Eternity
Time stands still19 total reviews
Comment from ennahanid
Your Eternity 5-7-5 Poetry contest entry I enjoyed today. I think you rose to the challenge very well. Love the words and the picture is an excellent choice.
Thank you - Dinah
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Your Eternity 5-7-5 Poetry contest entry I enjoyed today. I think you rose to the challenge very well. Love the words and the picture is an excellent choice.
Thank you - Dinah
Comment Written 08-May-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Titanx9
This is beautiful. You have chosen to deal with a very complicated part of living in a different way. I like the notion that when the heart stops, times stop and there's heaven. The artwork is perfect for this piece. Great 5-7-5 poem.
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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This is beautiful. You have chosen to deal with a very complicated part of living in a different way. I like the notion that when the heart stops, times stop and there's heaven. The artwork is perfect for this piece. Great 5-7-5 poem.
Comment Written 08-May-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Val Crisson
This is a lovely five seven five, that probably would have made a great senyru. The reader must read it carefully in order to get the true message of death followed by a hearafter. Very well done.
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This is a lovely five seven five, that probably would have made a great senyru. The reader must read it carefully in order to get the true message of death followed by a hearafter. Very well done.
Comment Written 08-May-2012
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Thought it was a senyru thanks
Comment from TXOxxxooo
The moment "in-between" Where consciousness no longer has the burden of animation but is free to abandon itself into the great mind of God....a beautiful poem well written-Food for thought- Blessings- T.K McGowan
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The moment "in-between" Where consciousness no longer has the burden of animation but is free to abandon itself into the great mind of God....a beautiful poem well written-Food for thought- Blessings- T.K McGowan
Comment Written 08-May-2012
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Thank you
Comment from zlp22
Great picture for this poem, the background color really brings out the flow of the words. Almost reads like you are leaving earth and going to the upper world. Good luck in the contest.
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Great picture for this poem, the background color really brings out the flow of the words. Almost reads like you are leaving earth and going to the upper world. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Doc Holiday
Very goo 5-7-5 poem.
I like how you compare death to a frozen hourglass
where time has stopped for this individual.
It would be nice to believe that heaven is captured at that moment, but for some...I don't think so!
reply by the author on 08-May-2012
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Very goo 5-7-5 poem.
I like how you compare death to a frozen hourglass
where time has stopped for this individual.
It would be nice to believe that heaven is captured at that moment, but for some...I don't think so!
Comment Written 07-May-2012
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theres alays hope
Comment from squid152
You nailed the 5-7-5 poetry! In just three lines you have managed to capture death and Heaven. I liked the imagery in freezing the hour glasses.
reply by the author on 07-May-2012
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You nailed the 5-7-5 poetry! In just three lines you have managed to capture death and Heaven. I liked the imagery in freezing the hour glasses.
Comment Written 07-May-2012
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thank you.
Comment from Isaac Kavik
A very nice 5-7-5 poem. I don't think I have read a poem of death that treats the subject as you have. The ransomed soul going to his or her reward. So succinct. It makes me wonder. Good poetry often does. On a second read I wondered if this is not a poem of love at first sight, the face of the loved one "Heaven" captured. Am I correct on any of these musings? Please let me know! Great Write! :)
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A very nice 5-7-5 poem. I don't think I have read a poem of death that treats the subject as you have. The ransomed soul going to his or her reward. So succinct. It makes me wonder. Good poetry often does. On a second read I wondered if this is not a poem of love at first sight, the face of the loved one "Heaven" captured. Am I correct on any of these musings? Please let me know! Great Write! :)
Comment Written 07-May-2012
reply by the author on 07-May-2012
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the first one was correct. after a day of church, yesterday.
Comment from uniqueauthor
This is a good description of what eternity will be like. It is also a good example of 5-7-5 Haiku poetry. However, Catital's are not common in this form of poetry unless the word is a proper noun.
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This is a good description of what eternity will be like. It is also a good example of 5-7-5 Haiku poetry. However, Catital's are not common in this form of poetry unless the word is a proper noun.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-May-2012
reply by the author on 07-May-2012
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capitals you mean okay ill take them out.
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Yes, I was told that myself. You're welcome. Peace for today.
