The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "More Questions for Mom"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from oNray
Jumping in from nowhere I can say that your story was easy to understand, interesting and well writen. You were able to get my attention and hold it
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Jumping in from nowhere I can say that your story was easy to understand, interesting and well writen. You were able to get my attention and hold it
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks. That hard to do starting in the middle.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Summary
The more James delves into his family background the worse it gets.
The poor lad is going down a similar road to my Kate. The pair of them will end up in a mental ward!
Another intriguing chapter.
Ron
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Hi Summary
The more James delves into his family background the worse it gets.
The poor lad is going down a similar road to my Kate. The pair of them will end up in a mental ward!
Another intriguing chapter.
Ron
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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I spent some time on a few mental wards myself (not in Florida) and It was the best things that I ever did. Glad you continue to like this.
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Sorry, the spellchecker changed your name to Summary! Ron
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, How agonising is this time between James and his mother. I've heard of tangled webs, but this plot is also extremely dramatic and highly emotional. In the background is the dreadful history of the murders. Giddy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Oh, How agonising is this time between James and his mother. I've heard of tangled webs, but this plot is also extremely dramatic and highly emotional. In the background is the dreadful history of the murders. Giddy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much for the awesome 6 stars. I am thrilled you continue to enjoy it.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
The more james delves into how much his mother knew about Dad's activities, the more Mom appears to slip into denial. In reality what you describe verges on catatonic schizophrenia . I watches patients with this severe disorder many times during my graduate school days when I worked with mental patients. They often slipped in and out of reality just as Mon does when something is too horrible to accept.
now James thinks Mon knew enough that she could be charged as an accomplice to some of Dad's crimes. James knows that his mother was under Dad's control and certainly not guilty of any crime, but she needs an attorney to protect her rights.
Another well researched and well researched. six star chapter.
love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Roge
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Hi Valerie:)
The more james delves into how much his mother knew about Dad's activities, the more Mom appears to slip into denial. In reality what you describe verges on catatonic schizophrenia . I watches patients with this severe disorder many times during my graduate school days when I worked with mental patients. They often slipped in and out of reality just as Mon does when something is too horrible to accept.
now James thinks Mon knew enough that she could be charged as an accomplice to some of Dad's crimes. James knows that his mother was under Dad's control and certainly not guilty of any crime, but she needs an attorney to protect her rights.
Another well researched and well researched. six star chapter.
love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Roge
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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You are right, Mom has committed not crime but does need an attorney to look out for her rights.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
This story just keeps getting worse, especially for James' mother. The poor thing probably knows what happened to Marie Anne, but her brain has blocked the memory in an attempt to save her from insanity. I feel sorry for James as his attempt to find out more about his father may have put his mom over the edge. But if doesn't do it the police will and that could even be worse. If I were reading this book I wouldn't put it down until all the mystery was solved! You are a talented writer and artist, as well....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Hi Smurph,
This story just keeps getting worse, especially for James' mother. The poor thing probably knows what happened to Marie Anne, but her brain has blocked the memory in an attempt to save her from insanity. I feel sorry for James as his attempt to find out more about his father may have put his mom over the edge. But if doesn't do it the police will and that could even be worse. If I were reading this book I wouldn't put it down until all the mystery was solved! You are a talented writer and artist, as well....blessings, chey
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Thanks so much for your awesome comments. I am thrilled you are enjoying this.
Comment from Janie King
Girl you leave me in a twilight zone scene everytime..this is anxiety at its max...this is very well-written..his grandfather slept with his sister which made his grandfather his father and his siter his mother..that's the twilight zone. God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Girl you leave me in a twilight zone scene everytime..this is anxiety at its max...this is very well-written..his grandfather slept with his sister which made his grandfather his father and his siter his mother..that's the twilight zone. God bless.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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The difficult part is how is the family going to deal with the news,
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you've got that right...where is the grandma...if the father had sex with the daughter, making him the father and the sister his mother..where was or is grandma..there had to be a grandma since the man had a daughter..until tomorrow..God bless.
Comment from Eldercrone
What an interesting story you are concocting here! I'm a super mystery fan, so I may very well go back and read this one from the beginning. Your plot appears intriguing; your characters are believable (Well, I'm not really sure about the mother--she seems to move in and out of denial pretty easily).A couple of things I noticed: you say "hintged" but mean "hinted." The word "realization" seem awkward--maybe "memory" or "understanding" --in the sentence, "... As the realization of that night became clearer." finally the next sentence, "Afraid that at any moment she would slip back into denial," is incomplete. Hope these details are helpful.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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What an interesting story you are concocting here! I'm a super mystery fan, so I may very well go back and read this one from the beginning. Your plot appears intriguing; your characters are believable (Well, I'm not really sure about the mother--she seems to move in and out of denial pretty easily).A couple of things I noticed: you say "hintged" but mean "hinted." The word "realization" seem awkward--maybe "memory" or "understanding" --in the sentence, "... As the realization of that night became clearer." finally the next sentence, "Afraid that at any moment she would slip back into denial," is incomplete. Hope these details are helpful.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Mom has been a victim of her husband for more than 20 years. She is not particularly stable and her mental state is seriously in question. Thanks for pointing out the spags. I'll go back over this chapter and make the changes you suggested.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha, I too, become worried of Mom and her 'sanity'. But why does James think she needs an attorney? Can she be believed as an accomplish to her husband? This is getting more and more serious...
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Hi, Sasha, I too, become worried of Mom and her 'sanity'. But why does James think she needs an attorney? Can she be believed as an accomplish to her husband? This is getting more and more serious...
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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James simply wants to protect her. The police obviously will want to speak with her and she is quite frail at this point. An attorney will make sure she is treated fairly.
Comment from joann r romei
This is good, some of the lines are a bit overused try to think of original statement s to describe the emotions of the boy. The scene is tense and should =go a bit slower to make it more dramatic, it is good though.
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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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This is good, some of the lines are a bit overused try to think of original statement s to describe the emotions of the boy. The scene is tense and should =go a bit slower to make it more dramatic, it is good though.
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Thanks. I appreciate your suggestions. I'll go back over this chapter and see what I can do to improve it.l
Comment from RebelRose
hintged ...hinted
Sounds like Mom is back in denial. All those years, she must have suspected something but shut it all out. It is quite a lot to deal with so it is understandable she would retreat within herself.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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hintged ...hinted
Sounds like Mom is back in denial. All those years, she must have suspected something but shut it all out. It is quite a lot to deal with so it is understandable she would retreat within herself.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Thanks for catching that. One of these days I'll learn to type!