Hecku
A Haiku-style Poem28 total reviews
Comment from keiarbj
U'r trying to questioN the haiku thru a haiku.The iroNy is so vivid! Love that. ^^.. It's like saying-i cAnt breathe when you're actually breathing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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U'r trying to questioN the haiku thru a haiku.The iroNy is so vivid! Love that. ^^.. It's like saying-i cAnt breathe when you're actually breathing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Thank you! Glad you liked the irony of it. :)
Comment from fairy77
Haha!That's what I thought but read some of Brooklyn poet QQ
and you will know.This is amusing!Funny some find them difficult.Like hecku!Well expressed.beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Haha!That's what I thought but read some of Brooklyn poet QQ
and you will know.This is amusing!Funny some find them difficult.Like hecku!Well expressed.beth fairy77.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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Thanks! It's not a haiku at all, but a senyru. Haiku has very definite rules, must be about nature, not human stuff, and the first two lines do something then the last does its job and all that. I was just having some fun with the word itself. I did offend someone with it on another site, actually. He owned the site so he banned me! LOL! Glad he did, because that's how I found fanstory, and fairy77 and other sane and friendly folks!
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If you take alvin's class there's many types of haikus.A senryu feelings.Have a great day!Pm me anytime.I got a warning once!beth fairy77.
Comment from rama devi
The title says it all. LOL I love haiku, when done responsibly with respect to nuances and discipline of the form...and I love the challenge of writing short poems that speak volumes. but I also agree that a small majority of three-liners written in the name of haiku might fall into the hecku category...
Clever 5-7-5 poem. Not a haiku at all, actually, as it is a social commentary (senryu) and does not use imagery from nature, nor does it have two consecutive lines of concrete natural imagery followed by a distinct satori line the style you have here is called senryu.
But I see how you might need the 'h' in haiku to make your point in the title. SECKU wouldn't cut it!
:)
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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The title says it all. LOL I love haiku, when done responsibly with respect to nuances and discipline of the form...and I love the challenge of writing short poems that speak volumes. but I also agree that a small majority of three-liners written in the name of haiku might fall into the hecku category...
Clever 5-7-5 poem. Not a haiku at all, actually, as it is a social commentary (senryu) and does not use imagery from nature, nor does it have two consecutive lines of concrete natural imagery followed by a distinct satori line the style you have here is called senryu.
But I see how you might need the 'h' in haiku to make your point in the title. SECKU wouldn't cut it!
:)
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Yes, I knew that. But most folks really don't know it, and use the word haiku to mean 575. So, I figured I could get away with it. You and only ONE other person caught it! There is a very good haiku here today about the sun and clouds... can't find it now. You'll see it. THANKS!
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:-)) Warm welcome to FS. Nice to meet you! :)
Comment from Connie C
I so agree with you! I'm not a big fan of haiku myself even though I attempt them now and then. I agree with your third line, "Really, what's the point?" I find your title "hecku" to be so very clever!
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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I so agree with you! I'm not a big fan of haiku myself even though I attempt them now and then. I agree with your third line, "Really, what's the point?" I find your title "hecku" to be so very clever!
Connie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Thanks! Does that mean I'll have your vote when this contest comes up in a voting booth? :)
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You just might have gotten my vote, but unfortunately, the big FAnStory contests have a committee that votes. Sorry!
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Oh, then thx, in that case, Connie. NOw that I see your name, I remember meeting you here. I'm still new and hope to be able to remember some names soon!
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I just became one of your fans, so perhaps as I read your poetry, I'll be able to help you with questions regarding contests, etc. You can also send me a personal message (PM) any time you have a question. Connie
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How nice! Thx! :)
Comment from the blue pixel
I saw your tile and just knew it had to be a word play for haiku and I'm with you on this one. I don't write them and apparently, they have more rules than any 17 syllable should be entitled to but I will leave them to the experts. lol Touche Phyllis. I hate to tell you this, but I think we have a lot in common. lol xx Pix
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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I saw your tile and just knew it had to be a word play for haiku and I'm with you on this one. I don't write them and apparently, they have more rules than any 17 syllable should be entitled to but I will leave them to the experts. lol Touche Phyllis. I hate to tell you this, but I think we have a lot in common. lol xx Pix
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Glad to hear it!
Comment from juliaSjames
Aha! Frustration! You want to write haiku but you can't figure out the raison d'etre.
Love that you've transformed your feelings into an expert senryu-style 5-7-5 write.
One teeny point - the plural of haiku is, yes, you've guessed it, haiku.
I love the haiku format. So good for aging memories. LOL But seriously, think of writing haiku as making poetic essential oils - distilling the fragrance of a thousand words into the powerful scent of a write of up to 17 syllables to be spoken in one and a half breaths over three lines two of which must be grammatically connected and which should present two concrete images one of which may be a satori or line of insight. Oh, and which should also include a kigo - seasonal word. No personification, no end-rhymes, minimal punctuation. Syllables can vary since they are only an approximation of the Japanese on. But the shorter the more effective. Themes are usually nature, including human nature and ceremonies. The following 15 syllable write is dedicated to you.
field of roses
dew-heavy in summer light
essence of love
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Aha! Frustration! You want to write haiku but you can't figure out the raison d'etre.
Love that you've transformed your feelings into an expert senryu-style 5-7-5 write.
One teeny point - the plural of haiku is, yes, you've guessed it, haiku.
I love the haiku format. So good for aging memories. LOL But seriously, think of writing haiku as making poetic essential oils - distilling the fragrance of a thousand words into the powerful scent of a write of up to 17 syllables to be spoken in one and a half breaths over three lines two of which must be grammatically connected and which should present two concrete images one of which may be a satori or line of insight. Oh, and which should also include a kigo - seasonal word. No personification, no end-rhymes, minimal punctuation. Syllables can vary since they are only an approximation of the Japanese on. But the shorter the more effective. Themes are usually nature, including human nature and ceremonies. The following 15 syllable write is dedicated to you.
field of roses
dew-heavy in summer light
essence of love
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks for all that info! And thanks for reading/reviewing too, of course!
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:-))
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, phyllis you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the haiku form, my husband hates when i write them, he doesn't understand them. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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this is very well written, phyllis you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the haiku form, my husband hates when i write them, he doesn't understand them. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you! I have read some lovely haikus... just having a bit of fun with the word!
Comment from mauial
Fuuny starting with your title and your silly little write that has the point of poking fun at a long honored poetic form. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Fuuny starting with your title and your silly little write that has the point of poking fun at a long honored poetic form. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks... I DID put an apology in my notes, just in case! :)
Comment from Crackerberries
What a freaking riot. How funny, how well put and absolutely hysterical. I have to say, I concur totally about them being such silly little things! Nice fun to add to today.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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What a freaking riot. How funny, how well put and absolutely hysterical. I have to say, I concur totally about them being such silly little things! Nice fun to add to today.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks! Glad you understand my frustration with them!
Comment from Val Crisson
I love this, and the longer I write haikus the more I wonder why I do it. This very clever and extremely creative. They probably only be written by the Japanese lol!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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I love this, and the longer I write haikus the more I wonder why I do it. This very clever and extremely creative. They probably only be written by the Japanese lol!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thanks! Glad you understand my frustration with them!