Gima The Beginning
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Gima: Jacknel Goes Berserk"fantasy adventure
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Comment from c_lucas
I don't think Trell will be very happy when he finds his mate in a cage. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I don't think Trell will be very happy when he finds his mate in a cage. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I think you're right about that, charlie. :) Thank you for your comments and generous review:) ellen
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You're welcome. Ellen. Charlie
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi ellen
A great action packed chapter with lots of delicious gore.
Your title warns us about Jacknel and poor Pike found out you weren't kidding!
It's a good idea to install violent highlights here and there in a novel. Keeps the readers glued to the book.
Ron xox
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi ellen
A great action packed chapter with lots of delicious gore.
Your title warns us about Jacknel and poor Pike found out you weren't kidding!
It's a good idea to install violent highlights here and there in a novel. Keeps the readers glued to the book.
Ron xox
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Well this just a warm-up. He has yet to get to Gima. We have to hate him. It was kind of okay to kill Pike ... Jacknel did us a favor ... we had our revenge for Pike's capture of Gima. But now she is Jacknel's and he thrives on, shit, makes a living on, others' suffering. We will hate him.(I hope.)
Comment from Janie King
Highest level of violence warning assures I will stick to my cowardly plan for this piece...I do hope you had a good weekend. God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Highest level of violence warning assures I will stick to my cowardly plan for this piece...I do hope you had a good weekend. God bless.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Janie. Yes, we are in Bellow City again. :) ellen
Comment from DIS-illusioned
Jesus freaking Christ, BD! Tell your muse to stay the hell away from me; she/he spits fire! LOL!
I'd really love to do lunch with Jacknel. They don't come any nicer. :)
If I were Pike, I'd have committed suicide--somehow--than lose my tongue that way. Ouch!
Why do I see an imminent showdown between Bremick and the ultra gentle Jacknel? Hmm!
Another awesome chapter, BD. Keep churning 'em out like this. :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Jesus freaking Christ, BD! Tell your muse to stay the hell away from me; she/he spits fire! LOL!
I'd really love to do lunch with Jacknel. They don't come any nicer. :)
If I were Pike, I'd have committed suicide--somehow--than lose my tongue that way. Ouch!
Why do I see an imminent showdown between Bremick and the ultra gentle Jacknel? Hmm!
Another awesome chapter, BD. Keep churning 'em out like this. :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you, DIS. And we keep rollin' :) BD
Comment from Spitfire
I guess the moniker "Barking Dog" fits you. What a violent write. "pig sickle and fitzel peddler" --at least some humor in here. But biting off the tongue and other acts of brutality. Very vivid. Frightening. Which proves you have the ability to write horror and fantasy fiction. more that than science fiction. One spag: loosing (losing) at box office.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I guess the moniker "Barking Dog" fits you. What a violent write. "pig sickle and fitzel peddler" --at least some humor in here. But biting off the tongue and other acts of brutality. Very vivid. Frightening. Which proves you have the ability to write horror and fantasy fiction. more that than science fiction. One spag: loosing (losing) at box office.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Spitfire. I'm glad this was vivid and frightening. I wish there was a category for this on FS. It's not sci-fi ... what do I call it? LOL :) ellen
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It's fantasy fiction.
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I had it as fantasy fiction when I was in the Valley, but now it is turning more to Fantasy Horror Fiction. LOL No category for that. Folks need to know it is Horror(torture, mutilation, rape etc. That is horror, right?)
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Um, if you don't know that, you're a sociopath. LOL.
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Are you talking 'shrinkage' now? LOL
Comment from kehpoet
barking dog, I just read your chapter, Gima: Jacknel Goes Berserk, & I really liked it alot. I thought it was very well written with alot of detail. I also appreciate the post-chapter info detailing the characters. You're very creative. Keep writing & God Bless-kehpoet
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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barking dog, I just read your chapter, Gima: Jacknel Goes Berserk, & I really liked it alot. I thought it was very well written with alot of detail. I also appreciate the post-chapter info detailing the characters. You're very creative. Keep writing & God Bless-kehpoet
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you, kehpoet for your generous and kind review. I'm glad you liked it alot. :) barking dog
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Very exciting and action packed, i actually enjoy sci fi so this was a joy to read. Very strong language , but hey who doesnt like a cuss word or two. Great job
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Very exciting and action packed, i actually enjoy sci fi so this was a joy to read. Very strong language , but hey who doesnt like a cuss word or two. Great job
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you kirby274. I never know if I'm going too far. Thank you for not thinking that I have. :) barking dog
Comment from keimosobie
pretty harsh stuff. I cant imagine wanting to live like that. This is the first chapter i read and your sory is filled with many facts and details I don't know about.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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pretty harsh stuff. I cant imagine wanting to live like that. This is the first chapter i read and your sory is filled with many facts and details I don't know about.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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I'm almost at the end of the book. I'm glad you were able to get something from this chapter. It just turned harsh when we went back to Bellow City. The Valley chapters are much lighter and not violent. This is a contrast necessary to pit good against evil in the end. :) thank you for reading, keimosobie.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh Gima is alive and in the custody of bad ones. She in the pen behind the arena. I wonder if they know what they have in her. Sigh, I'll bet the miss each other, BD.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Oh Gima is alive and in the custody of bad ones. She in the pen behind the arena. I wonder if they know what they have in her. Sigh, I'll bet the miss each other, BD.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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thank you, G. You're the first review. I wanted to post the rest but too long. Later after I get some money reviewing. LOL:) BD