haiku (insect trills resound)
sounds of twilight13 total reviews
Comment from marycec
Good double haiku.You matched the criteria for syllable count and created a lovely picture of nature's soft tones. I liked the alliteration of insect trills resound and loved cricket rhapsody.
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Good double haiku.You matched the criteria for syllable count and created a lovely picture of nature's soft tones. I liked the alliteration of insect trills resound and loved cricket rhapsody.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
Comment from uniqueauthor
This is a good Haiku, but you have not followed the rules. They don't ask for a Haiku suite. The ask for a single Haiku. You don't need the second line.
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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This is a good Haiku, but you have not followed the rules. They don't ask for a Haiku suite. The ask for a single Haiku. You don't need the second line.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Hi uniqueauthor, I have seen SO many people add an extra verse to contests like this ,so I thought it would do NO harm. :o) I definitetly want to stay within the rules so I took one verse out. :o) Thanks for NOT docking me for the second verse. Very much appreciated!
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Your're welcome. A lot of people do the same as you, but I guarantee they don't win the contest, because there's more than seventeen syllables. Peace for today.
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Many Blessings! I have always respected what you have to say. It means a LOT to me to get things RIGHT!
Comment from RaymondJohn
If this is acceptable by the poem's requirements, it certainly is fine with me. You have excellent movement in the words, it tells a story and both have appropriate endings. Best wishes. Ray.
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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If this is acceptable by the poem's requirements, it certainly is fine with me. You have excellent movement in the words, it tells a story and both have appropriate endings. Best wishes. Ray.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Hi Ray, Another reviewer just told me I should not have two verses so I removed one. Im glad you enjoyed the double haiku whilr I had it. The poem now reads... insect trills resound ...throughout the twilight meadow....cricket rhapsody. I wanted you to know I made a change. Thanks for the GREAT review!