The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Why Dad's Shoes?"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Readywriter52
James is very puzzled over Alfina behavior. I know witches use personal objects to cast spells on the object's owner. I think Alfina is doing something similiar. James is too educated and intelligent to think of something like that. I hope whatever Alfina is up to works.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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James is very puzzled over Alfina behavior. I know witches use personal objects to cast spells on the object's owner. I think Alfina is doing something similiar. James is too educated and intelligent to think of something like that. I hope whatever Alfina is up to works.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Very good. Yes, James, for once, is limited by his intelligence. Seems everyone wants Alfina to succeed in whatever she is planning.
Comment from Janie King
I can guarantee you I have no idea what's up with the shoe bit..so I guess I wait and see what happens nexz ... good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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I can guarantee you I have no idea what's up with the shoe bit..so I guess I wait and see what happens nexz ... good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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You won't have to wait very long. I hope to post again tomorrow.
Comment from Belinda
When God passes on curiosity, I was not in the bathroom. So I am now very, very curious of everything, Sasha. I hope you won't delay in posting your next chapter...:)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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When God passes on curiosity, I was not in the bathroom. So I am now very, very curious of everything, Sasha. I hope you won't delay in posting your next chapter...:)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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I'm almost finished with it and hope to post it tomorrow. I have 5 sisters and they were all in the bathroom that day...lol They possess no curiosity whatsoever.
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Ha-ha, I truly love that expression!
Comment from rtobaygo
NICE EXCHANGE BETWEEN JAMES AND CHARLIE. GOOD, CRISP, PRESSING DIALOGUE HELPED SET THE GROWING TENSION IN THE ROOM AND ABOUT THE GRANDMOTHER AND DAD. WELL DONE!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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NICE EXCHANGE BETWEEN JAMES AND CHARLIE. GOOD, CRISP, PRESSING DIALOGUE HELPED SET THE GROWING TENSION IN THE ROOM AND ABOUT THE GRANDMOTHER AND DAD. WELL DONE!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thank you very much. I like to do dialogue...I come from a big family and we all loved to talk! Thanks for the awesome 6 stars too.
Comment from c_lucas
The old ways of burying your troubles. Grandma thought she was helping. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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The old ways of burying your troubles. Grandma thought she was helping. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Grandmother definitely thinks she is helping. Glad yo liked this one.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Did Grandma put some sort of spell on James' father. That might be interesting. I can't wait to see where you are going with this.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Did Grandma put some sort of spell on James' father. That might be interesting. I can't wait to see where you are going with this.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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I'm working on that chapter right now. Hope to post it tomorrow. I am glad you liked this one.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An intriguing chapter, Sasha, leaving us all
wondering what grandmother is up to with those
shoes... some black magic perhaps??
I hugged them both and then left(,) feeling more confused than before I arrived.
Whether I like(d) it
Great.
Margaret
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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An intriguing chapter, Sasha, leaving us all
wondering what grandmother is up to with those
shoes... some black magic perhaps??
I hugged them both and then left(,) feeling more confused than before I arrived.
Whether I like(d) it
Great.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. We are very close to the end. I am so pleased you have liked this so far.
Comment from Grammies
Very good story continuation. Your characters are believable. I found a few little errors you might want to edit:
- her hands in a tight fist ( hands in tight fists pressed...)
- whether I like it or not ( whether I liked it or not)
This is quite a complicated plot but you apparently are doing well so far.
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Very good story continuation. Your characters are believable. I found a few little errors you might want to edit:
- her hands in a tight fist ( hands in tight fists pressed...)
- whether I like it or not ( whether I liked it or not)
This is quite a complicated plot but you apparently are doing well so far.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thanks for the help with that sentence and catching the spag. I was at a loss as how to write it. Yes, it is a complicated plot but everything is finally starting to fall into place.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Very interesting read, not been with this story, but it has good drama, action, filled with suspense. The writer gives great details at the end to clear things up, (something, I need to get better at.) A real good read, enjoyed.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Very interesting read, not been with this story, but it has good drama, action, filled with suspense. The writer gives great details at the end to clear things up, (something, I need to get better at.) A real good read, enjoyed.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Thanks. I know it is difficult to read a single chapter and make any sense out of the subject. I sincerely appreciate your generous review.
Comment from adewpearl
I love Grandmother :-) James's mother and brother sure don't have much natural curiosity - I'm like James. I'd be consumed by curiosity the second she asked for the shoes, and I'd be jumping out of my skin when she left them in the garden :-)
Whatever she is conjuring up or setting in motion, I'm on her side :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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I love Grandmother :-) James's mother and brother sure don't have much natural curiosity - I'm like James. I'd be consumed by curiosity the second she asked for the shoes, and I'd be jumping out of my skin when she left them in the garden :-)
Whatever she is conjuring up or setting in motion, I'm on her side :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2012
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Me too. Yes, I have a exaggerated curiosity that has been the cause of far too many problems in my life. My mother told me I came out of the womb speaking and my first word was "WHY" and the second was "Why Not?". Sadly, nothing has changed since.