A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
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Comment from steevie
an interesting poem, Bic. The title of your poem, I wonder if this is a real word or merely a made up word. One note, without correction, we lack direction. (That was not intended to rhyme lol)
Correction is good for the soul, but those who despise correction are proud and unteachable. Even the 'corrector' get it wrong sometimes.
well done
steve
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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an interesting poem, Bic. The title of your poem, I wonder if this is a real word or merely a made up word. One note, without correction, we lack direction. (That was not intended to rhyme lol)
Correction is good for the soul, but those who despise correction are proud and unteachable. Even the 'corrector' get it wrong sometimes.
well done
steve
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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It is a word my friend and it is what the poem tells you it is the clues are in there...
...no one should despise correction or be afraid of it but when that suggestion is made especially forcefully and the information is wrong suppose you dont know any better where does that leave you...thats the point IM trying to make if you see what I mean...
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okay, i think I understand you. Like in a review of someones poem, one had better know specific rules regarding poetry, to make an informed correction of someone's write
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This was a very interesting approach. But it works and I really like it. Great job making it infectious. I'll remember this one for a while.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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This was a very interesting approach. But it works and I really like it. Great job making it infectious. I'll remember this one for a while.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Excellent, much appreciated.
Comment from Janeyjane
i liked this poem very much the flow and narration have been done very well. I give this a well deserving five stars. Thank you very much for sharing will be looking forward to more of your work.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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i liked this poem very much the flow and narration have been done very well. I give this a well deserving five stars. Thank you very much for sharing will be looking forward to more of your work.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Many thanks.
Comment from Anisa-
Hmmm. This left me feeling a little...unsatisfied. I'm not sure what to think or feel about it, but I do know the sort of spinning repetition took from what could have been an interesting message.
Anyway, I don't believe there is anything technically wrong with your poem. It just wasn't in my taste.
Anisa
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Hmmm. This left me feeling a little...unsatisfied. I'm not sure what to think or feel about it, but I do know the sort of spinning repetition took from what could have been an interesting message.
Anyway, I don't believe there is anything technically wrong with your poem. It just wasn't in my taste.
Anisa
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Many thanks.
Comment from Michael Sundaresan
The flow is nice and some description of the disease is given, but personally I think there should be more. I don't get much of an emotional reaction of of this poem, and some of the lines seem odd.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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The flow is nice and some description of the disease is given, but personally I think there should be more. I don't get much of an emotional reaction of of this poem, and some of the lines seem odd.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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No worries.
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Wow! This was a brilliant piece of writing. Very clever use of syphilis disease as a metaphor for writing. Great use of alliteration throughout as well as a fluidity that really proves the overall clarity of the thought. Holly
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Wow! This was a brilliant piece of writing. Very clever use of syphilis disease as a metaphor for writing. Great use of alliteration throughout as well as a fluidity that really proves the overall clarity of the thought. Holly
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Excellent, much appreciated.
Comment from William Mason
Nicely done, and a subject that so few even think about. It's refreshing and sad at the same time. Makes me, as a reader, think about the things I have done with my life and realize that I am blessed. Others are no so lucky but I offer no pity, just sympathy. Pity is the greatest insult one can bestow. I love this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Nicely done, and a subject that so few even think about. It's refreshing and sad at the same time. Makes me, as a reader, think about the things I have done with my life and realize that I am blessed. Others are no so lucky but I offer no pity, just sympathy. Pity is the greatest insult one can bestow. I love this poem.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Excellent.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Diseased writing? Yes, it abounds. That's what we're here to cure with honest, gentle critique, yes? The willing will be cured. :) nancy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Diseased writing? Yes, it abounds. That's what we're here to cure with honest, gentle critique, yes? The willing will be cured. :) nancy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks N... much appreciate.
Comment from Just2Write
Syphliography - a great name for diseased writing. It appears to be spreading like the clap in a whorehouse these days. To the writers who spread this disease - I say a pox on them. To the writers who are infected through no fault of their own - I recomment getting an innoculation to make them immune.
Rose.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Syphliography - a great name for diseased writing. It appears to be spreading like the clap in a whorehouse these days. To the writers who spread this disease - I say a pox on them. To the writers who are infected through no fault of their own - I recomment getting an innoculation to make them immune.
Rose.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Well the inocculation is called PEN-icilan, get it, LOL. Thanks to my old pal Earl for that one.
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LOL. Great pun.
Comment from rashi kumar
Oh!
Syphilis writing disease?
A very interesting poem,
'permeating ambition'- very appealing phrase in context of syphilis.
Rhyming is nice,
I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Oh!
Syphilis writing disease?
A very interesting poem,
'permeating ambition'- very appealing phrase in context of syphilis.
Rhyming is nice,
I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks, much appreciated Rashi...
