The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Time For The Truth"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Realist101
Hi Sasha, how are you? I am always stunned with this tale. I am sorry too, I am not able to keep up. This reads well, is clean, just one nit as they say to me? Those little (...), after "You can't imagine", I'm always told it should be such:
"You can't imagine ... knowing John" ? Nice work tho. Sad. love you! Susan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hi Sasha, how are you? I am always stunned with this tale. I am sorry too, I am not able to keep up. This reads well, is clean, just one nit as they say to me? Those little (...), after "You can't imagine", I'm always told it should be such:
"You can't imagine ... knowing John" ? Nice work tho. Sad. love you! Susan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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I was told when used as a pause... I can't imagine... (she stops because obviously he can imagine) ...then picks up with the next statement. don't know if that's correct or if it should be done another way.
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Oh, I'm not sure Sasha. I was just repeating what others have told me? We could ask Brooke or Nora? They would know...it's not a big deal at all...but if you are going to print, publish, it matters. Just want to help. hugs! Susan
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I Pm'd Brooke to find out for sure. Nore doesn't like me so I stay clear of her.
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Oh Sasha...sorry to hear that about Nora. I wish I knew for sure. But, I think your book is coming along nicely. I have read most of what you've written and girl, I'm just too far back to review everyone. I hate it too. It's not fair. I got to ride a bit today! SO nice...cleaned the yard, and garage. It felt good to do things again. :) HUGS and let me know? Susan
Comment from hyway94
Can't wait for the sentencing. I can see him telling his dad off. In a round about way. I hope you post that part soon. What can I say it's a damn good story no mistakes.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Can't wait for the sentencing. I can see him telling his dad off. In a round about way. I hope you post that part soon. What can I say it's a damn good story no mistakes.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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I've already written it and will post it tomorrow. Glad you continue to like this story.
Comment from adewpearl
something so horrific, and I - addc omma
It started as a light mist then - add a period or a semicolon or an and after mist
I understood Uncle Terry's concern, but - add comma
I want him to see me there, and - add comma
I doubted he understood, but - add comma
Susan or Charlie, but - add comma
You get inside James's thoughts so well in this chapter :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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something so horrific, and I - addc omma
It started as a light mist then - add a period or a semicolon or an and after mist
I understood Uncle Terry's concern, but - add comma
I want him to see me there, and - add comma
I doubted he understood, but - add comma
Susan or Charlie, but - add comma
You get inside James's thoughts so well in this chapter :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching the commas and spags. I am pleased you thought I did a good job with this one.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha, I like that phrase: Let's cross the bridge when we come to it. This chapter, as always, is one that I enjoy reading. I understand Charlie's concern. It is true that only repeated inbreeding causes birth defect?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hi, Sasha, I like that phrase: Let's cross the bridge when we come to it. This chapter, as always, is one that I enjoy reading. I understand Charlie's concern. It is true that only repeated inbreeding causes birth defect?
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Yes, it is true. You see/saw it in royalty marrying cousins generation after generation. A birth defect is possible if two people related or not carry a gene that can cause a defect. But the stories you hear about incestuous relationships causing two headed children is not true. It it the repetition of the the inbreeding that is the culprit.
Comment from c_lucas
A manipulator will always try to put himself in the best light, no matter who he has to discredit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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A manipulator will always try to put himself in the best light, no matter who he has to discredit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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And Dad certainly is a manipulator.
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Yep.
Comment from Janie King
Well, we're getting a little closer to hearing what he's going to say in court..I wonder why his dad wants him there..he has to know how much he destests him..I guess time will tell. God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Well, we're getting a little closer to hearing what he's going to say in court..I wonder why his dad wants him there..he has to know how much he destests him..I guess time will tell. God bless.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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His father is a game player and enjoys putting his family through the hoops. We may never know what his intent is...or maybe we will.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Time For The Truth' is a chapter that shows Uncle Terry coming to life more than before.
I wonder if maybe moonlight should replace sunset since it is near bedtime: '...Uncle Terry stayed up with me. We sat on the lanai and watched the sunset in silence.
Good chapter, Sasha!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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'Time For The Truth' is a chapter that shows Uncle Terry coming to life more than before.
I wonder if maybe moonlight should replace sunset since it is near bedtime: '...Uncle Terry stayed up with me. We sat on the lanai and watched the sunset in silence.
Good chapter, Sasha!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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I agree, moonlight sounds much better. Thanks for the suggestion.
Comment from oNray
This is an interesting story that has come and gone down some strange directions. I have bounced in and out of your chapters but have been able to catch up . Good job writing.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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This is an interesting story that has come and gone down some strange directions. I have bounced in and out of your chapters but have been able to catch up . Good job writing.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I know I have said this but I will repeat it again. You are doing a wonderful job with this story.
As I walked back to the hotel the high I was riding slowly descended into hell. (comma after hotel)
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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I know I have said this but I will repeat it again. You are doing a wonderful job with this story.
As I walked back to the hotel the high I was riding slowly descended into hell. (comma after hotel)
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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I am so pleased you think I am doing a good job with this story. Your opinion means a lot to me.