The Heir Apparent
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I wanted to give you a six for
these last two chapters, but site
won't allow... but at least that
tells you just how impressive your
writing is.... sorry.
and free to pass[s] go card. - lose s
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I wanted to give you a six for
these last two chapters, but site
won't allow... but at least that
tells you just how impressive your
writing is.... sorry.
and free to pass[s] go card. - lose s
Margaret
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag and for the offer of 6 stars. Just knowing you liked this one is more than enough.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
Well you did again! But you did warn me this might happen so I expected it. Your descriptions of James and how he felt as he made his way to the court house is palpable and compelling. I am touched by James' hesitation to speak but he will do it no matter what it takes. He is so young to have such responsibility. Good writing here...bravo! Blessings chey
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurph,
Well you did again! But you did warn me this might happen so I expected it. Your descriptions of James and how he felt as he made his way to the court house is palpable and compelling. I am touched by James' hesitation to speak but he will do it no matter what it takes. He is so young to have such responsibility. Good writing here...bravo! Blessings chey
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much. I'm working on tomorrows chapter right now.
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Yippie!
Comment from words
It was wonderful to see the kindness of Marie Ann's grandmother towards James. She, at least, could acknowledge that James was a victim too.
As usual, I am avidly looking forward to the next installment.
So pleased to see that your computer problems seem to have abated for a time. Hugs, d
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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It was wonderful to see the kindness of Marie Ann's grandmother towards James. She, at least, could acknowledge that James was a victim too.
As usual, I am avidly looking forward to the next installment.
So pleased to see that your computer problems seem to have abated for a time. Hugs, d
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Both of my computers AND my 300 emails are working perfectly. I am so pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from c_lucas
James has found some moral support. This is very well written.With all the crowds, there should be a circus atmosphere.
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my driver's license and free to passs (pass) go card
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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James has found some moral support. This is very well written.With all the crowds, there should be a circus atmosphere.
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my driver's license and free to passs (pass) go card
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am pleased you liked this one.
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You're welcome. Sasha. Your rewrite is much stronger than your original. Charlie
Comment from Janie King
The big chapter is just waiting to pop from your head to the typewriter and we're waiting for the chapter top pop up on the computer..but have a great break..God bless.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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The big chapter is just waiting to pop from your head to the typewriter and we're waiting for the chapter top pop up on the computer..but have a great break..God bless.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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It is almost ready. I'll post it tomorrow.
Comment from psalmist
This had me on pins and needles as I wait, along with James for the courtroom drama to unfold. I will be interested to hear what James has to say. He seems to be quite articulate, which I admire. I was glad you included Mac and Mr. Hurley to give him support and he didn't have to face the ordeal alone. Well done. Linda
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This had me on pins and needles as I wait, along with James for the courtroom drama to unfold. I will be interested to hear what James has to say. He seems to be quite articulate, which I admire. I was glad you included Mac and Mr. Hurley to give him support and he didn't have to face the ordeal alone. Well done. Linda
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from adewpearl
Sightseeing - how delightful :-) Perhaps bizarre things will happen to you whilst you're sightseeing that you can turn into one of your entertaining rants :-) Forgive me for hoping something happens. LOL
I like the simile of the well-aimed bullets
turned and walked away, - use a period there
I immediately recognize - recognized
I immediately recognized her, but - add comma
Hello, James - add comma for direct address
I wondered why she was here, - use a period there
we know better, don't we? - add question mark
who better than a grieving grandmother? - add question mark
All the seats were taken, causing - add comma
a few months ago, but - add comma
Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Sightseeing - how delightful :-) Perhaps bizarre things will happen to you whilst you're sightseeing that you can turn into one of your entertaining rants :-) Forgive me for hoping something happens. LOL
I like the simile of the well-aimed bullets
turned and walked away, - use a period there
I immediately recognize - recognized
I immediately recognized her, but - add comma
Hello, James - add comma for direct address
I wondered why she was here, - use a period there
we know better, don't we? - add question mark
who better than a grieving grandmother? - add question mark
All the seats were taken, causing - add comma
a few months ago, but - add comma
Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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You caught me before I left. Thanks for catching the all too many spags. I do plan on having a nice time.
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No, I don't want you to have a "nice" time - I want you to have an "interesting" time that translates into one of your essays LOL
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I just got back and have a great story I'm working on right now.
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Hurray! I knew you would come through :-)