Comment from jas2610

Excellent

This is an excellent and most heartfelt poem. I guess when I read this poem I feel that most of us can see ourselves in this poem. The promises that were broken and the dreams that we smashed. The poem flows beautifully and expressed most eloquently. I really enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from Elizabeth Clark

Excellent

I LOVED this, if so many people would do this and release their hurt pain and fears, healings could happen much quicker. The picture depicted the thoughts perfectly, I think. Excellant

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from luvinlivin

Good

I like the story of the poem the best; the meaning is quite simple, but the way in which you get there in the poem stand out to me the most. One correction I would make would be after, "broken promises." You start a new sentence with "which," which (ha) is a fragment. Otherwise good job.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from Lainee

Excellent

Hi Jewell,

I love every single message your thoughts send out through this poem. It is a beautiful way to cleanse your soul and welcome the new life which is waiting for you I am sure. I hope he reads every single balloon message and as he reads each one your heart becomes free.

Goodluck and takecare,
Lainee :)

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

very cool pic
and awesome colors!

beautifully written
with excellent flow and rhythm
and great imagery

nice work
and thanx for sharing :)

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from SamAyeM

Excellent

Your poems read to me like sweet lullabyes. They flow so smoothly that the reading is over just as I'm getting mellow. I keep waiting for you to post a really bad one so I don't feel so feeble in my own attempts, but I won't hold my breath for that to happen. Excellent as always.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from Black Wren

Good

and placed them into
an individual balloon
and filled it with helium.
(and placed them into
individual balloons
and filled them with helium.)

I wish I could release by hurt so easily.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

this is true artistry
almost like a short story in poetic form
i enjoyed this quite a bit
as the balloons float off into spaces
John Allen Kingsland

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 Comment Written 08-Feb-2005

Comment from manokid

Good

I liked this one, but felt it could have been a bit more concise. But, that comment comes from one who writes primarily short senryu and haiku - very short. Nice imagery, though,


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