Reflections For The New Day
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Hope Is Near"21 total reviews
Comment from Walter L. Jones
Visuals captured in words like a kaleidoscope pouring loose the trappings of a soul lost, tempted by known visions moment of escape, the depression left behind in bottle of crystals on the night stand, truth evades..... Excellent write.. Walt
  |
Visuals captured in words like a kaleidoscope pouring loose the trappings of a soul lost, tempted by known visions moment of escape, the depression left behind in bottle of crystals on the night stand, truth evades..... Excellent write.. Walt
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from Tweedypie
This is an excellent message for those who have addictions to ease their pain. Only thing it is only a temporary fix. When it is over life is worse than it was before. Yes, there is hope. They only have to reach out. Great verse!
|
This is an excellent message for those who have addictions to ease their pain. Only thing it is only a temporary fix. When it is over life is worse than it was before. Yes, there is hope. They only have to reach out. Great verse!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from El Romantico
This one I would have to say is one of your better writings for it has a powerful message that actually displays hope. I need to hear that Angel's song. Thanks for the read.
|
This one I would have to say is one of your better writings for it has a powerful message that actually displays hope. I need to hear that Angel's song. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
wow that's honest, the pain behind the mask, excillerating, a painful ride that you were on for so very long, why? Your bio expressed, tried to say you were this, had become this free spirit, this poem tells me otherwise.
As you say, read my poems, and you will understand/know me. This poem has guts and the courage to write it is all yours!
Brilliant, you laid yourself bare, and i respect that, now i just want to cry, goodnight.
|
wow that's honest, the pain behind the mask, excillerating, a painful ride that you were on for so very long, why? Your bio expressed, tried to say you were this, had become this free spirit, this poem tells me otherwise.
As you say, read my poems, and you will understand/know me. This poem has guts and the courage to write it is all yours!
Brilliant, you laid yourself bare, and i respect that, now i just want to cry, goodnight.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from Elizabeth Clark
If only we all remembered to stop and listen to the winds and whispers of the angel and her songs. There would be a world of peace. THis is so moving, and pure. This is straight from your heart. Thank you for sharing.
|
If only we all remembered to stop and listen to the winds and whispers of the angel and her songs. There would be a world of peace. THis is so moving, and pure. This is straight from your heart. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
Please stop and see
that there is hope.
wonderful message!
very nicely done!
thanx for sharing :)
and for the prose.... just go to nonfiction or fiction or one of the other categories they give.... hope that helps :)
|
Please stop and see
that there is hope.
wonderful message!
very nicely done!
thanx for sharing :)
and for the prose.... just go to nonfiction or fiction or one of the other categories they give.... hope that helps :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from utjoy
First, let me say this is a very emotional read.
Your imagery is very strong and the posted image provides significant impact to the overall effect.
I feel the tug of sincere desire to lift that battered soul up from the mirey clay and rescue and restore it to the position of beloved son or daughter.
I realize that free verse allows the author a great deal of leeway, but the stanzas are so different here, first 7 then three of 5, one of 4, one of 7, then 8 then 4 lines. Some form of symmetry is needed. Line breaks should only differ to offer a dramatic change or pause, so I have been told.
This piece could be a poster for a recovery group! Very nicely done!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
 |
First, let me say this is a very emotional read.
Your imagery is very strong and the posted image provides significant impact to the overall effect.
I feel the tug of sincere desire to lift that battered soul up from the mirey clay and rescue and restore it to the position of beloved son or daughter.
I realize that free verse allows the author a great deal of leeway, but the stanzas are so different here, first 7 then three of 5, one of 4, one of 7, then 8 then 4 lines. Some form of symmetry is needed. Line breaks should only differ to offer a dramatic change or pause, so I have been told.
This piece could be a poster for a recovery group! Very nicely done!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from Irina
Warm touching of your poem give me such a beautiful feeling of hope. Yes, I hear the angel's song. Sure, today your poem has helped all readers. Dear Jewell! Thank you for sharing...for giving many happy moments!
|
Warm touching of your poem give me such a beautiful feeling of hope. Yes, I hear the angel's song. Sure, today your poem has helped all readers. Dear Jewell! Thank you for sharing...for giving many happy moments!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from New Day Rising
Jewel,
I enjoyed this one even more than the last one. The message was clear here, HOPE. It sometimes hard to find the positive but if you look close enough or should I say listen well enough you will find it/hear it. Very nice ending and excellent presentation friend.
Robert
p.s. the first stanza with the "wallow" and the "myrie" for an instant reminded me of a Doors song, "Light My Fire". LOL
|
Jewel,
I enjoyed this one even more than the last one. The message was clear here, HOPE. It sometimes hard to find the positive but if you look close enough or should I say listen well enough you will find it/hear it. Very nice ending and excellent presentation friend.
Robert
p.s. the first stanza with the "wallow" and the "myrie" for an instant reminded me of a Doors song, "Light My Fire". LOL
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005
Comment from WhistleNDixieGirl
Loved the artwork! Sometimes your angel is just around the corner to save you. Sometimes you have to hit rock bottom before you can really begin to climb up and out of what is holding you down. Great write, I really enjoyed this one.
|
Loved the artwork! Sometimes your angel is just around the corner to save you. Sometimes you have to hit rock bottom before you can really begin to climb up and out of what is holding you down. Great write, I really enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2005