The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "The Meaning of Forgiveness"A family learns their father is a serial killer
23 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Ohh, Sasha.
I'm glad Rachael agreed to have coffee with James.Chapter forty-nine is wonderfully written with excellent descriptive writing, great dialogue and superb characterization. Your story is riveting and splendidly penned. I like how you show, not tell and as I read your chapter I could see the action take place in my head with fine .imagery. I would recommend your chapter to other reviewers. You're a fantastic writer, my friend. Fabulous Friday to you & that's my 2 cents.
Melissa
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Ohh, Sasha.
I'm glad Rachael agreed to have coffee with James.Chapter forty-nine is wonderfully written with excellent descriptive writing, great dialogue and superb characterization. Your story is riveting and splendidly penned. I like how you show, not tell and as I read your chapter I could see the action take place in my head with fine .imagery. I would recommend your chapter to other reviewers. You're a fantastic writer, my friend. Fabulous Friday to you & that's my 2 cents.
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Thanks, I always look forward to your enthusiastic reviews.
Comment from Belinda
Your characters never fail to surprise me, Sasha, especially Alfina. And now that James is interested in Rachael ... wouldn't be it fun to follow?
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Your characters never fail to surprise me, Sasha, especially Alfina. And now that James is interested in Rachael ... wouldn't be it fun to follow?
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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I decided it was time for the poor kid to have a little distraction...and Rachael is stunning! Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Deejharrington
Alfina is a wise woman and a fighter. I think she will do just fine. Its the cross-examination that worries me. She could easily be confused by a determined attorney. At least James got a date out of the whole thing.
deb
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Alfina is a wise woman and a fighter. I think she will do just fine. Its the cross-examination that worries me. She could easily be confused by a determined attorney. At least James got a date out of the whole thing.
deb
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Mr. Hurley will prepare her for all the nasty questions the defense will try to use to unset her.
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Good. I guess the major part of the story is coming soon, the trial.
deb
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Yup.
Comment from rtobaygo
GREAT CHARACTERIZATION HELPED MOVE THE CHAPTERS PLOT ALONG AS DID ADEPT DIALOGUE, SHOWING THE VARIOUS PROTAGONISTS' ACTIONS AND COUNTER ACTIONS WAS DONE QUITE WELL. THE PROBLEMS YOU HAVE CREATED FOR THE GRANDMOTHER AND THE PROBLEMS SHE INNOCENTLY CREATES ARE EXCELLENT.
he is always gentel.GENTLE
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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GREAT CHARACTERIZATION HELPED MOVE THE CHAPTERS PLOT ALONG AS DID ADEPT DIALOGUE, SHOWING THE VARIOUS PROTAGONISTS' ACTIONS AND COUNTER ACTIONS WAS DONE QUITE WELL. THE PROBLEMS YOU HAVE CREATED FOR THE GRANDMOTHER AND THE PROBLEMS SHE INNOCENTLY CREATES ARE EXCELLENT.
he is always gentel.GENTLE
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Another good chapter.
Good descriptions.
Good thought provoking dialogue.
Interesting.
Cute ending to the chapter.
2 spags: you foot should be your foot (18 lines from the bottom)
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10th line from bottom: gentel should be gentle.
Katie
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Hello,
Another good chapter.
Good descriptions.
Good thought provoking dialogue.
Interesting.
Cute ending to the chapter.
2 spags: you foot should be your foot (18 lines from the bottom)
and
10th line from bottom: gentel should be gentle.
Katie
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. I am pleased you liked this one.
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You're welcome.
Katie
Comment from Janie King
okay this next chapter should give one the chills for sure..it can't be long until the father finds out about the testimony...onward we march. God bless.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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okay this next chapter should give one the chills for sure..it can't be long until the father finds out about the testimony...onward we march. God bless.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Yup. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery. Wish James good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery. Wish James good luck.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from James Sarzotti
Good to be reading The Heir Apparent again. I appreciate the dialect in your dialogue. Not too heavy handed.
If God forgive all sins, then why does man need to punish the sinner?" << Excellent question to raise. Remember Caryl Chessman and the movement to abolish the death penalty?
Alfina grinned. "I always be good at doing what people tell me to do." << Very telling. And ironic. A deft social comment.
"I'm sorry. My timing sucks. Just ignore what I just said." << Cute!
Your list of characters is beguiling. The serial abduction of the Alfinas a great sinister touch!
Enjoyed as always. Keep up the great work. (Love your looking out the window painting, BTW.) Cheers, James
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Good to be reading The Heir Apparent again. I appreciate the dialect in your dialogue. Not too heavy handed.
If God forgive all sins, then why does man need to punish the sinner?" << Excellent question to raise. Remember Caryl Chessman and the movement to abolish the death penalty?
Alfina grinned. "I always be good at doing what people tell me to do." << Very telling. And ironic. A deft social comment.
"I'm sorry. My timing sucks. Just ignore what I just said." << Cute!
Your list of characters is beguiling. The serial abduction of the Alfinas a great sinister touch!
Enjoyed as always. Keep up the great work. (Love your looking out the window painting, BTW.) Cheers, James
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks. I sincerely appreciate your enthusiastic review.
Comment from adewpearl
With you testimony about him - your
Dr. Williams said, I won't - said, "I won't
take up much of your time, but - add comma
I knew Grandmother needed me there for support, but - add comma
Tom has taken hundreds of depositions, and - add comma he is always gentel - gentle
What a lovely ending - even in the middle of tragedy, life goes on and so does happiness : -) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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With you testimony about him - your
Dr. Williams said, I won't - said, "I won't
take up much of your time, but - add comma
I knew Grandmother needed me there for support, but - add comma
Tom has taken hundreds of depositions, and - add comma he is always gentel - gentle
What a lovely ending - even in the middle of tragedy, life goes on and so does happiness : -) Brooke
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks. I thought it was time for something positive to occur.
Comment from Overthehill
This is a very powerful story and not one to be read lightly. I'm new to the site and new to this novel so I was grateful to have the notes. It is obviously a very harrowing tale and I'm glad there is a love interest to lighten it together with some very human instincts. I think you need to spell check a little, but then again I'm Irish and I know your spellings are different. I just have to get used to it. Very, very well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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This is a very powerful story and not one to be read lightly. I'm new to the site and new to this novel so I was grateful to have the notes. It is obviously a very harrowing tale and I'm glad there is a love interest to lighten it together with some very human instincts. I think you need to spell check a little, but then again I'm Irish and I know your spellings are different. I just have to get used to it. Very, very well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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The Grandmother was raised to speak in Romani, a gypsy form of Romanian. English is difficult for her...hence the poor English.