Hmm. At a glance, I'd say someone is definitely a Poseidon worshiper. :) You bring the ocean to life with this personification that comes from multiple angles. I really enjoyed the rhyming scheme as well.
Excellent work, CG!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your good review - no, not a Greek god worshipper! LOL :)
Comment from Gungalo
Such a write of the sea and written in some wonderful quatrains. I really like this:
Wild, reckless, wind-blown hair
Enticing, luring without a care.
Raging torrents cover their heads
Passion turning to watery beds.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Such a write of the sea and written in some wonderful quatrains. I really like this:
Wild, reckless, wind-blown hair
Enticing, luring without a care.
Raging torrents cover their heads
Passion turning to watery beds.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your great review!
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Smiles.
Comment from Dodey
Wonderful rhyming couplets. your words bring clear imagery in this great story/poem..A pleasure to read and review such fine work..Bravo...Dee
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Wonderful rhyming couplets. your words bring clear imagery in this great story/poem..A pleasure to read and review such fine work..Bravo...Dee
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thank you Dee for your good review, much appreciated!
Comment from petervs
This was a very sensual poem, can i say? The imagery describes the vibe of the ocean, and then I pictured the mermaid having having sex with the pirate in the artwork! =p I don't know why I thought about that! Sorry if that is crude... but the words and the rhymes painted a picture for me! This is a good one! The metre police will probably kill you, but screw them, I don't even understand metre in poetry, so who cares!! =p Thanks for sharing... This was visually awesome! ;-)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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This was a very sensual poem, can i say? The imagery describes the vibe of the ocean, and then I pictured the mermaid having having sex with the pirate in the artwork! =p I don't know why I thought about that! Sorry if that is crude... but the words and the rhymes painted a picture for me! This is a good one! The metre police will probably kill you, but screw them, I don't even understand metre in poetry, so who cares!! =p Thanks for sharing... This was visually awesome! ;-)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your good review. I wrote this when I was 16. I had a lot of fantasy stuff going on back then (30yrs ago! LOL). It will probably be the only serious poem I will ever write again, it was too personal. Yes the parking 'meter' police have been around - nasty s#%*s! Thanks - much appreciated.
