I Cried
The emotional expression of my storm53 total reviews
Comment from jennifdrake
I have to give you a "6" -- what you wrote pulled me in and I was right there with you. I love the varied ways you described crying and my favorite lines were, "bumping and bouncing creating havoc inside." I think many readers will relate to that feeling although most of us couldn't quite put it in words. Bravo! I am a fan.
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I have to give you a "6" -- what you wrote pulled me in and I was right there with you. I love the varied ways you described crying and my favorite lines were, "bumping and bouncing creating havoc inside." I think many readers will relate to that feeling although most of us couldn't quite put it in words. Bravo! I am a fan.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem has great rhyme and flow. That it is not a 5/7/5 is not the point. I see this was posted in 2012, so nothing more needs to be said about the format for that contest long time over.
I like the message of your poem. It makes me believe that there was a definite moment that caused the tears and the person in the poem explored that after the initial tears that flowed had stopped.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
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Your poem has great rhyme and flow. That it is not a 5/7/5 is not the point. I see this was posted in 2012, so nothing more needs to be said about the format for that contest long time over.
I like the message of your poem. It makes me believe that there was a definite moment that caused the tears and the person in the poem explored that after the initial tears that flowed had stopped.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
Comment from petalangela
Tears are the release of emotional pain. No meds can cure emotional pain it has to be washed away.
It is braver to cry than to stem the flow
Your words are set with feeling and touched me deeply
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Tears are the release of emotional pain. No meds can cure emotional pain it has to be washed away.
It is braver to cry than to stem the flow
Your words are set with feeling and touched me deeply
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
Comment from burton.0115
This is a lovely poem.
So descriptive and emotional. I like your use of the words to describe the tears and the well chosen rhyming.
Well done.
Mary
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This is a lovely poem.
So descriptive and emotional. I like your use of the words to describe the tears and the well chosen rhyming.
Well done.
Mary
Comment Written 10-Jun-2012
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. This
poem gave me much to ponder on.... Understanding is such
an important word in this poem. Thank you for a poem
well written...........harmony13
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. This
poem gave me much to ponder on.... Understanding is such
an important word in this poem. Thank you for a poem
well written...........harmony13
Comment Written 10-Jun-2012
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you originalgentleman
May I make a comment your poem to me is not a 5-7-5 poem
But I must say it's a poem that indeed was well worth reading.
How it's good to have a man cry and show his emontions.
Gert
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Hello to you originalgentleman
May I make a comment your poem to me is not a 5-7-5 poem
But I must say it's a poem that indeed was well worth reading.
How it's good to have a man cry and show his emontions.
Gert
Comment Written 09-Jun-2012
Comment from LJ-HBIC
Really nice! And I agree, as a man you can be both strong AND emotional. I think when we feel emotion this strongly it is easy for the tears to begin to flow for one reason, and then have that reason change all together. I liked the realization and the end of what caused the river of tears.
Great job!
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Really nice! And I agree, as a man you can be both strong AND emotional. I think when we feel emotion this strongly it is easy for the tears to begin to flow for one reason, and then have that reason change all together. I liked the realization and the end of what caused the river of tears.
Great job!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
Comment from Anisa-
I like the poem very much. However, this is by no means a 5-7-5 as you have it listed. A 5-7-5 has five syllables in the first and last and seven in the middle.
Anisa
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I like the poem very much. However, this is by no means a 5-7-5 as you have it listed. A 5-7-5 has five syllables in the first and last and seven in the middle.
Anisa
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
Comment from Fluffyhead
Don't get why guys think it is wrong to cry. It is good thing. This reminds me of that Adele song I set fire to the rain. pouring downward to my heart like an out of control train is my favorite line
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Don't get why guys think it is wrong to cry. It is good thing. This reminds me of that Adele song I set fire to the rain. pouring downward to my heart like an out of control train is my favorite line
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
Comment from Joan E.
Welcome to FanStory--I hope the site fulfills your goals for membership. I am glad that you can express your emotions and share them with us in your poetry. (My only confusion is that I see your stanzas as rhyming quatrains, but the top note labels the post a 5-7-5 entry.) I admired your "river/dam/waterfall/storm" metaphors as well. -Joan
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Welcome to FanStory--I hope the site fulfills your goals for membership. I am glad that you can express your emotions and share them with us in your poetry. (My only confusion is that I see your stanzas as rhyming quatrains, but the top note labels the post a 5-7-5 entry.) I admired your "river/dam/waterfall/storm" metaphors as well. -Joan
Comment Written 30-May-2012
