Mama's Soul
An homage to the soul of the family.17 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Excellent dialect and you get right to the soul of the family. Your examples are what gives this write soul as well. Best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Excellent dialect and you get right to the soul of the family. Your examples are what gives this write soul as well. Best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Indy. The soul is pretty nebulous until you give it some perspective. Who am I? Norman Vincent W. W. Peel?
Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Realist101
Hi there! Great dialect, and for sure. We mama's make the worl' go 'roun. Well, most do. Maybe some of us don't ... none the less, this is great writing. Original and fun to read too. Nice work!! Susan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Hi there! Great dialect, and for sure. We mama's make the worl' go 'roun. Well, most do. Maybe some of us don't ... none the less, this is great writing. Original and fun to read too. Nice work!! Susan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks, Suse. I appreciate the read and the comments. You're right about mamas. X
Comment from vfbryant
I really like this. The unique dialect, rhythm and phraseology fit the subject matter perfectly, and there is a strong tone of affection that runs through it. Very effective piece.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I really like this. The unique dialect, rhythm and phraseology fit the subject matter perfectly, and there is a strong tone of affection that runs through it. Very effective piece.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, vfbryant. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from Rembrandt
Wonderful and difficult poem
Use of dialect sets the mental image of the ethnic source.
The lead in sentence, "Your soul is your all" is great hook.
The list of things:
What she does for the needy, who she is with family,how her ordinary life is made extraordinary(bread rise-calloused hands-corned feet), and the perseverance in the light of her eye...all are excellent poetic descriptive moments that let the reader see the "All" Excellent!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Wonderful and difficult poem
Use of dialect sets the mental image of the ethnic source.
The lead in sentence, "Your soul is your all" is great hook.
The list of things:
What she does for the needy, who she is with family,how her ordinary life is made extraordinary(bread rise-calloused hands-corned feet), and the perseverance in the light of her eye...all are excellent poetic descriptive moments that let the reader see the "All" Excellent!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Rembrandt. Your read is everything I could have hoped for. I appreciate. X
Comment from visionary1234
Well done! word count slipping in just under the wire - what a unique take on this prompt! I loved the choices you made, including the dialect. Good luck in this competition - you deserve to do well!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Well done! word count slipping in just under the wire - what a unique take on this prompt! I loved the choices you made, including the dialect. Good luck in this competition - you deserve to do well!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, visionary. As far as the soul goes, I went with my experience. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from BethShelby
I really enjoyed reading this. I like the dialect you use to describe Mama's soul. I think this one is a real contender.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I really enjoyed reading this. I like the dialect you use to describe Mama's soul. I think this one is a real contender.
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Beth. I'm glad you liked the dialect. I was trying to make it feel 'personal.' Thanks again. X
Comment from robyn corum
I'm not sure that I agree with the actual 'definition' portion of this piece, but I have to give it to you for creativity and for style. The 'voice' you brought to it was classic. Very nice.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I'm not sure that I agree with the actual 'definition' portion of this piece, but I have to give it to you for creativity and for style. The 'voice' you brought to it was classic. Very nice.
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, robyn. I'm glad you enjoyed. As far as the definition goes, 'soul' is a pretty nebulous concept, open to all sorts of interpretation.
Thanks again. X