Dog Day Afternoon
A Day in a Hero's Life.16 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Everyone loves stories about innocent animals. Great personification of the hero to come. I can envision that teacup Maltese baring its teeth. I love the details in this. An excellent write.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Everyone loves stories about innocent animals. Great personification of the hero to come. I can envision that teacup Maltese baring its teeth. I love the details in this. An excellent write.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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I am going to complete it, I have a few cute lines to add to it, isnt it strange how we come up with this stuff?
Comment from donaldww
Cool story. I used to live in an apartment on Broad St., and would walk my dog in Battery Park. LOL.
It scared the shit out of any one who laid eyes one me. << I scared...
Wasn't castration was bad enough. << ?? Needs one was, and possibly question mark.
Cheers!
DW
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Cool story. I used to live in an apartment on Broad St., and would walk my dog in Battery Park. LOL.
It scared the shit out of any one who laid eyes one me. << I scared...
Wasn't castration was bad enough. << ?? Needs one was, and possibly question mark.
Cheers!
DW
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Thanks, you are so cool, and I cant beleive how much you have been putting out lately, Oooph, I hope that doesn't sound racy Ha Ha,
Comment from Geronymous
now what genre do we have here? animal story from pov of a mongrel? offbeat and quirky. also original. now whats going to happen next? what made u do such a different story? i love ur stories but u know what i suspect? on the assumption that this is not a contest story where one is limited to the subject, i think u avoid the serious issues in life. yes animal abuse is serious but this story is not about that. i am longing for a soul bearing honest to god kind of story from joanne. ok theres a challenge.
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now what genre do we have here? animal story from pov of a mongrel? offbeat and quirky. also original. now whats going to happen next? what made u do such a different story? i love ur stories but u know what i suspect? on the assumption that this is not a contest story where one is limited to the subject, i think u avoid the serious issues in life. yes animal abuse is serious but this story is not about that. i am longing for a soul bearing honest to god kind of story from joanne. ok theres a challenge.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Oh you slay me, I want to complete it, let's assume all of these pieces are a complex part of me, this dog is an outcast yet saves, some where along the line I crave recognition., attention. This site is for the quirky me. The real stuff is still being worked on......Thanks For the shining stars!
Comment from johnabrennan1
JoAnn, this is brilliant!! I love the storyline and you tell it really well from the dog's perspective. The way you
use their true ages is a clever touch.
I'm going out to Macy's to buy me a hat, and then I'll take it off to you. Well done!!!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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JoAnn, this is brilliant!! I love the storyline and you tell it really well from the dog's perspective. The way you
use their true ages is a clever touch.
I'm going out to Macy's to buy me a hat, and then I'll take it off to you. Well done!!!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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thanks john, get one for me so i can return the gesture, i have to finish it, kind of a bat dog
Comment from Sloegin
Good story and timely. Several new novels written from the dog's point of view.
The thing I liked best is the way you handled the ending. No detailed account of the dog's attack. You left it up to me to visualize the results of the 'action'.
A couple of nits that need tweaking: space before "as a lamb.
"I crawled out from UNDER the cardboard box I sleep IN" One or the other, under or in.
"I was still considered a bitches man." change to "bitch's
Keep writing.
Sloegin
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Good story and timely. Several new novels written from the dog's point of view.
The thing I liked best is the way you handled the ending. No detailed account of the dog's attack. You left it up to me to visualize the results of the 'action'.
A couple of nits that need tweaking: space before "as a lamb.
"I crawled out from UNDER the cardboard box I sleep IN" One or the other, under or in.
"I was still considered a bitches man." change to "bitch's
Keep writing.
Sloegin
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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thanks for taking the time to edit and for the amazing review
Comment from Carole Rosa
Joann, How very sad! At first, as I read the story, I thought you were writing this story about yourself. I guess there has to be a second part before a Hero and a Rescue can come into play. This part of the story is excellent. Carole
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Joann, How very sad! At first, as I read the story, I thought you were writing this story about yourself. I guess there has to be a second part before a Hero and a Rescue can come into play. This part of the story is excellent. Carole
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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So glad you enjoyed it, i say a show about strays and they reminded me so much of people.thanks for this wonderful review