Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Tweedypie
Jewell, this is a beautiful rhyme.
Rise up out of the ashes, my dear.
Feel the sun shine on your face
Look toward the heavens, Love
Sense all beauty to embrace.
This something that we have to do. It's not easy though, but it is far better than staying in the ashes.
This is certainly a lovely verse.
Jewell, this is a beautiful rhyme.
Rise up out of the ashes, my dear.
Feel the sun shine on your face
Look toward the heavens, Love
Sense all beauty to embrace.
This something that we have to do. It's not easy though, but it is far better than staying in the ashes.
This is certainly a lovely verse.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2005
Comment from mheflin
this is good work but some of the lines messed up the flow and caused it to be uneasy, you have a great idea on encouraging others and that's great, keep your head up trying reading over it and if it's just the way you want it leave it.
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this is good work but some of the lines messed up the flow and caused it to be uneasy, you have a great idea on encouraging others and that's great, keep your head up trying reading over it and if it's just the way you want it leave it.
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
very cool pic!!
great upbeat feeling verse!
understandable
well written
but these two lines.......
"Sense all beauty to embrace.
For beauty comes in many forms" <- maybe find another word for beauty??
just a thought
thanx for sharing :)
very cool pic!!
great upbeat feeling verse!
understandable
well written
but these two lines.......
"Sense all beauty to embrace.
For beauty comes in many forms" <- maybe find another word for beauty??
just a thought
thanx for sharing :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2005
Comment from lynner
Very nice. Perhaps a few suggestions for improvement if I may?
See the sun shine on your face
Perhaps it could be Feel the sunshine on your face?
Feel the joy that's waiting you
Feel the joy that waits for you?
But don't look back, go forward
Don't look back, go forward
Very nice. Perhaps a few suggestions for improvement if I may?
See the sun shine on your face
Perhaps it could be Feel the sunshine on your face?
Feel the joy that's waiting you
Feel the joy that waits for you?
But don't look back, go forward
Don't look back, go forward
Comment Written 22-Feb-2005
Comment from Kingsland
shake off the dust and breath anew>breathe
other than that Jewell
this poem is just fine
when are going to talk
..................John
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shake off the dust and breath anew>breathe
other than that Jewell
this poem is just fine
when are going to talk
..................John
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2005