The Heir Apparent
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Comment from words
The amount of humanity that the grandmother has retained is awe inspiring.
After a life of such cruelty and deprivation, it is amazing that she has any softness at all.
Another wonderful chapter.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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The amount of humanity that the grandmother has retained is awe inspiring.
After a life of such cruelty and deprivation, it is amazing that she has any softness at all.
Another wonderful chapter.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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I agree. I think she is reacting to the kindness being shown her.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
What a delicious character grandmother is!
Never washed or brushed her hair. Creepy.
But after the horrors she has witnessed it's a miracle she has any hair left.
Another great read.
Ron
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurphy
What a delicious character grandmother is!
Never washed or brushed her hair. Creepy.
But after the horrors she has witnessed it's a miracle she has any hair left.
Another great read.
Ron
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching the spags. Actually this is a book that Spiritual Echo started. She is asking anyone who wants to contribute to the book.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
This is a great chapter that deserves six stars.
Now James learns that his grandmother avoided English because she didn't speak it well. The big surprise was that James' father taught his mother what English she knew, (Of course she must have learned more before she was kidnapped.)
another big surprise was that grandmother was a witness to Marie Anne's murder. this was the missing proof that dad murdered her and was thus in violation of his plea agreement. I found two minor errors;
1. Grandmother was born on August 15, 1940 but looked [liked ==> like]she was in her middle nineties. {a typo?}
2.When Alexandru [burry ==> bury] that young girl I felt the same sadness. ]a typo?}
I think I'm ready for almost anything else that James may learn about his father. I still want to know who delivered the diary to James' mother.
Once more I find myself watching this entire story as a movie.
Love and Irish Hugs, dear friend,
Roger
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
This is a great chapter that deserves six stars.
Now James learns that his grandmother avoided English because she didn't speak it well. The big surprise was that James' father taught his mother what English she knew, (Of course she must have learned more before she was kidnapped.)
another big surprise was that grandmother was a witness to Marie Anne's murder. this was the missing proof that dad murdered her and was thus in violation of his plea agreement. I found two minor errors;
1. Grandmother was born on August 15, 1940 but looked [liked ==> like]she was in her middle nineties. {a typo?}
2.When Alexandru [burry ==> bury] that young girl I felt the same sadness. ]a typo?}
I think I'm ready for almost anything else that James may learn about his father. I still want to know who delivered the diary to James' mother.
Once more I find myself watching this entire story as a movie.
Love and Irish Hugs, dear friend,
Roger
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Yup, looks like Dad's goose is cooked. Thanks so much for catching the spags.
Comment from peggles
I liked this chapter and thought it to be a good follow on from the previous ones
Poor old lady to have seen such horror and she still wants to go back to the cabin
But fits in well with elderly thinking it is the only home she knows
I can't imagine someone never having washed their hair it must have been alive with beasties
I think the grandmother is a great character
And you have portrayed her well
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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I liked this chapter and thought it to be a good follow on from the previous ones
Poor old lady to have seen such horror and she still wants to go back to the cabin
But fits in well with elderly thinking it is the only home she knows
I can't imagine someone never having washed their hair it must have been alive with beasties
I think the grandmother is a great character
And you have portrayed her well
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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I actually met a woman (about 25) that had never washed her hair. It was quite a mess and filled with lice and heaven knows what else. She lived with her elderly mother who was developmentally disabled.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
This is a great chapter and I love how James is treating his grandmother. I know she is scared with all that is going on around her. But he has a way with her that must be so calming. It's hard to believe she want to go back to the cabin where she lived in hell. But it is the only home she knows and that is understandable. I think I have told you before that your skill as a story teller serves you well....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurph,
This is a great chapter and I love how James is treating his grandmother. I know she is scared with all that is going on around her. But he has a way with her that must be so calming. It's hard to believe she want to go back to the cabin where she lived in hell. But it is the only home she knows and that is understandable. I think I have told you before that your skill as a story teller serves you well....blessings, chey
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I am pleased you like this story.
Comment from Janie King
Wow, never washed or bcombed her hair...yes, she saw his dad kill the girl that should get him the death penalty..isn't he going to be surprised his mother is still alive. Good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Wow, never washed or bcombed her hair...yes, she saw his dad kill the girl that should get him the death penalty..isn't he going to be surprised his mother is still alive. Good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Yes, I think he will be very surprised.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha, I'm beginning to like James' grandmother's new look too. Seems that now James' life is changing again with the new responsibility. I like how you elaborate the story.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Hi, Sasha, I'm beginning to like James' grandmother's new look too. Seems that now James' life is changing again with the new responsibility. I like how you elaborate the story.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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I can't imagine anyone living the life that woman lived. Glad you liked it.
Comment from RebelRose
were tryhing to...trying
of siscors...scissors
I can't imagine someone never having washed their hair. It's a wonder it wasn't full of lice. I'm sure Grandmother has other stories to tell, too.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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were tryhing to...trying
of siscors...scissors
I can't imagine someone never having washed their hair. It's a wonder it wasn't full of lice. I'm sure Grandmother has other stories to tell, too.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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I'm sure it was filled with more than just lice. Thanks for catching the spags.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think the grandmother is a great character. I can imagine her not wanting the nurses to wash her hair. I started in the middle of this book and when I have time I'll have to do some catching up.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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I think the grandmother is a great character. I can imagine her not wanting the nurses to wash her hair. I started in the middle of this book and when I have time I'll have to do some catching up.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the great review. I do hope you catch up, I think you'll enjoy this one.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written post. James and his grandmother are bonding. I like the idea that the grandmother saw the murder and not the mother as in the original.
him in his early ninetie. (nineties)
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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This is a very well written post. James and his grandmother are bonding. I like the idea that the grandmother saw the murder and not the mother as in the original.
him in his early ninetie. (nineties)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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It wasn't ready to post. But I am glad you liked it. I caught the spag you pointed out
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Your having the grandmother being the witness is more plausible than the mother.
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I agree. Glad you lie the change/
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You are doing very well.