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The Heir Apparent

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A family learns their father is a serial killer

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Comment from c_lucas
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It good to get back to James, again. This is very wel written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read. Good job.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I am pleased you continue to find this interesting. I have been away for so long I actually had to reread it just to remember what was going on...lol
reply by c_lucas on 02-Jul-2012
    You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
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It was only nine-thirty, and - add comma
Basically, I'm waiting for new chapters to really comment. I've read these before and can't remember well enough what has been changed :-)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    Sadly, I've made so many changes, even I don't remember.
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Sasha,

I think it is a good idea that someone talks to the press. People need to know that they are sorry for what happened and that they understand their grief. I am wondering just what James will say. Well done.....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    I agree. Not speaking leaves the public wondering what they knew and what they didn't know.
Comment from LadyTreana
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. It pulled me In wanting to know more about this case. Very good writing...I will be reading more.

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 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    Thank you very much. I am so pleased you find this interesting.
Comment from RazberryBullet
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Mom is quite a sensible woman--let it all out and (hopefully)be done with it.

James comes across as a sensitive young man confronted by a horrible situation.

Well done!

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 Comment Written 02-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
    Yes, it is a situation most of us cannot fathom ever having to face. I am pleased you liked this one.