Gima The Beginning
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Comment from InterestingRon
Hi ellen
It's always a little sad when a good book comes to an end - or has it? You left quite a few interesting characters still standing.
You finished on a high with more gory details. Actually, you seemed to have grown in confidence in the blood and action sequences. You might want to take another look at your earlier chapters to add a bit more spunk?
Sorry, bloody thing will not allow me to award a six star rating.
Ron xx
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Hi ellen
It's always a little sad when a good book comes to an end - or has it? You left quite a few interesting characters still standing.
You finished on a high with more gory details. Actually, you seemed to have grown in confidence in the blood and action sequences. You might want to take another look at your earlier chapters to add a bit more spunk?
Sorry, bloody thing will not allow me to award a six star rating.
Ron xx
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thank you Ron for your virtual six and great comments about going forward. I want to kick my computer sometimes to see if it need a jump start when I can't give a six to you and several deserving others, either. LOL I have a lot of pepping up to do since these fight scenes are so popular. I had no idea that they'd be such a hit. But I haven't for very long to judge the public. Who'd know they like love(not sex as much as eroticism and tenderness) and battle scenes( not super gory but enough to kill the bad guys, a little suffering is good for the bad guys). I could continue and probably will at some point. I'll publish some how. Not sure how yet. If the first book does even a little bit well. Then the second one may do better as people follow the characters. It's all baby steps for me right now. I don't want to make a wrong move. So its off to editing and as you noted adding 'stuff' to perk it up.
Comment from DIS-illusioned
"the hole where there had once been an ear, Blathen whispers in vermel, "All the better to hear me with"
Hmm, this Blathen is really quite intellectual for his age. :)
"Mother earth undulates with laughter"
Coincidental poetic justice? LOL!
Well, isn't Telek the lucky devil! LOL!
So, this is 'it' eh? Well, it was a blast while it lasted. But ... is Under Earth 'really' completely sealed off? Ah, but let me not stir that 'dark' muse of yours. LOL! We're still looking for room to better digest this original masterpiece. :))
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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"the hole where there had once been an ear, Blathen whispers in vermel, "All the better to hear me with"
Hmm, this Blathen is really quite intellectual for his age. :)
"Mother earth undulates with laughter"
Coincidental poetic justice? LOL!
Well, isn't Telek the lucky devil! LOL!
So, this is 'it' eh? Well, it was a blast while it lasted. But ... is Under Earth 'really' completely sealed off? Ah, but let me not stir that 'dark' muse of yours. LOL! We're still looking for room to better digest this original masterpiece. :))
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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And the mountains closes the door(at least that door) LOL
Digest this. Later, let me know if you're still hungry. I had a second ending which left little alternative for reader to think things forward. This has a conclusion for this journey, but there's always another trip. Right? I had to write forward in order to have an ending. So, have two sequels in my mind if it is worth doing. I'm faster now. It would be easier than when I first started this with only one tedious chapter a week.
Blathen is nearly grown, just like Beh and Shalu. He is vermel(more animal than man). Thank you for following this to the end.
MOVIE: Stuntman Mike is such a baby, he's been killing and poor guy was just grazed with a bullet, now the girls have caught up with him and ...
Comment from Spitfire
This read is not for the weak of stomach! "acknel's bulbous tongue slurps back his increasing drool, and his collectors circle, savoring Zee, the human morsel. One wraps around his neck. The other across his eyes." And that's mild! I can imagine your fingers flying over the keys as your mind attempts to capture the action. Am I wrong or does the end suggest a sequel??
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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This read is not for the weak of stomach! "acknel's bulbous tongue slurps back his increasing drool, and his collectors circle, savoring Zee, the human morsel. One wraps around his neck. The other across his eyes." And that's mild! I can imagine your fingers flying over the keys as your mind attempts to capture the action. Am I wrong or does the end suggest a sequel??
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Again always astute and curious, Shari. If some want more there is. In order to get this ending I had to go forward. I ended the book here, like I would a chapter. The reader can think it forward as well. Gima as the thread is ended. I know you know what the new thread is. Fairly, obvious. And there are several major players and new one introduced. This is the beginning. We haven't established the importance of the relic which wouldn't show up until near the end of a second book which would lead to a third. Yes, I'm that far ahead in my head and the cameras are rolling.
Speaking of cameras, I need to write some scripts. I'd like to script this (the portions that tell the story) it would be pretty fast adventure, mostly. None of the vermel sex stuff.
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Think you'd have to do it as a screenplay. Sounds as if you're doing something similar to the Narnia Chronicles or Harry Potter series.
