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The Morning After

A little too much wine

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Comment from LateBloomer
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hello author,

this is a poem many can relate to. it made me smile and laugh just a bit. as this is a contest entry, i wish you good luck. regards, LateBloomer

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    I'm glad I made you smile this morning. Thanks for the stars.
Comment from starkat
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Yep - this is kind a before and after all that drinking you did last night. You drank some wine and felt fine - thing is...you drank too much wine and now you wake up red-eyed with a bad headache, and your head feels like lead. Face it, you might be a wino. Well, hell-if-I-know... just guessin' ... ;)

Enjoyed your essence poem as all the silly bells are in order and I detect an end rhyme and internal rhyme. Picture of lucious, juicy grapes makes me thirsty.

Excellent contest entry. Wishing you lots of luck ...;)

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    Haha, I wouldn't be writing poetry this morning if I'd really done that! But who hasn't experienced it at least once? Thanks for the stars.
Comment from missy98writer
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Poet,
Your Essence poem is excellently written with vivid imagery painting a picture in the readers head. The art work is lovely you used. Your essence is in fine form with spot on syllable count of 6-6 and very good internal rhyme & end rhyme. You also used great alliteration with the F words. I liked your lines:
"Drank some wine and felt fine,
Eyes red, head lead, pain mine."
Your well written poem is a contender for a possible win the in the Essence writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with your well penned essence style poem in the writing prompt. I'd recommend your essence poem to other readers. Keep on writing with a creative pen. I wish you a marvelous day...Missy.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    It's an experience I think most people can identify with. I wouldn't want it too often, though. Thanks for the five stars.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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Your poem definitely captures the situation: that good, bubbly feeling does a 180 and leaves you saying, "Why did I do that?!" Those consequences . . . .

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    I think most people can identify. Who hasn't experienced this at least once? Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Frankeddy
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Great essence poem, says a lot in two lines.
Well thought out and well written you got three poems in two lines.
All rhyming wonderfully well.
Presented in bright clear setting.

Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    I think most people can identify. Who hasn't experienced this at least once? Thanks for the stars.
Comment from jaded831
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Well done. I feel your pain, I've been there. You truly captured the essence of the morning after. It sounds like a winner to me. Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    I think most people have been there. Hope you're right about it being a winner. I've come close so many times. Thanks for the stars.
Comment from ennahanid
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This put a grin on my face this morning...I have only been drunk once in my life and that was over 50 years ago,,,but you made me remember the morning after with this super piece.

Thank you - I think LOL

Dinah

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    Not such a great memory, huh? I think most people have experienced it at least once. Glad I made you smile.
Comment from Crackerberries
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Been there done that, too much wine in too little time next day the pain was mine. Like an elephant standing on my head...ouch. Nice picture too.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    I think most people can identify. Who hasn't experienced this at least once? Thanks for the stars.
Comment from rjuselius
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this is a fabulous piece of poetic art! you've hit the structure spot on.
who doesn't relate to this:

"Drank some wine and felt fine,
Eyes red, head lead, pain mine."

that is why i stopped drinking 3 years ago.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    Most people can relate to this. I stop after the second glass, or else... Thanks for the stars.
Comment from tinams
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A very well written essence competition entry, sticking strictly to the guidelines. It conveys a feeling many of us can empathise with at one time or another. Good luck :)

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2012

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2012
    Yes, I think most people can relate. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the stars.