Comment from elgone

Excellent

This is an intriguing plot . I'm coming it late to the story, but I found this a compelling read. It appears a mystery is being resolved. The characters interactions seem realistic.

There is one error, I think:

the gupsies, - gypsies?

E

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks for catching the spag.

Comment from emmaysavage

Excellent

I appreciate the character list and remain as interested as ever in how this story will work out. Seems as though recapturing family history is the theme just now.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Most definitely. I am pleased you liked this one.

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

WELL WRITTEN, YOUR CHARACTERS' DIALOGUE WAS EXCELLENT, WHICH ALSO MOVED THE PLOT ALONG. USE OF CHARACTERS ENABLED THE READER TO IDENTIFY WITH THEM AS MORE OF THEIR INDIVIDUAL PERSONALITIES IS REVEALED,

YOU KNOW YOU HAVE USED YOUR SIX-STAR MONTHLY RATING QUOTA, SO EVEN THOUGH I THOUGHT SIX STARS WAS APPROPRIATE . . . FIVE WILL HAVE TO DO.

TAKE CARE,

RAY

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

I am so pleased you enjoyed this complicated chapter. And never worry, 5 stars are always welcome.

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Exceptional

I haven't been on here in ages. I think you've changed the name of this book, have you? I certainly recall the story and most of the characters. I've really enjoyed this chapter, equally as good as anything you write. I just have to go back now and re-read a few of the earlier chapters. Have to give you a six because there are absolutely NO typos or anything I can pick up on as well as being thoroughly enjoyable reading.

Hope you're well and doing OK and everything is good in Mazatlan?

Big hugs
Kat

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Hello stranger. How nice to have you back. Yes, the title of this used to be A Crack in the Mirror. I pulled it and did a complete rewrite. I just wasn't happy with how it was going. I am thrilled you liked this one, especially since it was a complicated transitional chapter filled with lots of tedious details. I am fine and still here in Mazatlan. PM me and let me know how you are doing.

Comment from peggles

Excellent

The story is really rolling out well
this chapter is very well written and smooth and easy to read
You really got a good flow with this piece
A perfect conclusion to a well shaped read
I shall be looking out for more

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

another intriguing chapter, Sasha.
I'm impressed how well you're knitting
it all together....

Apparently(,) it just - add comma
is written in Romany(,) an ancient - and here
language of the gupsies?? gypsies

could read the journal[,] and(,) to be honest(,) we really didn't want - suggest, move first comma, and add one after "honest"


Margaret

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks for catching the spags. I'll go back over this and fix them now.

Comment from InterestingRon

Excellent

Hi Smurphy
An intriguing chapter.
Your taken your foot slightly off the tension pedal and given your readers time to reflect on family issues.
I'm sure there's more surprises waiting to jump out at us.
Ron

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks, I am pleased you liked this. Yes, I felt the reader need a little time to relax a bit.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

It looks like James is pulling things together. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Error

gupsies, (gypsies) related to Sanskrit

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks for catching that. I am pleased you like this one.

reply by c_lucas on 31-Mar-2012

You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Has anyone else mentioned that your portrait looks a bit like a young Richard Nixon?? (I would shift the second sentence to "...who asked for my identification and the name of the person I was there to see.") Yes, it's a complex chapter, but just like Charlie, I think the reader can "digest" it, and appreciate the "compassion" demonstrated by Angela and Mom. -Joan

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll make the change. I am pleased you liked this one.

reply by Joan E. on 31-Mar-2012

I've been enjoying all the new material. Keep up the terrific work. Hugs- Joan

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Sasha,
Chapter thirty-nine is smartly written and very entertaning. You used excellent descriptive writing and great dialogue. I like how you show, not tell and as I read your chapter thirty-nine I could see the action take place in my head with fine imagery. I'd recommend chapter thirty-nine to other reviewers. I'd encourage you to keep moving forward with your facinating story, my talented friend.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.