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Something to think about. Now, it's time for bed. :)Tomorrow. e
Comment from Writingfundimension
A triumph in more ways than one, Ellen. I know you understand my meaning. This final piece is an amazing finale; and I loved the way you used the wind to vanquish the demons. Power has its own code, as you've described so brilliantly, irregardless of the names we call on. Bravo, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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A triumph in more ways than one, Ellen. I know you understand my meaning. This final piece is an amazing finale; and I loved the way you used the wind to vanquish the demons. Power has its own code, as you've described so brilliantly, irregardless of the names we call on. Bravo, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you, Bev for you lovely review and glowing gold. I do understand.:) Hugs, ellen x
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You're most welcome, Ellen. I hope this chapter gets noticed for Book of the Month. What a fine ending that would be! Hugs, Bev
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How kind. Maybe, it'd get another third. I'm comfortable at third. LOL
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Yes, third is wonderful, too.
Comment from Janie King
Sunday seems to be a good day to cop out..so I might as well stay with the plan..we had a marvelous gospel sing at the park...mom got to go so I didn't even try to set up the kids tables as they were all busy in other areas...so we'll just go for the June 2nd event. God bless.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Sunday seems to be a good day to cop out..so I might as well stay with the plan..we had a marvelous gospel sing at the park...mom got to go so I didn't even try to set up the kids tables as they were all busy in other areas...so we'll just go for the June 2nd event. God bless.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you, Janie. I know you can't read because of the war/violence but should be glad to know that: Nature has vanquished the evil ones back to Under Earth and all will live happily and have lots of little ones.:) I also thanked those that have been faithful readers for their encouragement and help.:) Blessings to you and your dear mother, Janie. love, ellen
Comment from TammyGail
Wow... barking dog I don't believe I have read any of these other chapters but I do believe I will be stopping by to do so. This was such an exciting read indeed on the edge, you had my full att throughout the read, thanks for the index and the great notes as well. It was a pleasure thanks for sharing..
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Wow... barking dog I don't believe I have read any of these other chapters but I do believe I will be stopping by to do so. This was such an exciting read indeed on the edge, you had my full att throughout the read, thanks for the index and the great notes as well. It was a pleasure thanks for sharing..
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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This was the final chapter, Tammy. I did have a few of my poet friends follow this all the way through. Sorry you missed it. Thank you for saying that you liked the index and might stop by for other chapters. Your review is really very encouraging since you hadn't read any of this story before. :) Smiles, ellen
Comment from Isabeldorastorey
This is not a genre I usually read and do not write - however I do appreciate the vividness of your writing but most of all have great admiration for anyone who can concoct a clear alternate reality in such minute detail as you have done here.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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This is not a genre I usually read and do not write - however I do appreciate the vividness of your writing but most of all have great admiration for anyone who can concoct a clear alternate reality in such minute detail as you have done here.
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Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and being so generous in comment and stars on this the final chapter. Your review gives me a very clear idea of what a fresh set of eyes and open mind see in this story. Very encouraging. Thank you. :) barking dog
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh, what an ending!! Trell and Gima and sons are safe. The Hunters safe also. Jacknel is history and the whole damn thing is over. Sigh. BD, you ended it well and gave 'em hell. What more could we ask of you. Fantastic!!
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Sigh, what an ending!! Trell and Gima and sons are safe. The Hunters safe also. Jacknel is history and the whole damn thing is over. Sigh. BD, you ended it well and gave 'em hell. What more could we ask of you. Fantastic!!
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you, G for your 'glowing' final review on 'Gima.' Sigh. It's over.:) BD
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Sigh it's over but boy what a story it was girl.
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Not sobbing, here. They are all well settled for now right were they belong. Lots of loving going on in the Valley. hee-hee
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So sigh, BD. So sigh!!
Comment from jaeladarling
Another five, of course! :) There aren't many stories (fantasy or otherwise) written in present tense that I enjoy. I think this will have to be an exception. I'm glad I caught this last chapter. Thanks for satisfying this avid fantasy reader's imagination. :) Cheers!
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reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Another five, of course! :) There aren't many stories (fantasy or otherwise) written in present tense that I enjoy. I think this will have to be an exception. I'm glad I caught this last chapter. Thanks for satisfying this avid fantasy reader's imagination. :) Cheers!
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Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for enjoying this and awarding five stars. Hope to see you again.:) barking dog
Comment from c_lucas
Quite an epic of writing. Very exciting ending. This is very well written witn an interesting flow of words. The sixer is for your success in completing this story.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Quite an epic of writing. Very exciting ending. This is very well written witn an interesting flow of words. The sixer is for your success in completing this story.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for your gold confetti for completion of the story. You're the first review. It's a long read, but I'm not cutting it in half ... not this time. :) ellen
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(LOL) You're welcome. I am amaze you kept your characters straight.
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Charlie, now. You keep you humans well in mind and to me most humans all look alike. LOL I had the advantage. :) e
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You're right, Ellen. One asked me if I believed in Intelligent life on earth. I told him "Yes," but I'm just visiting.
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I thought you looked familiar. We have to do so much research just to fit in. LOL
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Touche. (LOL)