Mirage
An unwanted caballo33 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is well-written Susan as your stories always are. It is good to use our own past experiences to find stories. This shows you really had a good heart even as a child. I imagine most adults would have reacted much as your father did to try to reassure the child but not stop to help.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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This is well-written Susan as your stories always are. It is good to use our own past experiences to find stories. This shows you really had a good heart even as a child. I imagine most adults would have reacted much as your father did to try to reassure the child but not stop to help.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Another huge hug Beth! I'm just delighted when you like my stuff. I am learning tho, that my posts are mostly vignettes, or essays, not stories? I need to do dialogue. But it's irritating to me. I don't know why. I'm so weird. But, yes, dad didn't mean any harm, he just wanted to get home. I know now, the fatigue of adulthood. I didn't then. xoxo. Susan
Comment from gifted$1
Many sad images in this short piece. I find that those things we were helpless to do anything about when we were young are the memories that come back to cling. You did a great job describing the heat and the mirage of the water. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Many sad images in this short piece. I find that those things we were helpless to do anything about when we were young are the memories that come back to cling. You did a great job describing the heat and the mirage of the water. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi my friends...Each and every one of your reviews have been read and I so appreciate them. I wish I could tell you how much. More fatigue and down days, and I am so sorry. Thank you very very much. Love to you and yours!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
This story I so sad and even more so since it is true. Your description of the old horse dying is outstanding and I felt as if I were watching it with my own eyes. That was a traumatic event for a 9 year old and I am sorry you had to witness it. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Susan,
This story I so sad and even more so since it is true. Your description of the old horse dying is outstanding and I felt as if I were watching it with my own eyes. That was a traumatic event for a 9 year old and I am sorry you had to witness it. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Chey! Thank you and yes, I still wonder about that poor soul. Just standing there patiently switching it's tail. Dad did slow down, but wouldn't stop. It was a dark colored horse too. In that heat??? Oh God. I wish I could have known. BUT, maybe it's better that I didn't. Then. Thank you my friend...xoxo. Susan
Comment from JW
How sad. However, you did a good job writing this. One could easily picture the scenes within their mind.
Oh well. With death at least the horse no longer suffered. JW
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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How sad. However, you did a good job writing this. One could easily picture the scenes within their mind.
Oh well. With death at least the horse no longer suffered. JW
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Jonathon! Thank you so. I have always wished I could have saved that poor thing. Dad wouldn't stop tho. He was 'pinning his ears back' as he would always say. I don't know why this has stayed with me for 49 years...odd. Well, thank you and blessings my friend. Susan
Comment from Spitfire
What a poignant story. Something that left an indelible impression on you. I felt the weariness and sadness of the old horse. A cryable write. This prose works also as a metaphor about life as we age.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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What a poignant story. Something that left an indelible impression on you. I felt the weariness and sadness of the old horse. A cryable write. This prose works also as a metaphor about life as we age.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Shari! Thanks! I have no idea why that stayed with me. And for 49 years. I tried to use it for a longer story last year and it didn't work. Then I saw this photo! So odd. Well, thank you again. I hope in reality he/she did not suffer. xoxo. Susan
Comment from Darla9
This is so incredibly sad! I feel so bad for that poor horse. You have a good heart, don't blame yourself. Very well written, heartbreaking read.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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This is so incredibly sad! I feel so bad for that poor horse. You have a good heart, don't blame yourself. Very well written, heartbreaking read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Darla! Thank you so much. I will never know...it's so odd how that has stayed with me for all these years. I just hope he didn't suffer. But suffering is a fact of life. I hate it. Thank you again dear. xoxo. Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this sad story about the horse that was faithful to try to follow his master, great emotion and imagery.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this sad story about the horse that was faithful to try to follow his master, great emotion and imagery.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Hi Sweet! I need to forget about that. But it's stayed with me for 49 years. ODD! I wish I could have done something. You know how kids are. And I had the same thing with a lost pup at the state fair one year. Mom and Dad refused to let me have it. I had to turn it over to a gruff old guy. God. I hate it. Just too much mean things in this world. Thanks tho...hugs! Susan
Comment from misscookie
Oh what a sad story to read so early in the mooprning.
I like the was your story moved even though it was sad.
you kept my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you flor sharing
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Oh what a sad story to read so early in the mooprning.
I like the was your story moved even though it was sad.
you kept my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you flor sharing
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi! I send you genuine appreciation and a huge cyber hug for being here for me; and taking time. LOVE, Susan
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes God speaks to us through the mouths of babes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Sometimes God speaks to us through the mouths of babes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi again C! I wish I could get the image of that horse out of my mind. But it's here and will be all my days, that's for sure. This was in your state too, when we were returning from the ocean, headed back to this hell-hole. I wish, no. I can't do that. We cannot go back. Thank you again my friend. Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Well written piece full of sorrow and grief for the child as well as the poor old horse. I frankly couldn't read all of it... just skimmed it because I love animals and I'm way too sensitive to think about them suffering.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Well written piece full of sorrow and grief for the child as well as the poor old horse. I frankly couldn't read all of it... just skimmed it because I love animals and I'm way too sensitive to think about them suffering.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Dear Phyllis...I'm sorry, but to know you appreciate my effort is nice. I don't know why for sure, but I'm just a bag of sorrow. Thank you for being here and I send you a hug. Susan